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mamta bajpai
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Uthao palak kee ye shamsheer dheere
Jigar pe nazar ke lage teer dheere
ujaaloN ko baahoN me bharne kee khaatir
aNdheroN se guzaregee taqdeer dheere
ye mumkin naheeN hai mai duniyaa badal dooN
kategee rivaazoN kee janzeer dheere
hai ummeed humko ye mushkil naheeN hai
badal deNge duniyaa kee tasveer dheere
bahut ho chukee ranjisheN dostee me
karo dil milaane kee tadbeer dheere
Mamta Bajpai
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«Reply #2 on: December 22, 2010, 03:44:03 PM » |
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Bahut bahut shukriyaa Naresh jee!houslaa afzai ke liye behad shukriyaa!
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«Reply #3 on: December 22, 2010, 03:45:00 PM » |
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mamta ji kya baat hai--
bahot meaningful peshkash.
ek ajeeb sa ehsaas jaga gaya ye nagma..
bahut khum
:::kuch lines yaad aa gai mujhe kisi ki-- aapke iss nagme ko padhkar--pesh hai
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ujaala mangne gaya tha
roshnee ki bheekh
hum apna ghar na jalate
to kya karte
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khus rahiye
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«Reply #4 on: December 22, 2010, 06:10:02 PM » |
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Mamtaa jee aadaab!
Kia baat hai kia kaheN,, Ke tareef karna bhul gaye hai hum... 
Bade dino bad aapki kalaam se ruberu huye hai...
Behad khoob kalaam kahi hai aapne....
Uthao palak kee ye shamsheer dheere Jigar pe nazar ke lage teer dheere Waah jee kia kahne... bahot umdaa
Palak ki shamsheer Waah Jee waah dil baagh baagh ho gaya.. Naya tajurba sunkar... ujaaloN ko baahoN me bharne kee khaatir aNdheroN se guzaregee taqdeer dheere Waah jee waah kia kaheN bus daad h daad ... ye mumkin naheeN hai mai duniyaa badal dooN kategee rivaazoN kee janzeer dheere Kia baat kahi hai aapne behad khoob khayaal ko anjaam diya hai ... bahot umdaa daad hazir hai.. hai ummeed humko ye mushkil naheeN hai badal deNge duniyaa kee tasveer dheere Upar wale sher meiN aur is sher meiN kuch khaas fark nahi laga hume Mamta jee ... Khayaal aur andaaz juda hota to kia baat hoti... bahut ho chukee ranjisheN dostee me karo dil milaane kee tadbeer dheere Waah jee waah bahot khoob dil ko lag gaya aapka yeH khayaal... Daad hazir hai... Mamta Bajpai
Aik baat kaheNge gar sirf dheere ke bajaay Dheere dheere hota to mazaa aa jata....
Khair aapki is umdaa kalaam per dil se daad hazir hai ..
Khush O abad rahiye..
Khuda Hafez.....
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«Reply #5 on: December 23, 2010, 05:44:08 AM » |
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Subhash jee!aap kee dil se aabhaaree hooN jo aap nirantar meraa utsaah-vardhan karte haiN.....aap ne jo chand lines likhee haiN unhe paRh kar mujhe bhee ek kalaam yaad aa gayaa....pesh e khidmat hai.....
talluq toot jaayegaa meraa saare zamaane se
mere apne khafaa hoNge tumheN apnaa banaane se
tumhaare saath rahne se mujhe taskeen miltee hai
bahut taqleef hotee hai tumhaare door jaane se
mere ghar ko jalaa denaa magar ye zehan me rakhna
ujaalaa mil nahee sakataa kisee kaa ghar jalaane se
humaaree jaan jaayegee to phir tum jaan jaoge
keh haasil kuch naheeN hotaa kisee ko aazmaane se
tumhaaree yaad ko kaise mitaa dooN apnee yaadoN se
bahut gaharaa talluq haiteraa mere fasaane se
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«Reply #6 on: December 23, 2010, 05:57:22 AM » |
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Parvez jee aap kaa shukriyaa adaa karne se pahle shikaayatoN ka pulindaa zaroor kholnaa chaahoongee...lambee gairhaaziri hai aap kee...yahaaN yo par kitne log aap ke beshqeematee tanqeedee tabsire se mahroom rahe....kitane kalaam aap kee baat joh rahe hain.....khair ....bahut bahut shukriyaa tashreef laane kaa...
