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«Reply #15 on: November 06, 2008, 06:26:18 AM » |
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I love you cross my heart
Depth of my heart longs for you
I love you more then myself
you’re the shining star beneath my heart
I need you more close to me my love
My heart keeps longing for tender moment
Which we use to share a one special love
You ask me why since we should part
Bring back the past moments which we wish for
I will be the only one who will pick the pieces for broken heart
_________honeyrose_____________
I Hate You Honey !!!! puchho KyuN?? Upar se gayaa...by paas....Mujhe English Nahi aata !! To Aub Iska Translation Samzaao. |
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«Reply #16 on: November 06, 2008, 06:30:36 AM » |
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dead heart
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«Reply #17 on: November 06, 2008, 08:09:54 PM » |
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ther is a technical fault in the poem definetely but im no one to pic out mistakes...all i noe is that the poem gives the feelings of the poet...thats important..no one is perfect and shall neva be but as long as the poet expresses himself...perfect...i love the poem...it flows like the river of tears....well done
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honeyrose
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«Reply #18 on: November 06, 2008, 08:52:19 PM » |
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ther is a technical fault in the poem definetely but im no one to pic out mistakes...all i noe is that the poem gives the feelings of the poet...thats important..no one is perfect and shall neva be but as long as the poet expresses himself...perfect...i love the poem...it flows like the river of tears....well done
Am sorry may be i could not have pharse well
dead heart thanks for reading...... |
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«Reply #19 on: November 06, 2008, 08:58:22 PM » |
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ther is a technical fault in the poem definetely but im no one to pic out mistakes...all i noe is that the poem gives the feelings of the poet...thats important..no one is perfect and shall neva be but as long as the poet expresses himself...perfect...i love the poem...it flows like the river of tears....well done
plz be dont diplomatic in your answer one place u say there is a technical fault and other line u say so many good things first you decide what you want to say or dont say anything at all just dont be diplomatic it sounds irritaing |
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dead heart
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«Reply #20 on: November 07, 2008, 11:12:37 PM » |
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my answer isnt diplomatic at all...read it carefully..the simple words may tell u wat i wanted to say...sry for ur if it is irritating....
and honey jii...u dnt need to say sry...u dint rite the poem for me...u rite well n keep riting plzz...
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«Reply #21 on: November 08, 2008, 12:52:44 AM » |
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I love you cross my heart
Depth of my heart longs for you
I love you more then myself
you’re the shining star beneath my heart
I need you more close to me my love
My heart keeps longing for tender moment
Which we use to share a one special love
You ask me why since we should part
Bring back the past moments which we wish for
I will be the only one who will pick the pieces for broken heart
_________honeyrose_____________
Honeyrose this poem is expressed with full of inner feelings.
Some lines may need modifications, but still very impressive.
My heart said I Love You Too |
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honeyrose
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«Reply #22 on: November 08, 2008, 10:38:47 AM » |
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Honeyrose this poem is expressed with full of inner feelings.
Some lines may need modifications, but still very impressive.
My heart said I Love You Too
Thanks for reading Sonia ..and finding mistakes too..
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honeyrose
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«Reply #23 on: November 08, 2008, 10:47:48 AM » |
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my answer isnt diplomatic at all...read it carefully..the simple words may tell u wat i wanted to say...sry for ur if it is irritating....
and honey jii...u dnt need to say sry...u dint rite the poem for me...u rite well n keep riting plzz...
Sorry D heart i was not able to write well ...
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«Reply #24 on: November 08, 2008, 11:02:48 AM » |
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Nice One Didi,.
Expression Jaise Bhi Ho, Dil Se samajhne Ki Chahat Honi Chahiye,.
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«Reply #25 on: November 08, 2008, 04:06:53 PM » |
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Nice One Didi,.
Expression Jaise Bhi Ho, Dil Se samajhne Ki Chahat Honi Chahiye,.
Shukriya Azeem bhai ...  |
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«Reply #26 on: November 08, 2008, 04:19:29 PM » |
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Sorry D heart i was not able to write well ...
thanks...
Honeyrose jii, you expressed yourself very well so dont say sorry etc. Good work. |
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«Reply #27 on: November 08, 2008, 04:30:44 PM » |
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Honeyrose jii, you expressed yourself very well
so dont say sorry etc. Good work.
You say there are some modifications require
and now you say i expressed well
Please i dont need sympathy..
Thanks... . |
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«Reply #28 on: November 08, 2008, 04:52:11 PM » |
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You say there are some modifications require
and now you say i expressed well
Please i dont need sympathy..
Thanks... .
Modification means some rytham i said dear. Dont take it to yr heart. Lines are created by you wonderfully. It is true and not SYMPATHY ok. |
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«Reply #29 on: November 08, 2008, 05:06:03 PM » |
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Modification means some rytham i said dear.
Dont take it to yr heart. Lines are created
by you wonderfully. It is true and not SYMPATHY ok.
What a author presents is his or her feelings There should not be from others any ill feelings If anyone is not satisfied in any sense Then it is good for the person to use common sense Get whatever you can from the presentation And be satisfied with what you have at your destination Keep writing as u r Honey Ji To all othrs no hard feelings |
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