Ruth Jaaye

by songwriter_123 on August 21, 2011, 03:16:08 PM
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Agar khuda bhi ruth jaaye mujhse to kya hua wo koi ristedaar to nahi
Par agar tu ruth gayi to kahuga khuda kaha gaya kya  tu mera yaar nahi Usual Smile
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«Reply #1 on: August 21, 2011, 03:39:54 PM »
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Second line is the the soul of your sher however, in first line, aitbaar is not actually fitting in it at all ! Usual Smile

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«Reply #2 on: August 21, 2011, 03:52:54 PM »
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You have changed it..
Its little different now but still very nice !
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«Reply #3 on: August 21, 2011, 05:13:21 PM »
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songwriter_123 ji,

Good...keep on writing..
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«Reply #4 on: August 22, 2011, 03:28:46 AM »
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gud 1 songwriter ji..... Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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