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manzil-e-ishq
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Pathro ke shasher me zindagi dhundhti hu...
main thuj ko sanam bedam dhundhti hu....
jo har pal mujh se khafa rahta hai
main har pal uski raza dhundhti hu...
chahat ko meri jisne ruswa kiya hai
main uski ada me wafa dhundhti hu....
kya shikwa karu us se jo apna hi na ho...
main har paraye me ek apna dhundhti hu....
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«Reply #2 on: November 16, 2010, 11:55:40 AM » |
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Bahut khoob likha hai manzil-e-ishq ji..
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«Reply #3 on: November 16, 2010, 12:24:17 PM » |
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bahut khub manzila ji bahut khub ab hum dua karegay kay aur aap ko dhundna na pade MARDALA HAI ADA NE TERE ZE ZALAYA HAI HENA NE TERE  |
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«Reply #4 on: November 16, 2010, 01:28:28 PM » |
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«Reply #5 on: November 16, 2010, 01:40:57 PM » |
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kaanto me bhi phoolon sa narmi dhundti hu!!
mai tujhko sanam bedum dhundti hun...
aaine me bhi tera aks dhundti hu!!
andheri fizaon me...shihrati hawaon me..bhatkaati raahon me tera saaya dhundti hu!!
mai tujhko sanam bedum dhundti hu...
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bahut umda Manzil-e-ishq ji..
likhte rahiye..daad kubool kijiye:)
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«Reply #6 on: November 18, 2010, 06:11:25 AM » |
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thanx alot khawish ji.... spelling mistake.... you are saying about shehar no... or there are some other mistakes also... let me know about it.... Bahut Bahut Khoob Manzil-e-ishq Ji.. 
Par Thodi Spellings Par Dhyaan Zaroor Dijiye.. |
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«Reply #7 on: November 18, 2010, 06:15:03 AM » |
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shukria borkenbyluv ji.... Bahut khoob likha hai manzil-e-ishq ji..
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«Reply #8 on: November 18, 2010, 06:16:07 AM » |
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aapki dua ka bahut bahut shukria yoindian ji.... thanx for coming..... bahut khub manzila ji bahut khub ab hum dua karegay kay aur aap ko dhundna na pade MARDALA HAI ADA NE TERE ZE ZALAYA HAI HENA NE TERE |
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«Reply #9 on: November 18, 2010, 06:20:06 AM » |
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thanx li'l sis....... tum bahut accha likhti ho... do keep coming..... & take care of yourself.... |
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«Reply #10 on: November 18, 2010, 06:22:03 AM » |
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kya baat hai killbill ji... bahut bahut khoob likha hai aapne.... aapko hamari ye choti si koshish pasand aayi uske liye main aapki bahut shukrguzar hu... thanx for coming...... kaanto me bhi phoolon sa narmi dhundti hu!!
mai tujhko sanam bedum dhundti hun...
aaine me bhi tera aks dhundti hu!!
andheri fizaon me...shihrati hawaon me..bhatkaati raahon me tera saaya dhundti hu!!
mai tujhko sanam bedum dhundti hu...
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bahut umda Manzil-e-ishq ji..
likhte rahiye..daad kubool kijiye:)
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«Reply #11 on: November 18, 2010, 06:32:36 AM » |
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Manzil ji bahut bahut khoob...dher saari daad~
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«Reply #12 on: November 18, 2010, 06:34:48 AM » |
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thanx alot abhi ji..... or aapki daad sar aankho par... Manzil ji bahut bahut khoob...dher saari daad~
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«Reply #13 on: November 18, 2010, 07:12:30 AM » |
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hahaha...
manzile ishq ji aapne meri tareef kr di waah!!:)
mujhe nai aata kuch likhna bas comnt karna aata h mujhe...Aapki peshkash bahut achhi thi to kuch lines mene bhi Add kar di thi bas.
AAP LIKHTI RAHIYE BAS
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«Reply #14 on: November 18, 2010, 08:45:25 AM » |
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Manzil-e-ishq ji....achhaa kalaam hai aap ka.....
Mazaar par teri uggti hari-hari ghaass dekhti hu
Maut se bhi panpe mein aysi zindagi dhundhati hu
Pathro ke shasher me zindagi dhundhti hu...
main thuj ko sanam bedam dhundhti hu....
jo har pal mujh se khafa rahta hai
main har pal uski raza dhundhti hu...
chahat ko meri jisne ruswa kiya hai
main uski ada me wafa dhundhti hu....
kya shikwa karu us se jo apna hi na ho...
main har paraye me ek apna dhundhti hu....
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