If something goes wrong .....

by Bhupinder Kaur on April 10, 2013, 05:04:22 PM
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If my hairs will turn grey,
Beauty will fade away,
Youth will welcome old age,
Would you be able to accept me that way???
If something goes wrong .....
& no longer, I would be the same as of now

If wrinkles cover me,
Skin will lose the shine,
Eyes will weak to see,
Ears will fail to hear,
Lips will dry up...
Would you be able to recognize me???
If something goes wrong .....
& no longer, I would be the same as of now

If on 2legs, I can’t stand & walk,
With 2hands, I can’t pick & hold on ,
Unable to write & direct,
What I mean & need..
Would you be able to comfort me???
If something goes wrong .....
& no longer, I would be the same as of now

If my memory goes off..
Hard for me to recall,
What I said & heard...
With breaking voice,
& words deadly falling on
Would you be able to understand me???
If something goes wrong .....
& no longer, I would be the same as of now

Knowingly / unknowingly ..
If I will fall for someone
Then he will leave me & go
If it will break me
& I will ready to give up
As being single & all alone
With no one near to me
Would you dare???
To b there..... with me
If something goes wrong .....
& no longer, I would be the same as of now


If with my body & soul,
I will give you myself whole
Ur Happiness & pain I will share,
Sipping your tears,
I will sweeten your life,
Would you be able to love me
With your Heart & Soul
If something goes wrong .....
& no longer, I would be the same as of now

If I feel like dying
Or near to my death
Till my last sentence & breathe
Would you be able to come,
To say  goodbye to me.
As I will fly in the skie
& will free you from me
If something goes wrong .....
& no longer, I would be the same as of now
Tell me...
Would you still place me???
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«Reply #1 on: April 10, 2013, 05:20:55 PM »
good
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Advo.RavinderaRavi
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«Reply #2 on: April 11, 2013, 02:30:26 AM »

So Nice.
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ghayal_shayar
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«Reply #3 on: May 23, 2013, 02:51:48 AM »
3rd last paragraph, 5th line, it should be "I will be ready"

2nd paragraph 3rd line, the line is grammatically wrong so do check that...


Talking about feelings and expression, you have made ur feelings to reach me as a reader and that is the achievement of a poet... So again well written may be it went a bit far too long, but yes a well written poem... Plz do keep writing...!!
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«Reply #4 on: May 23, 2013, 03:02:32 AM »
3rd last paragraph, 5th line, it should be "I will be ready"

2nd paragraph 3rd line, the line is grammatically wrong so do check that...


Talking about feelings and expression, you have made ur feelings to reach me as a reader and that is the achievement of a poet... So again well written may be it went a bit far too long, but yes a well written poem... Plz do keep writing...!!
Thanks a lot, jus not like a reader u read my poem, but really figured out my mistakes well. So nice of you..
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ghayal_shayar
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«Reply #5 on: May 23, 2013, 03:09:35 AM »
The pleasure is all mine dear... juz do keep writing the same way...
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Bhupinder Kaur
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«Reply #6 on: May 23, 2013, 03:13:16 AM »
The pleasure is all mine dear... juz do keep writing the same way...
When one is short of Words, then one SMILE works better thn any thing else:-)so accept mine one...
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ghayal_shayar
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«Reply #7 on: May 23, 2013, 03:21:23 AM »
whole heartedly accepted maam...!! Usual Smile
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