I HATE YOU

[Naya_Daur]

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[urs4evasomdev]

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[Naya_Daur]

I am very statisfied as u have clearly understood my emotions,I am grateful to u as u have devoted ur precious time to give a full review to my post.

Thanks a Lot!!!

[urs4evasomdev]

The poem speaks its own story!
whatever it told me is what i have written

god blesss

[Tosha]

hmmm... well the use of IHATE YOU is over done.

The poem is self-explainatory.

[urs4evasomdev]

I feel that the words I Hate you is over done, ur right
but i also feel that, that is done for a reason!
to show how much he hates her,
those words just can't stop coming to his mind, mouth and heart, now that he is on the verge of his death,
u cant help but feel for the person, what a way to die, out of hatred,
the only thing he has left in him is the hatred,
becoz the amount he loved her, and then it was such a shock to his soul when she reacted in that manner,
so all the love has turned to hatred!
i realy do like this poem, for the feelings in it!
many people are going thru this rite now,
many cut their wrists, i feel the author has done justice to most of those people who feel this way.

[Tosha]

I understand what you mean and how the author might be feeling ... and the range of anger filling deep within him can be felt too ... but excessive use of I hate you or any word used repeatively only makes the poem dull to read. just in a tecnecial way

[urs4evasomdev]

hmmmmmmmmmmmm

yes true!

[Naya_Daur]

I understand what you mean and how the author might be feeling ... and the range of anger filling deep within him can be felt too ... but excessive use of I hate you or any word used repeatively only makes the poem dull to read. just in a tecnecial way

thanks for the review Tosha ji,

[mili_genie]

really too good ..... all about goes towords hate.... nice keep it up ... burning ji....

[Naya_Daur]

I was busy for some days ,so I cant  reply to this thread properly,so I am doing it now

Yes, Tosha JI, I too felt that Hate word is used excessively,But When someone is in Pain,its natural for him to scream,burst out his feelings in anger,Its not just hate towards any ordinary person.Its hate Towards that person which is more important than His life.In this world, Lovers choose 2 paths ,if they fail to get desired person's love.

First, they try to hurt that person
Second,They hurt themselves

I choose later than former,to express my feelings n tried to put emotions in words.

Also Minu had clearly ,post down the purpose of repeating Hate

Once again Thanks for ur precious comments

I understand what you mean and how the author might be feeling ... and the range of anger filling deep within him can be felt too ... but excessive use of I hate you or any word used repeatively only makes the poem dull to read. just in a tecnecial way

[Naya_Daur]

really too good ..... all about goes towords hate.... nice keep it up ... burning ji....

Thanks a lottt, Mili Ji,

one thing I would like to say,Although There is so Much Hate,, But this Heart still Beats for her,, Desiires are still Burning n will keep on Burniing...!!!

[sweet_raabii]

one thing I would like to say,Although There is so Much Hate,, But this Heart still Beats for her,, Desiires are still Burning n will keep on Burniing...!!!

aap accept nahi kar pa rahe hu ke tht how can she leave you
now you feel hate for her app ko us ki personality se , us ke pore physical character se nafrat ho rahi hai but still you Love her coz you thinking about the days when you were happy with her. And as you say "Desires r still burning" it means tht you have expecting or wishing to get her back....

[Tosha]

I understand what you mean and how the author might be feeling ... and the range of anger filling deep within him can be felt too ... but excessive use of I hate you or any word used repeatively only makes the poem dull to read. just in a tecnecial way

thanks for the review Tosha ji,

Pleasure is all Mine ... this is what this section is ment for ... !!!

Just to repeat myself ... use of different words with similar meaning insted of the same word ... has following positives:-

1. It makes the poem look good
2. It makes the Poem good to read
3. reading the same word can be boring.
4. use of another word of same meaning gives better meaning in a similar way.
e.g. Hate = detest
     
      In the very first sentence
      instef of Ihate you i hate you i hate you, screams my heart
     
      of heatred, detest and range screams my heart could give a focused and intence impression.

Just my point of view ... i ant a great poetess to check you for anything ... but as this a place for discussion i'm putting my thoughts infront of you. Kindly do not take it in a deffiencive way

Wish you keep coming with good poems.

[Naya_Daur]

I understand what you mean and how the author might be feeling ... and the range of anger filling deep within him can be felt too ... but excessive use of I hate you or any word used repeatively only makes the poem dull to read. just in a tecnecial way

thanks for the review Tosha ji,

Pleasure is all Mine ... this is what this section is ment for ... !!!

Just to repeat myself ... use of different words with similar meaning insted of the same word ... has following positives:-

1. It makes the poem look good
2. It makes the Poem good to read
3. reading the same word can be boring.
4. use of another word of same meaning gives better meaning in a similar way.
e.g. Hate = detest
     
      In the very first sentence
      instef of Ihate you i hate you i hate you, screams my heart
     
      of heatred, detest and range screams my heart could give a focused and intence impression.

Just my point of view ... i ant a great poetess to check you for anything ... but as this a place for discussion i'm putting my thoughts infront of you. Kindly do not take it in a deffiencive way

Wish you keep coming with good poems.

thanks

one thing I would like to say,Although There is so Much Hate,, But this Heart still Beats for her,, Desiires are still Burning n will keep on Burniing...!!!

aap accept nahi kar pa rahe hu ke tht how can she leave you
now you feel hate for her app ko us ki personality se , us ke pore physical character se nafrat ho rahi hai but still you Love her coz you thinking about the days when you were happy with her. And as you say "Desires r still burning" it means tht you have expecting or wishing to get her back....

thanks