NaheeN Thee, Ke Jo Hai / नहीं थी, कि जो है........Satish Shukla 'Raqeeb'

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«Reply #15 on: May 22, 2013, 12:58:46 PM »
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badee sakht radeef lee hai par shaandaar tareeqe se nibhaayaa hai dheron daad
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«Reply #16 on: May 22, 2013, 01:45:36 PM »
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ख्वाहिशे बोसा-ए-दिलदार नहीं थी, कि जो है
ज़िन्दगी हुस्न परस्तार नहीं थी, कि जो है

सब इसी मुल्क में रहते थे कभी मिल जुलकर
दरमियां धर्म की दीवार नहीं थी, कि जो है

डाका डाला है मेरी नींद पे भी, चैन पे भी
वो मेरे दिल की गुनहगार नहीं थी, कि जो है
 
हम तो आए हैं कहा मान के टूटे दिल का
पहले तो ख्वाहिशे दीदार नहीं थी, कि जो है

मुझसे रूठी है मेरी जाने-तमन्ना जब से
ज़िन्दगी रूठ के पुरखार नहीं थी, कि जो है

जी, जलाने को यहाँ आए हैं कुछ खाना खराब
दोस्ती में यही दीवार नहीं थी, कि जो है

उनके आने से 'रक़ीब' आई है जीवन में बहार
हक़ में दुनिया मेरे गुलज़ार नहीं थी, कि जो है

khwahishe bosa-e-dildaar naheeN thee, ke jo hai
Zindagee husn parastaar naheeN thee, ke jo hai

sab isee mulk meN rahte the kabhee mil julkar
darmiyaaN dharm kee deewaar naheeN thee, ke jo hai

daka daala hai mere neeNd pe bhee, chain pe bhee
wo mere dil kee gunahgaar naheeN thee, ke jo hai

ham to aaye haiN kaha maan ke toote dil kaa
pahle to khwahishe deedaar naheeN thee, ke jo hai

mujhse roothee hai meree jaane-tamanna jab se
zindagee rooth ke purkhaar naheeN thee, ke jo hai

jee, jalane ko yahaaN aaye haiN kuchh kahana kharab
dostee meN yahee deewaar naheeN thee, ke jo hai

unke aane se ‘Raqeeb’ aaee hai jeewan meN bahaar
haq meN duniya mere gulzaar naheeN thee, ke jo hai

--- Satish Shukla ‘Raqeeb’


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«Reply #17 on: May 22, 2013, 05:48:27 PM »
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Awesome compositon satish shukla ji. mujhe aapki yeh rachna bahut bahut pasand aayi. dilse mubarakbad qubool kare..

Hausala afzai kabahut bahut shukriya.......Raqeeb Lucknowi
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«Reply #18 on: May 22, 2013, 05:49:13 PM »
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Bahut Khoob.

Hausala afzai kabahut bahut shukriya.......Raqeeb Lucknowi
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«Reply #19 on: May 22, 2013, 06:02:56 PM »
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Bahut Khoob.

Hausala afzai kabahut bahut shukriya.......Raqeeb Lucknowi
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«Reply #20 on: May 22, 2013, 06:05:26 PM »
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ख्वाहिशे बोसा-ए-दिलदार नहीं थी, कि जो है
ज़िन्दगी हुस्न परस्तार नहीं थी, कि जो है
सब इसी मुल्क में रहते थे कभी मिल जुलकर
दरमियां धर्म की दीवार नहीं थी, कि जो है
डाका डाला है मेरी नींद पे भी, चैन पे भी
वो मेरे दिल की गुनहगार नहीं थी, कि जो है   
हम तो आए हैं कहा मान के टूटे दिल का
पहले तो ख्वाहिशे दीदार नहीं थी, कि जो है
मुझसे रूठी है मेरी जाने-तमन्ना जब से
ज़िन्दगी रूठ के पुरखार नहीं थी, कि जो है
जी, जलाने को यहाँ आए हैं कुछ खाना खराब
दोस्ती में यही दीवार नहीं थी, कि जो है
उनके आने से 'रक़ीब' आई है जीवन में बहार
हक़ में दुनिया मेरे गुलज़ार नहीं थी, कि जो है
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Wah,Wah,Wah Satish ji,Bahut umda ghazal kahi hai aapne.Really meaningful amd emotional.
Meri aik gujarish hai aapse ki kripya Urdu ke difficult words ke hindi meaning zaroor quote kar diya kijiye.Isse har shaqs aapki ghazal ko completly samajh sakega aur iska lutf utha sakega.
Meri dili mubarakbaad qabool kijiye.


