The moments we share!!!!

by BeNam on January 29, 2006, 01:01:47 PM
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Naya_Daur
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«Reply #30 on: February 20, 2006, 03:24:28 PM »
Time will never change
the way she really feels
the love she doesn't have for me
time will never heal.
Time will never change the fact
that she lives very close to me
but is very far

Time will never take away this pain
or dry up all the tears
and no matter how much I pray
time won't cure my fears.
time can't stop me from loving her
as long as I live
all i've ever wanted
time could never give


If there's one thing time can do
it can give us a chance to be
the best of friends forever
just that special girl and me.


last paragraph mein mujhe lagta hai kuch gardbad ho gayi,,its not the thing i want,but if anyone reads this, can modify


u r welcome benam ji,, i would like to have ur views of my post in critics n review forum
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BeNam
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«Reply #31 on: February 20, 2006, 03:49:52 PM »
Hey Jeet  Last 2 para's are really good, I think you are doing really good! I am changing the 1st para please dont mind its not what you asked for! But I think this is what you want to say!

Time will never change, the way she feels,
The pain that I have, never seems to heal,
The girl I love lives next door,
but I am not in her heart any more!

I hope you like it! I am not a critic, I hope I was in line with what you want to convey!
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Pooja
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«Reply #32 on: February 20, 2006, 04:05:40 PM »
Good job Jeet!!! Nice lines BeNam!!
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BeNam
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«Reply #33 on: February 20, 2006, 04:10:04 PM »
Thanks Pooja ji!
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Naya_Daur
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«Reply #34 on: February 20, 2006, 04:14:07 PM »
Quote from: "BeNam"
Hey Jeet  Last 2 para's are really good, I think you are doing really good! I am changing the 1st para please dont mind its not what you asked for! But I think this is what you want to say!

Time will never change, the way she feels,
The pain that I have, never seems to heal,
The girl I love lives next door,
but I am not in her heart any more!

I hope you like it! I am not a critic, I hope I was in line with what you want to convey!


meanings r same just shuffling of words thnks for ur effort!!
apna naam toh bataiye jiska naam ho usse benam kehna accha nai lagta
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Naya_Daur
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«Reply #35 on: February 20, 2006, 04:15:41 PM »
Quote from: "Pooja"
Good job Jeet!!! Nice lines BeNam!!


thnks pooja ji!!!
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BeNam
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«Reply #36 on: February 20, 2006, 08:03:35 PM »
To love and be loved in return, Is all matter of fate,
Desire has caused all the pain, Very few find the soulmate!
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Naya_Daur
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«Reply #37 on: February 21, 2006, 02:55:37 AM »
"Give your crowns and wealth
But not your heart away;

Give your all pearls and rubies
But keep your Dreams with u."

Someone advice me that,
But I am in twenties,
No use to talk with me
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BeNam
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«Reply #38 on: February 24, 2006, 04:34:20 AM »
In search of a dream, I sail,
Only thing I carry is her last mail,
To find her, is the only moto,
One thing is for sure I will prevail!
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Naya_Daur
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«Reply #39 on: February 25, 2006, 02:33:46 PM »
MY love it should be silent, being deep —
And being very peaceful should be still —
Still as the utmost depths of ocean keep —
Serenely silent as some mighty hill.

Yet is my love so great it needs must fill
With very joy the inmost heart of me,
The joy of dancing branches on the hill
The joy of leaping waves upon the sea.
(borrowed from my friend)
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BeNam
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«Reply #40 on: February 25, 2006, 05:15:10 PM »
Cool Jeet!

To Love means peace,
Like the silence of wind and the trees!
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shayar_dildaar
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«Reply #41 on: February 26, 2006, 12:03:29 AM »
All ya guys just rock as usual...love to read them all..[/color]
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BeNam
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«Reply #42 on: February 26, 2006, 01:07:44 AM »
Thanks Praji!
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Naya_Daur
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«Reply #43 on: February 26, 2006, 10:03:21 AM »
Thanks for appreciating S_D,,
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BeNam
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«Reply #44 on: February 26, 2006, 08:28:03 PM »
Watch the bird sing so well,
Does this ring a bell!
Its a feeling that words cant tell,
Its a feeling only heart can spell!
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