Ghazal

by rahul soul on October 05, 2007, 05:45:27 AM
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:idea:         Zindagi ki har kahani beasar ho jayegi,
                  hum na honge to ye duniya dar-bader ho jayegi.
               
                  Pathar karke chodegi agar ruk jayegi,
                  chalte rahiye to fiza bhi humsafar ban jayegi.
             
                  Tumne hi sir chadai thi to ab chakho maza,
                  main na kehta tha ki duniya sardard ho jayegi.
           
                   Joognuon ko lekar raat roshan kijiye,
                   rasta suruj ka dekhoge to sehar ho jayegi.


                   "NM" But i have some changes
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«Reply #1 on: October 23, 2007, 02:11:39 AM »
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Nice.

(But Rahul jaisa wo poet ne likha hai waisa hi aap yahan share karte toh aur b accha hota. Aap ko kisii ka likha main changes nahi karni thi. )
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«Reply #2 on: October 23, 2007, 06:11:30 AM »
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Raply Karne K Liye Thanks, Roja G
                     Par mujhe laga ki isme kuch change karne chahiye so maine kiye. Main Likh to deta par ab to mujhe yaad hi nahi ki unhone kya likha tha. Par maine tabhi ise apna name nahi diya.
           

 Apne kuch likha nahi, main wait kar raha hun aapki shayri ki.
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«Reply #3 on: October 31, 2007, 05:35:39 PM »
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Nice Work,.
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«Reply #4 on: October 31, 2007, 07:22:11 PM »
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bahoot khoob RAHUL!!! Apki Mix Gazal pard kar jo man mai ayya wo hi likh rahi hu....

Zindagi ke her mayne poore ho jayege
Tum raho jo sung, zindagi ke her rang badal jayege

Patharo ke desh main, bahoot jakham khaye hai
Do jo hath mai hath, her jakham bhool jayege
Her kisi ne thukaraya hai mere wajood ko
De do koi bhi naam tum, ussi naam ki pehchan ho jayege

Her subah ek khalipan laai, her raat kati rone main
Sung muskura do agar tum, her din raat Bahaar ho jayege

Zindagi ke her mayne poore ho jayege
Tum raho jo sung, zindagi ke her rang badal jayege!!!!
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«Reply #5 on: November 01, 2007, 11:36:19 AM »
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Aapne Bhi Accha Likha Hai Didi,.
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«Reply #6 on: November 02, 2007, 09:06:20 AM »
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Thanks POOJA Ji.
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«Reply #7 on: November 02, 2007, 09:06:20 AM »
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Thanks POOJA Ji.
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«Reply #8 on: November 02, 2007, 09:06:20 AM »
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Thanks POOJA Ji.
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«Reply #9 on: November 03, 2007, 11:49:01 AM »
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again , bohut khubsurat ghazal he , ek jagah aapne ho jaye gi ki jagah ban jaye gi likha he doosre sher mai.N ager chahain tu us ko badal lai.N is tarah radif ki mutabiq ho jaye ha.
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