Hausala afzai kabahut bahut shukriya.......koshish karoonga huzoor.....Raqeeb Lucknowi
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«Reply #21 on: May 22, 2013, 07:00:07 PM »
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सब इसी मुल्क में रहते थे कभी मिल जुलकर
दरमियां धर्म की दीवार नहीं थी, कि जो है

Jai shri krishna Sir

Bahut khoobsurat Ghazal lekar aaye hai..wah wah wah
aapka chir parichit andaaz..kya kahne
is sher pe khususi daad .

Matle ka zikr na ho to sab bekaar...
ghazab ka ijhaar...wah wah wah



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«Reply #22 on: May 22, 2013, 07:06:15 PM »
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Shukla jee, aadaab!
Mujhe iss ghazal ka radeef samajh nahiN aa raha hai, "NahiN thi ke jo hai" se aapka kya matlab hai. Mujhe iss wajah se poori ghazal samajh meiN nahiN aai. Aap please clarify kareiN to kaafi achha hoga.

Huzoor radif to bilkul saaf hai..."naheeN thee ke jo hai"
aur dildaar , Deewaar...etc qafiya hain... zara guar se padhenge to samajh aa jayegee....

Hausala afzai ka bahut bahu shukriya....Raqeeb Lucknowi
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«Reply #23 on: May 22, 2013, 07:08:53 PM »
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bhut khub likha hai

Hausala afzai ka bahut bahu shukriya....Raqeeb Lucknowi
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«Reply #24 on: May 22, 2013, 07:40:34 PM »
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ek alag radeef aur juda qafiyon  ke sath
khubsurat alfaaz se araasta is ghazal ke
liye daad  aur  mubarakbaad . doosra sher
bahut achha laga.

Hasan Sahab,
             Aadaab !

Hausala afzai ka bahut bahu shukriya....radif nibhane
men sach poochhiye to paseene chhoot gaye...

Mujhe bahut sharmindagee mahsoos hoti hai ke aap
logon ke kalaam niyamit roop se na padh paane ke
baawajooj meree post par aap sab kee mohabbaten
kam naheen hueeN....
 
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«Reply #25 on: May 22, 2013, 07:42:34 PM »
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badee sakht radeef lee hai par shaandaar tareeqe se nibhaayaa hai dheron daad

Saini Sahab,
             Saadar Pranaam !

Hausala afzai ka bahut bahu shukriya....radif nibhane
men sach poochhiye to paseene chhoot gaye...

Mujhe bahut sharmindagee mahsoos hoti hai ke aap
logon ke kalaam niyamit roop se na padh paane ke
baawajooj meree post par aap sab kee mohabbaten
kam naheen hueeN....
 
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Hausala afzai ka bahut bahu shukriya....Raqeeb Lucknowi
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«Reply #27 on: May 22, 2013, 08:08:18 PM »
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Raqeeb Sahaab Aadaab...... !


WaaH jee waaH kya baat hai behad gehri aur umdaa kalaam kahi hai aapne... awwal toH yeH kaheNge ke aik bemisaal aur umdaa radiff ka inteqaab kiya hai aapne... Usual Smile

aur behad khoob sukhanwari rahi janab... bade hi khooob aur umdaa ashaar rahe...Usual Smile
Waqt ki khillat ke chalte tafsilaana jawaab nahi de payaa iske liye maufi ka talbgaar huN... Usual Smile

Is umdaa kalaam par humari hazaaroN dili daad O mubbarakbad kabul kijiye... Usual Smile

Aise hi umdaa kalaamoN se bazm ko roshan karte rahiye... aate rahiye...
Shaad O aabaad rahiye...

Khuda Hafez... Usual Smile

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«Reply #28 on: May 22, 2013, 08:09:12 PM »
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Shukla ji
aapke ghazal ko padhkar kafi acha laga

aur nisandeh iss Radiff  ko itne ache se nibhate hue ek lajawaab ghazal likhna aap jese Maharathi hi kar sakte hain...
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