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«Reply #7 on: December 23, 2010, 06:05:59 AM » |
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ahaa kya baat hai Mamta di..
khoob kaha aapne..
apke jitna kushal to nahin hun par thodi koshish me bhi karna chahuga~ pesh hai..
in hasraton ka "abhi" ab anjaam or kya hoga
kuchh bikhar chuki tootegi kuchh ki ummeed dheere
meri muhabbat ko samajh na dikhawa ye sachchi hai
kuchh ansoo beh gay sookh jayegi kuchh ki narmi dheere
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«Reply #8 on: December 23, 2010, 06:08:17 AM » |
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waaaaaaaaah Abhi! kamaal kaa likhte ho jab likhne par aate ho...bahut khoob!
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«Reply #9 on: December 23, 2010, 06:11:22 AM » |
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Mamtaa jee aadaab!
Kia baat hai kia kaheN,, Ke tareef karna bhul gaye hai hum...
Bade dino bad aapki kalaam se ruberu huye hai...
Behad khoob kalaam kahi hai aapne....
Behad achchi Gaal kahi hai Mamta jee...
Aik baat kaheNge gar sirf dheere ke bajaay Dheere dheere hota to mazaa aa jata....
Khair aapki is umdaa kalaam per dil se daad hazir hai ..
Khush O abad rahiye..
Khuda Hafez..... Parwaz sahab apki andaz khaskar reply dene ka kayal kar gaya .. is tarah har pankti ko dekh bhaal kar reply karna kahan saral hota hai ... ab tak YO par apki kai gazalo se mulakat huyi hai umeed hai kuchh or se jald hi baat hogi~ likhte rahiye.. apke andaz ko dhr saari daad~ |
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«Reply #10 on: December 23, 2010, 06:12:15 AM » |
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waaaaaaaaah Abhi! kamaal kaa likhte ho jab likhne par aate ho...bahut khoob!
shukriya di sath dete rahiye ~ |
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«Reply #11 on: December 23, 2010, 06:22:42 AM » |
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wah Mamta ji kya khub share kiya aapne-- itna dilkash aur Meaningful peshkash share kari ki bas mai padhta hi gaya. sukriya aapka jo dil se-- Abhi ji aapka to jawaab nhi kya likhte ho aap mindblowing. aapse sikayat ye hai ki aapne ab tak mujhe likhne ka kuch Gyan e Gur nahi dia..  sukriya *** |
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«Reply #12 on: December 23, 2010, 06:23:04 AM » |
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WAH KYA BAAT HAI MAMTA BAJPAI JI.....
"BAHUT HO CHUKEEN RANJISHEN DOSTEE ME"
AB DILAGI HOJAYE DHEERE-DHEERE.......
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«Reply #13 on: December 23, 2010, 06:29:21 AM » |
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wah Mamta ji kya khub share kiya aapne-- itna dilkash aur Meaningful peshkash share kari ki bas mai padhta hi gaya. sukriya aapka jo dil se-- Abhi ji aapka to jawaab nhi kya likhte ho aap mindblowing. aapse sikayat ye hai ki aapne ab tak mujhe likhne ka kuch Gyan e Gur nahi dia.. sukriya *** kb ji likhne ka gyan o gur diya hi nhai jata ye to bas khud b khud aa jata hai...ham sirf padhkar or likhkar apne vichar baant sakate hain or koshish kar sakte he.. apka bahu bahut shkriya pasand karne ke liye~ |
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«Reply #14 on: December 23, 2010, 06:35:28 AM » |
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mamta ji ek baar fir dil ko sukun dene wali baat aapne bht hi pyare andaj me likhi he .........sach bht aacha laga ye padkar specially last para.....its superb....
abhi, parwaaj ji, anshumali ji, kb ji..........aap logo ki chand panktiyo ne isme aur char chand laga diye he ........kuch mene bhi koshish ki he umiid he apko pasand ayega
Uthne Lage He Har Dil Me Zazbaat Ab Dhire Dhire
Khuda Ne Kar Di He Shuruwat Ab Dhire Dhire
Bahot Ho Chuki Ranjishee Ab Waqt He Aman Ka
Dekho Badhne Lage He Hath Ab Dhire Dhire
Badalaw To Dastur He Duniya Ka Ye Hona Hi Tha
Tapti Dhoop Me Hone Lagi He Barsaat Ab Dhire Dhire
Dekho Nikla He Suraj Bhi Badlo Ki Ooth Se
Khone Lagi He Ye Andheri Raat Ab Dhire Dhire
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