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तुमसे ये एतराज़ हमें यार आज है |
क्यूँ बर्फ़ से भी सर्द तुम्हारा मिज़ाज है ||
क़िस्मत में है नियाज़ जिसके एक भी यहाँ |
उस खुश नसीब शख़्स का रोशन सिराज है ||
मिलते नहीं किसी से तुम्हारे कभी ख़याल |
कैसी तुम्हारी क़ौम है कैसा समाज है ||
लौटे हैं तेरे दर से सभी रोज़ तिशनालब |
कितना अजीब सा तेरे घर का रिवाज है ||
इक आप ही नहीं जो हैं हर वक़्त मुब्तिला |
अपने भी घर में ढेर सारा कामकाज है ||
बस आपके यहाँ पे फ़क़त आप के सिवा |
हर शख़्स देखिये बड़ा ही खुश मिज़ाज है ||
माना नहीं कभी भी हक़ीमों का मशविरा |
मैं जानता हूँ मेरा मरज़ लाइलाज है ||
डा० सुरेन्द्र सैनी
Tumse ye etraaz hameN yaar aaj hai.
KyooN barf se bhee sard tumhaaraa mizaaj hai.
Qismat meN hai niyaaz jiske ek bhee yahaaN.
Us khush naseeb shakhsh kaa roshan siraaj hai.
Milte naheeN kisee se tumhaare kabhee khyaal.
Kaisee tumhaaree qaum hai kaisaa samaaj hai.
Laute haiN tere dar se sabhee roz tishnaalab.
Kitnaa ajeeb saa tere ghar kaa riwaaj hai.
Ik aap hee naheeN jo haiN har waqt mubtilaa.
Apne bhee ghar men dher saaraa kaamkaaj hai.
Bas aapke yahaaN pe faqat aap ke siwaa.
Har shakhsh dekhiye badaa hee khush mizaaj hai.
Maanaa naheeN kabhee bhee haqeemoN kaa mashwiraa.
MaiN jaantaa hooN meraa maraz laailaaj hai.
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«Reply #2 on: February 23, 2012, 06:05:19 AM » |
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Sadiq Rizvi
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«Reply #3 on: February 23, 2012, 12:49:54 PM » |
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Maanaa naheeN kabhee bhee haqeemoN kaa mashwiraa.
MaiN jaanta hooN mera maraz laailaaj hai.
Saini saheb maaf kijiye urdu mein lafz marz naheeN MARAZ hai (Maazrat ke sath)
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«Reply #4 on: February 23, 2012, 05:31:56 PM » |
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Achhi ghazal kahi hai Saini sahab. Aakhri sher sabse achha laga. Daad-o-tehseen. Mazrat ke saath kahta hun ke sahi lafz marz hai, maraz nahi. Isliye is misre ko zara sa badal ka yun kaha ja sakta hai:
MaiN jaantaa hooN meraa maraz laailaaj hai.
ki jagah
MaiN jaantaa hooN marz meraa laailaaj hai.
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riyaz106
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«Reply #5 on: February 23, 2012, 05:34:42 PM » |
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Rizvi Sahab aap jo kahna chaah rahe the use likhne mein kuchh chook hui hai: Maanaa naheeN kabhee bhee haqeemoN kaa mashwiraa.
MaiN jaanta hooN mera maraz laailaaj hai.
Saini saheb maaf kijiye urdu mein lafz marz naheeN MARAZ hai (Maazrat ke sath)
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kalam k chalne ko zamaana paagalpan samajhta hai.
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«Reply #6 on: February 23, 2012, 10:59:39 PM » |
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«Reply #7 on: February 23, 2012, 11:10:59 PM » |
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«Reply #9 on: February 24, 2012, 02:25:38 AM » |
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sksaini4
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«Reply #10 on: February 24, 2012, 04:04:07 AM » |
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Qalb sheb shukriya
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sksaini4
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«Reply #11 on: February 24, 2012, 05:37:49 AM » |
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Tauhid saheb shukriya
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«Reply #12 on: February 24, 2012, 07:44:20 AM » |
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सैनी साहब,
फिर से नायाब पेशकश को पढ़ने का मौका देने के लिए आपका शुक्रिया
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«Reply #14 on: February 24, 2012, 08:32:02 AM » |
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milte nahee tumhare khayaal---- kaisi tumhari qaum hai kaisa samaaj hai ----- maaf kariega Saini sahab-- hume ye aashar bilkul basand nhi aaye--ye aap agr tanz ke lie kah gaye to mai iske meaning se ittefaq nhi rakhta--!! baaki ki ghazal bht bht khoob hain daad kubul karen likhte rahen khus rahen muskurate rahen  sukriya |
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