Tu hi bata main kaya karu....

[Pooja]

Ashaq hai, Tarap hai, main hu aor yah tanha raat
Tu hi bata main kaya karu….
Dil se na jaaye, ek pal ko bhi tera khayal
Tu hi bata main kaya karu….
Band karty hi ankhon ko, tere chune ka ho jo ahsaas
Tu hi bata main kaya karu…..
Barrati saanso mai, chadar ki silwate jab ho hatho mai
Tu hi bata main kaya karu…..
Ashaq ankhon mai, Tarap saanson mai aor main in Tanhan raato mai
Tu hi bata mai kaya karu…….


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[pinky]

Hey Pooja!
This Shayari makes the reader feel your pain..
the words chosen to express the feeling of separation from your beloved one are really simple and easy but the message is still conveyed exactly the way it should be..
I really appreciate your work and keep it up!
All the Best!

[niraj_191]

hey i got a chance to answer this poetry in word actully
i have given answer in poetry....

putting this poem in this forum indicates that you are crazy about this poem..

according to me,
there is no other world if you escape him from her life.

[phoenix]

nice poem pooja ji,
in this poem i can feel that the poet is disturbed with present  his condition and so he or she is asking the same person who gave the pain to give him the medicine for pain . thats it

[nirbhay]

This Poem is actually Inspired of Dard-e-Judai


Here the Poetess has just described about the pain of desparetion of her beloved, since she is quite alone wid her alone feelings of love so she is asking her beloved what to do??

[Tosha]

Ashaq hai, Tarap hai, main hu aor yah tanha raat
Tu hi bata main kaya karu….
Dil se na jaaye, ek pal ko bhi tera khayal
Tu hi bata main kaya karu….

Here the poetess is all in love and yet she feels alone ... so she cries out to her lover in the lonlyness that sarrounds her and demands for an answer that is fair for her

Band karty hi ankhon ko, tere chune ka ho jo ahsaas
Tu hi bata main kaya karu…..
Barrati saanso mai, chadar ki silwate jab ho hatho mai
Tu hi bata main kaya karu…..
Ashaq ankhon mai, Tarap saanson mai aor main in Tanhan raato mai
Tu hi bata mai kaya karu……

Here the poetess misses hir lover and can feel the touch of her lover ieven while asleep ... and this disturbs her.

an intence feeling of lonloness and a misrible feeling of missing has been described

It is amazing Pooja Ji

[sadaf idrisi]

bahot hi acha likha hai aapne pooja ji
padh aisa lag raha hai ki likhne waale ka sara dard alfaazo mein utar aaya ho,
aapka ye dard her sache pyaar kerne walo jo judai ke dard ko bardast ker raha ho , usse apna sa lagega
very nice
realy

[mrkotians]

pooojaa.a... kavayitaa... aap ka jawab nahin...
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[Saba_Saba]

Ashaq hai, Tarap hai, main hu aor yah tanha raat
Tu hi bata main kaya karu….
Dil se na jaaye, ek pal ko bhi tera khayal
Tu hi bata main kaya karu….
Band karty hi ankhon ko, tere chune ka ho jo ahsaas
Tu hi bata main kaya karu…..
Barrati saanso mai, chadar ki silwate jab ho hatho mai
Tu hi bata main kaya karu…..
Ashaq ankhon mai, Tarap saanson mai aor main in Tanhan raato mai
Tu hi bata mai kaya karu…….

IS poem ko padh kar judayi ka gehra ehsaas hota hai
Poetess tanhayi ke ehsaas se ghiri huyi hai ... apne premi ko apne haalat bata rahi ... aur us se shikwa kar rahi hai ke pyar me hone ke baawajood mera yeh haal hai ... woh bataye k kare ....
lafzo ko bohat hi khubsurti se piroya hai ... overall its very nice poem

[chitralsony]

 nice poem poja ji

[smardia]

Simple Saral Shabd hain,
Gehre dil ko chhute jazbaat hain,
Bechaini aur kuchh n kar sakne ka ehsaas hai,
Akelepan...virah vedna ki muuk pukaar hai...
Poojaji kamaal hai...

Thanks to Chitralsonyji urf Taibaji jo is teen saal purane thread ko khoj layee...

Ashaq hai, Tarap hai, main hu aor yah tanha raat
Tu hi bata main kaya karu….
Dil se na jaaye, ek pal ko bhi tera khayal
Tu hi bata main kaya karu….
Band karty hi ankhon ko, tere chune ka ho jo ahsaas
Tu hi bata main kaya karu…..
Barrati saanso mai, chadar ki silwate jab ho hatho mai
Tu hi bata main kaya karu…..
Ashaq ankhon mai, Tarap saanson mai aor main in Tanhan raato mai
Tu hi bata mai kaya karu…….


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http://www.yoindia.com/forums/here-vp370744.html#370744

[twinkle-star]

achey words use kiye hian

[jaindost]

good one dear......
work appreciated....