ish.q kee ham per bhi eenayat ajab hai,.......:Ghazals

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2 1 2 2, 2 2 1 2, 2 1 2 2
uss ke dil men rehne ki raahat ajab hai
saa.th uss ke chalne ki chahat ajab hai

bas uusee kee hee saamne sar jhukaaya
pyaa.r men dil kee her ebaadat ajab hai

khaa.b tootey aaNkhon ke to hum ne jaana
dar.d kee dil men ek hararat ajab hai

saath meiire rehte ho ek um.r se par
jo maiN souchun toh yeh rafaaqat ajab hai

bhool jaayun uskoh ye mumkin nahi hai
yaa.d uss koh karne ki aadat ajab hai...

aankh se dil men roo.h mei n yun hai utra
ish.q kee ham per bhi eenayat ajab hai

,laaiba shah,


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Re: ish.q kee ham per toh eenayat ajab hai,.......

«Reply #1 on: March 28, 2014, 05:38:57 PM »

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«Reply #2 on: March 28, 2014, 06:19:46 PM »

वाह....वाह....बहुत बहुत खूब....ढेरों दाद और दिली मुबारकबाद....


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«Reply #3 on: March 28, 2014, 06:30:13 PM »

Mindblowing Creation Laiba ji ..ek dum bemisaal aur khoobsurat Usual Smile

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Re: ish.q kee ham per toh eenayat ajab hai,.......

«Reply #4 on: March 28, 2014, 08:22:10 PM »

bahut bahut khoooooooob laaiba ji.. Usual Smile


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Re: ish.q kee ham per toh eenayat ajab hai,.......

«Reply #5 on: March 28, 2014, 08:26:47 PM »

Quote from: laaiba on March 28, 2014, 05:23:15 PM

uss ke dil men rehne ki raahat ajab hai
saa.th uss ke chalne ki chahat ajab hai

bas uusee ke hee saamne sar jhukaaya
pyaa.r men dil kee her ebaadat ajab hai

khaa.b tootey aaNkhon ke toh ye jaana
dar.d kee dil men ek hararat ajab hai

saath meiire rehte ho ek um.r se par
jo maiN souchun toh yeh rafaaqat ajab hai

bhool jaayun uskoh ye mumkin nahi hai
yaa.d uss koh karne ki aadat ajab hai...

aankh se dil men roo.h men utra youN
ish.q kee ham per toh eenayat ajab hai

,laaiba shah,

laaiba sahiba,
bahut achchi ghazal kahi hai, wah waaaah
.............aapka andaaz e kitabat ajab hai


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Re: ish.q kee ham per toh eenayat ajab hai,.......

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Re: ish.q kee ham per toh eenayat ajab hai,.......

«Reply #7 on: March 28, 2014, 08:42:24 PM »

uss ke dil men rehne ki raahat ajab hai
saa.th uss ke chalne ki chahat ajab hai

The above matla (sher) can be translated in two different behers

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if this is the beher

Faa - i - laa - tun, Faa - i - laa - tun, Faa - i - laa - tun
2 1 2 2 , 2 1 2 2 , 2 1 2 2

"hararat" and "rafaaqat", cant be used as qafia. if we talk about strict rules of classical poetry "ebaadat" and "enaayat" can also not be used.
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if this is the beher

Faa - i - laa - t, Maf - oo - lun, Faa - lun, Fa - oo - lun
2 1 2 1, 2 2 2 , 2 2 , 1 2 2

many of the lines go off the beher...

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Did'nt want to teach.... thought to leave my opinion. if it does'nt help, just ignore this msg, please.


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«Reply #8 on: March 28, 2014, 10:07:26 PM »

bahut sundar Laaiba ji.
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«Reply #9 on: March 28, 2014, 11:30:21 PM »

aap sabhee kaa bohat bohat shuqria
saini sir aapki hosla afzayi ka bohat shuqria....
Mohreram sir vb g aapki opinion hamare liye bohat mohteram hai ...seekhne ke amal men ghalatiyon se hi sabq milta hai ..apke points note ker liye hen dil se shukria ..ignorr isliye nhi kiya ke aap ne apna qeemati waqt iss podt pe dia hai jiska shayed aapkoh malal b hai...well shuqria aapki opinion ka......


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«Reply #10 on: March 29, 2014, 12:40:16 AM »

Quote from: laaiba on March 28, 2014, 05:23:15 PM

nice,ma'am


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«Reply #11 on: March 29, 2014, 01:50:36 AM »

Lajwaab Ghazal Laaiba Jee! Har ashaar ek se bad kar ek raha. Bohat hi emotional ghazal hai, mujhe behad pasand aayi hai.

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«Reply #12 on: March 29, 2014, 10:11:03 AM »

Bahut Khoob.


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«Reply #13 on: March 29, 2014, 12:45:26 PM »

waah super one I Like this ghazal...........


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Re: ish.q kee ham per bhi eenayat ajab hai,.......

