Is this Love??? (Shikha)

[Shikha12]

Can you Tell me Something,
Can you Just Tell me Why...
Why it Always Feels so Difficult,
To Bid you Good Bye..??

Why, Every time when we part,
I want to hold you Tight...
Deep Inside my Heart, And
Shut Closed in my Sight...

Why, That every Rose you gave,
I forever, want to Keep...
and Each Moment My love for you,
Becomes Deep Even Deep...

Why, My Soul feels your Touch,
And I felt so very Complete...
Why, With very thought of you,
My Heart Skips a Beat...

Why, I want to Embrace you,
Listen beating of your Heart...
The Promise that words can't make,
That We shall never Part...

Hey Can you tell me Something?
Can you Just Tell me Why??
I feel like "I am in Love"
and Need Positive Reply...


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[Tosha]

Can you Tell me Something,
Can you Just Tell me Why...
Why it Always Feels so Difficult,
To Bid you Good Bye..??

The poetess is questioning a person she feels close to, (in her imaginations). She appears to be in the moment of doubt, feeling difficult and not sure of why is she feeling this attraction and sense of bonding with this person.

Why, Every time when we part,
I want to hold you Tight...
Deep Inside my Heart, And
Shut Closed in my Sight...

She says that she never wants to let go this person and always wants him close to her.

Why, That every Rose you gave,
I forever, want to Keep...
and Each Moment My love for you,
Becomes Deep Even Deep...

She is surprised at her own act, and is wondering why does she treasure every memory and smallest gift given by him.

Why, My Soul feels your Touch,
And I felt so very Complete...
Why, With very thought of you,
My Heart Skips a Beat...

She has begun feeling complete with this person and can feel their souls united. She even realizes that her heart is full of emotions for this person and that she can feel a sweet pain and skip a beat of her heart with every thought of this person.

Why, I want to Embrace you,
Listen beating of your Heart...
The Promise that words can't make,
That We shall never Part...

She further wants to solve the mysterious feelings that are bubbling within her and is still puzzled with the feelings that promise her of being united with this person.

Hey Can you tell me Something?
Can you Just Tell me Why??
I feel like "I am in Love"
and Need Positive Reply...

Now she is putting a straight question and accepting some answer from this person … and then she confesses that she is in love wants a positive reply from her lover.

[Tosha]

Shikha di, bahut hi khoobsurat likha hai aap ne … mujhe bahut accha laga.

Haan ek do choti se mistake hai … and I’ll try and do my job best :wink:

Sabse pahele aap ne rhyming acche se maintain ki hai. And poem ko poem ka look diya hai.. Jo bahut crucial hota hai.. ek acchi poem ki liye. Though sequential hai and flow accha hai.

Bas ek aadh jagta shayed thode acche words use ho sakte the. I’ll tell you how.

[Ravi_Dave]

Pehle to maaf kijiyega koi galti ho mujhse to, kyun pehli baar use kar raha hoon,

Doosri baat ke bohat hi accha likha hain.

1st stanza:

The poetress is in anguish and pain and asking herself questions,
Questions to why she felt pain on saying farewell to her beloved,
Fact that she is questioning herself as if she was questioning someone close,
She feels pain and restless when she says 'Bye' and tries to keep away from thinking of that person.

2nd stanza:

She feels hurt when they part so she does not let go and keeps the person in her memories,
And she does not want to let go of him so keeps him in her heart,
Whilst he keeps residing in her eyes as she cannot think and see anything else apart from him.

3rd Stanza:

She reminese's the times spent with her beloved,
And treasures the moment she has been with him,
Remembering these moments and symbols of affection makes her yearn more for him,
which in turn makes her grow more fonder of his generosity and sweet loving nature.

4th Stanza:

She has built close bond and even her soul feels the love recieved,
She feels shes got what she had always dreamt of and just glimpses of him makes her feel complete,
She thinks about him at every beat of the heart,
And her beat is skipped (very stylistic way of saying he is all she needs to live and no missing heart beat can harm her if he is with her, even if its just in memories, therefore, he is more important than the richest neccesity of life).

5th Stanza:

She clearly feels his absence and wants him close,
At the same time she feels that he is ignorant as he does not follow what the heart signals,
She feels neglected and abandoned and heartbroken possibly because he walked away,
There was no promise made but the bond seems to have broken so she feels possessive and believes they are destined for each other and will never be separate,

Last Stanza:

She is still in state of confusion and wants answers to 'why'?
Why she feels so close and affectionate to him,
Why she is starting to fall in Love,
The fact that she wants to get a positive answer can seem pushy where she wants the other person to look him back, and wants him to feel the guilt that if she feels that way then he should comfort her. This may seem pushy and emotional blackmail as it leaves the other person in slight confusion.


Overall, this is amzaing piece of work and i would like to apologise if my interpretation was off the tangent, Please feel free to critique my interpretation.