Jaane kitne mausam gujar gaye

by livingbytheday on November 30, 2012, 05:20:09 PM
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Bahut dino ke baad, aaj ek nayi ghazal pesh kar raha hu, umeed hain aap logo ko pasand aayegi.

Jaane kitne mausam gujar gaye
Saare pat_tey ped se utar gaye
Kabhi lout na paaye gaon ko
Jo kadam badha kar shehar gaye

Aakash taaktey  hain kamro se
Kahaan jaane panchee ke par gaye

Amaavasi raaton ke raahi kyu
Parchaayeeon se dar gaye

Koi raat din karta hain yaad
Woh dil churakar kidhar gaye

Puche bacche gaon ke dhoop mein
Kahaan chaayadaar sajar gaye

Kuch rokta hoga shehar mein
jo chaahkar bhi na ghar gaye

Deepak, mila koi bhi safar
Ghar bulata raha jidhar gaye
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«Reply #1 on: November 30, 2012, 05:29:19 PM »
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Bahut dino ke baad, aaj ek nayi ghazal pesh kar raha hu, umeed hain aap logo ko pasand aayegi.

Jaane kitne mausam gujar gaye
Saare pat_tey ped se utar gaye
Kabhi lout na paaye gaon ko
Jo kadam badha kar shehar gaye

Aakash taaktey  hain kamro se
Kahaan jaane panchee ke par gaye

Amaavasi raaton ke raahi kyu
Parchaayeeon se dar gaye

Koi raat din karta hain yaad
Woh dil churakar kidhar gaye

Puche bacche gaon ke dhoop mein
Kahaan chaayadaar sajar gaye

Kuch rokta hoga shehar mein
jo chaahkar bhi na ghar gaye

Deepak, mila koi bhi safar
Ghar bulata raha jidhar gaye


v. nice ghazal  Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #2 on: November 30, 2012, 05:31:09 PM »
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wah, janaab bahut hi ahchi peshkash rahi, maza aaya padh kar, meri dili daar qubool farmaaiye aur yuNhi likhte rahiye, khush rahiye.... Usual Smile Usual Smile
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«Reply #3 on: November 30, 2012, 05:33:09 PM »
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«Reply #4 on: November 30, 2012, 06:57:13 PM »
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Deepak jee, behtareen. bahut bahut khoob. Kaafi achhi lagi ye ghazal.
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«Reply #5 on: December 01, 2012, 02:34:28 AM »
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heleeow deepakji kahaan ho bhaai sab theek hai n aaj kee is laajawaab peshkash par dheron daad
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«Reply #6 on: December 01, 2012, 02:54:02 AM »
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v. nice ghazal  Applause Applause Applause Applause

bahut bahut shukriyaa
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«Reply #7 on: December 01, 2012, 03:06:03 AM »
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very nice
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«Reply #8 on: December 01, 2012, 05:40:21 AM »
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bahut  khubsurat  ghazal hai .  dheron  mubarakbad.
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«Reply #9 on: December 01, 2012, 09:10:37 AM »
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very nice
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«Reply #10 on: December 01, 2012, 11:27:51 AM »
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 Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #11 on: December 01, 2012, 11:34:08 AM »
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wah, janaab bahut hi ahchi peshkash rahi, maza aaya padh kar, meri dili daar qubool farmaaiye aur yuNhi likhte rahiye, khush rahiye.... Usual Smile Usual Smile

bahut bahut shukriyaa, for your kind words
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«Reply #12 on: December 01, 2012, 11:34:51 AM »
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Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause

bahut bahut shukriyaa
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«Reply #13 on: December 01, 2012, 11:39:09 AM »
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Deepak jee, behtareen. bahut bahut khoob. Kaafi achhi lagi ye ghazal.

thank you sir,
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«Reply #14 on: December 01, 2012, 01:09:13 PM »
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heleeow deepakji kahaan ho bhaai sab theek hai n aaj kee is laajawaab peshkash par dheron daad

thank you sir, yahi hu, thoda sa travel kar raha tha, toh was out of touch
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