«Reply #14 on: March 29, 2014, 04:47:40 PM »

Muhtarma laaiba shah sahiba! salam masnoon

baad atahiyaat

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Mohreram sir vb g aapki opinion hamare liye bohat mohteram hai ...seekhne ke amal men ghalatiyon se hi sabq milta hai ..apke points note ker liye hen dil se shukria ..ignorr isliye nhi kiya ke aap ne apna qeemati waqt iss podt pe dia hai jiska shayed aapkoh malal b hai...well shuqria aapki opinion ka......

aap ne malaal ki baat kahi, tu kehna chahen gay k aisa nahin hay... amooman yahan log is baat par naraaz hotay hen k un ki ghazal par koi tabsirah kiya jayay. un ki khaahish hoti hay kay jhooti hi sahi, faqat tareef ki jayay. aisi soorat main hamara ye tavaqu karna kay hamary msg ko khwah-ma-khwah ki tanqeed samjha jayay ga, kuch ghalat nahi. aur phir kuch aisa taasur bhe lag raha tha kay "maan na maan, main tera ustaad". lekin hamen ye jaan kar khushi hoi kay kuch log ilmi hawaalay say baat karty hen aur behtri ki taraf raaghib hen. sakht ravaiya na apnaanay par shukar guzaar bhe hen aap kay... aik darkhawast karna chaahen gay k hum khud is ilm kay shagird hen so ye "sir" hamen zeb nahi deta. aik baar pehlay bhe hum guzaarish kar chukay hen ab phir sahi...

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sub say pehlay hamaari taraf say bharpoor daad qabool kejay... aap ne beher bayan ki aur phir bilkul halki si tarameem kay baad ghazal ko dobara pesh kiya... hamaray naaqas ilm kay mutaabiq ghazal apni beher par mukamal tor par durust hay or ye bari baat hay...... ghazal buhat khoob hay... hum ghazal kay mazaameen par baat nahi karen gay, ku k ye apni apni soch par munhasir hay... (agar aap ko is main koi interest na ho k hum say ye ghalti ku hui hay tu aap aakhri para par move kar sakti hen)

ilmi havaalay say, aap nay jo beher bayaan ki hay yaani "faa-i-laa-tun, mus-taf-i-lun, faa-i-laa-tun" (2122/2212/2122) isay Hindustan kay maaya-naaz adeeb janaab Shams-ur-Rehman Farooqi Sahab apni kitaab "dars-e-balaaghat" men "behr-e-khafeef" ki saalim shakal likhtay hen or hum nay bhi unhi kay havaalay say apnay mazmoom "chapter-3" men is beher ko unhi kay mutabiq bayaan kiya hay. lekin hum ne baaki kay jin sahibaan ki kitaaben parhi hen wo sub is baat par mutafiq hen kay "behr-e-khafeef" kay araakeen ye hen "faa-i-laa-tun, mus-ta-faa-lun, faa-i-laa-tun" jo kay 2122/2122/2122 kay barabar he nikalti hay. jin ashaab ki baat hum kar rahay hen un ki ye kitaaben hen "chiraagh-e-sukhan by Yaas Azeem Abaadi, tafheem-al-arooz by Jamal-ud-Din Jamal, Behr-al-Fasaahat by Najm-ul-Ghani Najmi".

jis halqay ya ilaaqay men hum mojood hen wahan aap ki bayaan karda beher men hum ne aaj tak ake bhi ghazal nahi parhi aur na kitabon he men mili hay, ye hamaari kam-ilmi bhe hay. asatiza kay kalaam men bhi kahin nahi mili. behr-e-khafeef ko hamesha muzaahif shakalon men astemaal kiya gaya hay jin ki mash-hoor-ashkaal ye hen: -

faa-i-laa-tun, mu-faa-i-lun, faa-lun (hasti apni habaab ki si hay, Mir)
faa-i-laa-tun, mu-faa-i-lun, fa-i-lun (tum hamaaray kisi tarah na huay, Momin)
faa-i-laa-tun, mu-faa-i-lun, faa (jaao ab so raho sitaaro, )
faa-i-laa-tun, mu-faa-i-lun, faa-i-laa-tun (dil-e-mazTar tarap raha hay wa lekin, Daagh)
faa-i-laa-tun, mu-faa-i-lun (aye junoon teray haath say, na bacha ik qaba ka taar)

etc. (baaki books men say dekh kar likhi jaa sakti hen, yaad nahi hamen)

mumkin hay aap ki taraf is beher main kalaam mojood ho aur ye beher aam ho. agar aap ko is beher men mashaaheer main say kisi kay kalaam ka ilm ho, tu zaroor inaayat keejay ga.

aakhir men maazrat bhe chaahen gay kay aap ki ghazal ki beher ko samajh nahi sakay, hum ne is ki taqtee behr-e-ramal ki saalim musaddas shakal men ki, waja hum bayan kar he chukay hen. umeed hay hamaari baaton say kuch haasil na hua ho ga tu kuch nuqsaan bhe na puhncha ho ga...

aik baar phir bharpoor daad kay sath...
ba-qalam-e-khud
ahqar, vb jee


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