~Ek akhri baar main mehfil sajana chahta hoon~ by Rahim

Yeh kalam unn tamam kay naam jo likha karte the mager aj nahin likte kyun ki unhe shayad kabhi kisi ne tanz kiya ho ya unke kalamon par itna objection uthaya ho kay woh ab dil se toot gaye ho..
Yeh kalam unn tamam kay naam jo dil se likte the mager technical point of view se dekhne walon ne, unhe thukra dia kay unhe likhna nahin ata..

Shayad mera bhi kuch chupa hua dard iss kalam main bhar raha hoon..
Kabhi mujse bhi kisi ne kaha tha "Rahim, tumhe likhna nahin ata.."

Meri ek badi pyaari se dost jo yahan likha karti thi woh ab nahin likti..Bada dukh hota hai kay woh chali gayi yahan se kisi ki criticism ki wajah se.. Neel jee, Yeh kalam, Rahim ki apko dedication hai..!

Ek request bhi karna chahta hoon..kabhi bhi kisi ki bhi kalam ko bura na kahein..apko nahin pata usne kyun likha hai aur kya ehsaason kay saath likha hai..apke liye woh kalam hoga, lavzon se saja ek kagaaz hoga mager uske liye uski zindagi ka sach ho shayad..!

Shukriya Anamika di..! Teh dil se shukriya..! Kuch nazmein sirf lavz nahin hote balke ehsaas hote hai..! Apne ehsaason ko parra, teh dil se shukriya.!

Shukriya Kapil Dost..Wakei bahaut kuch kehdia apne..
Hmm bahaut sahi kaha apne..
Khair dua hai Neel jee wapas ajayen..!
Shukriya Dost.!

Shukriya Shukriya Koyal di..!

Mr. Klaskar, maine Neel ji ki poem par aisa koi comment nahi diya ke koi naraz ho jaye. Actual me to maine unki poem ki tareef ki thi aur jo kuch comment kiya tha wo Nazar sahab ki post par kiya tha jiska  siwa aapke kisi ko bhi bura nahi laga. Neel ji agar Yo par nahi aati to iski wajah kuchh aur bhi ho sakti hai kyonki maine bura manne wali koi baat nahi likhi.

Mr Klaskar maine Neel ji ki poem par jo comment diya tha wo ab bhi waisa hi hai jaisa us samay tha, kisi monitor ne delete nahi kiya hai.  Ek baar aap bhi dhyaan se dobara dekh lo. Us din itna hua tha ke Nazar sahab ki post ko maine quote kiya tha aur quoted  area mein hi apna reply type kar diya tha jis waja se mere aur Nazar sahab ke comments mixed  ho gaye the jinhen main alaga nahi kar sakta tha. Aap ek guest ko monitor kah rah hain, ye bhi ajeeb baat hai.

Apko Yo me sabse jyada nafrat mujhse hai, iske liye shukriya. Shayad aapki nazar me ek achha Kavi ya shayar wahi hota hai jo kisi aalochna(jo maine ki nahi)  karne wale se nafrat kare, chahe aalochna sahi ho ya galat, chahe aalochna aapki ki ho ya kisi aur ki. Yaad rakhna chahiye k ek umda Kavi ya Shayar hamesha aalochna ka welcome karta hai kyonki tabhi pata chalta hai ke uss rachna me kya kami hai. Khair apni apni samajh hai. Jo achhe Kavi ya shayar hote hai kisi se nafrat nahi karte. Aapne yahan aisi abhadra aur asabhya bhasha ka use kiya hai ke kisi Kavi ya shayar ko shobha nahi deta.

Neel ji agar aap is thread ko parh rahi hon to apse main ye kahna chahta hun ke aap bahot achha likhti hain, apne uss comment me  bhi maine yahi likha tha aur aapki koi buraai nahi ki. Maine jo kaha Nazar Sahab se kaha tha. Phir bhi agar aapko meri baat se takeleef hui ho to mai sorry kahta hun, lekin aap Yo me wapas aa jaaiye, agar waqt ki kami hai to kabhi kabhi hi aa jaya kijiye. Dekho na sabhi kitna eagerly apka wait kar rahe hain.

