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MEIN NE KHA TERI YAAD MEIN ANKHEN ROTTI HEIN
JAWAB AAYA YEH ISSI TARAH SAAF HOTI HEIN
MEIN NE KAHA DARD EH HIJR KA KOI ILAAJ BATAYIEH
JAWAB AAYA VASL HO GA ISSI TARH ROTE JAYEIEH
MEIN NE KAHA AB ANKHON K SAATH DIL BI ROHTA HAI
JAWAB AAYA ASHIQOON K SAATH AKSR AISA HOTA HAI
MEIN NE KAHA ANSONWOON SE TAKIYE BEEGH JATE HEIN
JAWAB AAYA ISSI BAHANAY HUM TUMEIN YAAD TAU AHTE HEIN
MEIN NE KAHA MERI SHAYRI K BARAY KUCH FARMAAIYE
JAWAB AAYA ASGHR KHUDA K LIYE HAMEIN BHOOL JAAIYE
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«Reply #1 on: January 13, 2009, 07:14:33 PM » |
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Achchi kahee sunee hai Asghr Ji
Good One
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khwahish
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«Reply #2 on: January 13, 2009, 07:20:51 PM » |
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Bahut Bahut Khoob Asghrji.. 
Aapne isse Mazahiya Shayri Mein Post Kiya, Par Humein To Iss Mein Bhi Dard Nazar Aaya...Bahut Ache..
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«Reply #4 on: January 14, 2009, 09:46:35 AM » |
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«Reply #5 on: January 14, 2009, 09:56:06 AM » |
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MEIN NE KHA TERI YAAD MEIN ANKHEN ROTTI HEIN
JAWAB AAYA YEH ISSI TARAH SAAF HOTI HEIN
MEIN NE KAHA DARD EH HIJR KA KOI ILAAJ BATAYIEH
JAWAB AAYA VASL HO GA ISSI TARH ROTE JAYEIEH
MEIN NE KAHA AB ANKHON K SAATH DIL BI ROHTA HAI
JAWAB AAYA ASHIQOON K SAATH AKSR AISA HOTA HAI
MEIN NE KAHA ANSONWOON SE TAKIYE BEEGH JATE HEIN
JAWAB AAYA ISSI BAHANAY HUM TUMEIN YAAD TAU AHTE HEIN
MEIN NE KAHA MERI SHAYRI K BARAY KUCH FARMAAIYE
JAWAB AAYA ASGHR KHUDA K LIYE HAMEIN BHOOL JAAIYE
Yaar Kya Kahene Is Kalam Ke Hila diya tune mere bhai kasam khuda ki ye kalam ki gahera-e- ko samjh kyoon nahi pa rahe app azgar bhai isko funny shayari me post karke iski tauheen ki hai tumne kasam mai tumse naraz hon !! shayari ke qadardan ye bardash nahi karsakte mere bhai !! Qadeer Toopchi |
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salma786
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«Reply #6 on: January 14, 2009, 10:22:16 AM » |
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Bahoot khoob asghr ji
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«Reply #7 on: January 14, 2009, 10:24:47 AM » |
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«Reply #9 on: January 14, 2009, 10:51:35 AM » |
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MEIN NE KHA TERI YAAD MEIN ANKHEN ROTTI HEIN
JAWAB AAYA YEH ISSI TARAH SAAF HOTI HEIN
MEIN NE KAHA DARD EH HIJR KA KOI ILAAJ BATAYIEH
JAWAB AAYA VASL HO GA ISSI TARH ROTE JAYEIEH
MEIN NE KAHA AB ANKHON K SAATH DIL BI ROHTA HAI
JAWAB AAYA ASHIQOON K SAATH AKSR AISA HOTA HAI
MEIN NE KAHA ANSONWOON SE TAKIYE BEEGH JATE HEIN
JAWAB AAYA ISSI BAHANAY HUM TUMEIN YAAD TAU AHTE HEIN
MEIN NE KAHA MERI SHAYRI K BARAY KUCH FARMAAIYE
JAWAB AAYA ASGHR KHUDA K LIYE HAMEIN BHOOL JAAIYE
arey wahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh bahut khoooobbb .. kya kamaaaaaaal ka likha hai aap neh , bahut khoob. bahut sunder likha hai aap neh Jasbir Singh |
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«Reply #10 on: January 14, 2009, 09:38:19 PM » |
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bahoot khoob, but I am agree with Khwaish ji and Mahiya... Apki is kavita ki last line bahoot dard wali hai... sari kavita padte waqat jo fun mehsoos hota hai wo last line ke sath ek dum dard main badal jaata hai.
Overall Good creation!! Good job!!
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«Reply #11 on: January 15, 2009, 02:41:18 AM » |
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Very Well.. Very Very Nice Work Asghr Ji... Ditto.. Same with Me.. LIFE IS BIT BUSY SOMETIMES I REPLY LATE I HOPE NO ONE WILL MIND I REALY APRECIATE EVERYONES COMMENTS ALL I CAN DO WISH ALL OF U A LOT OF HAPINESS IN LIFE.ASGHR  |
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«Reply #12 on: January 15, 2009, 02:47:11 AM » |
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arey wahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh bahut khoooobbb .. kya kamaaaaaaal ka likha hai aap neh , bahut khoob. bahut sunder likha hai aap neh
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PAA JI RAB TWANOO CAHRDI KALLA ICH RAKHE.ASGHR |
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«Reply #13 on: January 15, 2009, 02:51:34 AM » |
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Asghr
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«Reply #14 on: January 15, 2009, 03:01:45 AM » |
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bahoot khoob, but I am agree with Khwaish ji and Mahiya... Apki is kavita ki last line bahoot dard wali hai... sari kavita padte waqat jo fun mehsoos hota hai wo last line ke sath ek dum dard main badal jaata hai.
Overall Good creation!! Good job!!
AAP SHAAID YAQEEN NA KARAIN YE BAATAIN AIK DOST SE PHONE PE HUI AUR MEIN NE 2001 MEIN YE NAZAM UUN KI IJAAZAT SE MAZAQ KA RUNG DE KAR LEKHI,DEKHA HUM GHUM KO B HANSI MEIN TAAL DAITE HEIN.MUJE UDAAS KAR DIYA NA.AAP KA SHUKRIA.ASGHR |
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