apni parchayii se

by suman59 on November 21, 2012, 03:56:24 PM
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Apni parchayii se jab takraoge
Dekhna ek roj tokkar khaoge

Aaine ko jhoot ki aadat kahan
Aaine ko kis tarah jhutlaoge

Tajabo.. ehsaas hota hai mujhe
Raaste mein tum hii tum kaam aaoge

Dhoop aa baitegi sar pe ek din
Dhoop se agar is kadhar ghabraoge

Sach ka daman chodna accha nahi
Sach batati hu bahut pachtaoge

Ye hai mere mashwara tumhe pyare
Dhur ho jaoge to mar jaoge..


अपनी परछाई से जब टकराओगे
देखना इक रोज़ ठोकर खाओगे !!

आईने  को झूठ की आदत कहाँ
आईने को किस तरह झुटलाओगे !!

तजब्बो ! एहसास होता है मुझे
रास्ते में तुम ही तुम कम आओगे

धूप आ बैठेगी सर पे एक दिन,
धूप से गर इस कदर घाबराओगे !!

सच का दमन छोड़ना अच्छा नहीं
सच बताती हूँ बहुत पछताओगे !!

ये है मेरा मशवरा तुम्हे प्यारे,
दूर् हो जाओगे तो मार जाओगे
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«Reply #1 on: November 21, 2012, 04:06:27 PM »
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bahoot achcha likha hai aapne...badhaai
aakiri sher me "djur" ka matlab nahi samjh paaya
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«Reply #2 on: November 21, 2012, 04:15:39 PM »
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bahoot achcha likha hai aapne...badhaai
aakiri sher me "djur" ka matlab nahi samjh paaya

aap ka bahut bahut shukriya bekarar jee.

aakiri line aisa hai "door"  "दूर्" 

दूर् > distance
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«Reply #3 on: November 21, 2012, 04:31:23 PM »
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Bahut khoob likha aap ne sumanji....
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«Reply #4 on: November 21, 2012, 07:34:07 PM »
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Bahut khoob ,,
ghazab ke ehsaasoN se piroyee gayee is ghazal par dil daad haajir hai
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«Reply #5 on: November 21, 2012, 10:01:06 PM »
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Apni parchayii se jab takraoge
Dekhna ek roj tokkar khaoge

Aaine ko jhoot ki aadat kahan
Aaine ko kis tarah jhutlaoge

Tajabo.. ehsaas hota hai mujhe
Raaste mein tum hii tum kaam aaoge

Dhoop aa baitegi sar pe ek din
Dhoop se agar is kadhar ghabraoge

Sach ka daman chodna accha nahi
Sach batati hu bahut pachtaoge

Ye hai mere mashwara tumhe pyare
Dhur ho jaoge to mar jaoge..


अपनी परछाई से जब टकराओगे
देखना इक रोज़ ठोकर खाओगे !!

आईने  को झूठ की आदत कहाँ
आईने को किस तरह झुटलाओगे !!

तजब्बो ! एहसास होता है मुझे
रास्ते में तुम ही तुम कम आओगे

धूप आ बैठेगी सर पे एक दिन,
धूप से गर इस कदर घाबराओगे !!

सच का दमन छोड़ना अच्छा नहीं
सच बताती हूँ बहुत पछताओगे !!

ये है मेरा मशवरा तुम्हे प्यारे,
दूर् हो जाओगे तो मार जाओगे

nice
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«Reply #6 on: November 22, 2012, 12:50:58 AM »
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bahut khoob, dhero dad
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«Reply #7 on: November 22, 2012, 04:14:25 AM »
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bohut khoob maam , very nice creation,congrates
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«Reply #8 on: November 22, 2012, 04:23:55 AM »
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«Reply #9 on: November 22, 2012, 04:39:51 AM »
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bahut khoob suman ji aaj ka mera rau apka hua so nice
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«Reply #10 on: November 22, 2012, 05:18:37 AM »
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Behad Khubsurat ........Behad Pyaari Aur Behad Shandaar Cration Suman Ji.....
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«Reply #11 on: November 22, 2012, 10:36:32 AM »
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Suman Jee Aadaab!



WaaH waaH waaH jee kia kahne bahut khoob... badi hi umdaa
aur dilkash gazal kahi hai jee... Usual Smile

Sabhi ashaar behad umdaa rahe... Humari dheroN dili daad O
mubbarakbad kabul kijiye... Usual Smile


Likhate rahiye... aate rahiye...
Shaad O aabaad rahiye...

Khuda Hafez.. Usual Smile
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«Reply #12 on: November 22, 2012, 11:14:49 AM »
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aree waah suman aap ne to bohat khubsurat ghazal likhi hai ,...bohat c daad matla dil ko choo gaya ,.....
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«Reply #13 on: November 23, 2012, 06:09:16 PM »
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vvvvvvvvvv gud
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«Reply #14 on: November 26, 2012, 02:58:41 AM »
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Bahut khoob likha aap ne sumanji....

thank you Ritesh modi jii
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