Azeezaan-e-bazm,tasleemaat.
            kuch masrufiyaat ki wajeh se waqt nikal nahi paaraha tha isiliye sar sari nigah yahaan par post ki jaane waali shayeri(ghazalein,nazmein,azaad nazmein,geet,rubaaiyaat,qaaside,ek sher waghaira waghaira)par daal liya karta tha,aaj jab iss post pe meri nazar padhi to kuch dair ke liye mein samajh nahi paaya ke yahaan akhir mera naam kis ziman main ayaa?,jab klaskar saheb ki link pe click kiya to saara ma'mela ba-asaani zahen main aagaya,shayed mein itna zahen rasa nahi ke har baat mere haafeeze main rahe,mein to baat samajh hi nahein paata gar klaskar saheb link drop na ki hoti,
  janaab .Adeeb saheb yaqinan aap meri nazar main ek mua'aliim,tajziye nigaar,tabserah nigaar hain aur saath hi saath fann-e-shayeri mahaarat rakhne waali aala zauq shaksiyat hain,baat taqribaan teen mahinao'n puraani hai jab meine neel saheba ki ek post pe unki itni taarif kardi thi yun samjhiye ke unki taqleeq ko mukammal "ghazal" kaha aur unke un ashaarao'n pe umda alfaaz ke saath daad -o- tehseen se nawaza tha,yaqeenan mein galat tha,kyun ke mera qasoor yeh tha ke meine neel ji ke behetreen khayalaat aur andaaz-e-bayaan  se itna mutasir hu'a ke unki taqleeq ko "mukammal ghazal "keh diya ,meri hi kam ilmi thi ke mein auzaan aur bahoor se zyada waqfiyat nahi rakhta tha aur mein jitna jaanta tha bas us bunyaad pe "neel ji" ke purkashish aur purlutf khayalaat ko "mukammal ghazal"kehdiya,mein jiss ke liye janaab Adeeb saheb se aur aap sub se maafi chahta hoon,meri kam ilmi ke sabab yeh waqiya wajood main ayaa,kyun ke mere "quote " par hi 'adeeb 'saheb ne quote kiya tha,meri wajeh se meri kam ilmi ki wajeh se woh baat hogai shayed jiss ki bina pe "neel ji" aana bandd kardiya,mein "neel ji" ke dost ehbaab se bhi muaziraat khwah hon khas kar (klaskar saheb,Raheen saheb,Rahi saheb,kasak ji,koyal saheba).adeeb saheb jaisi shakhsiyat ka iss bazm main hona behad zarori hai kyun ke ek mualim ke saae main aur rahenumai main talib e ilm ki qaabiliyat main nikhaar ataa hai,.mein janaab Adeeb saheb se mudabanna guzarish karta hon ke woh har talib -e- ilm ki rehenmuai karein aur fann-e-shayeri ke usool o qawaed se aagah bhi karte jaaen jahaan jahaan munasib ho.
                janaab parwaaz saheb adaab o tasleemat;iss baat se inkar nahi ke aap  fann-e-shyeri ke maahir shakhsiyat hain,mein yeh iss buniyad pe keh raha hon ke aap ne yahaan "tabsera" ka jo silsila shuru kiya hai waqai laaeq -e- tehseen hain,kyun ke fann-e-shayeri main  thoda sa ilm rakhne waala itna bada kaam (tabsera)  kar nahi sakta.mubarakk baad hamari jaanib se qubool karein,mein yeh pehle hi qubool karchuka hon ke mujh main fann-e-shayeri ki jaankaari bahot hi kam hai.aap ne jo likha hai aapke quote main ke"Adeeb saheb ne sahi farmaya tha nazar saheb ko"janaab-e-aali parwaaz saheb ,meine "neel saheba ki taqleeq ko 'ghazal'kis liye kaha tha aap ko pata hai? meri uss waqt (aaj se taqriban teen maheene pehle)jo shayeri ke taluq se malumat thee ,mere ilm main jab yeh bhi baat thi ke,"shayer ke chandd aise bandd jo baher main muwafiq aur qafiye main muqtaleef hon,iss tareh nazm karna ke ek hi bait har bandd ke aakhir main aae aur har bandd ke akhiri sher  ke mazmoon se muwafaqat  kare" jiss ko tarjee'a bandd kehte hain",mere zahen main tab yeh baat zahen rasa thi,uss bunyaad pe meine woh comment diye thhe.mere aziz parwaaz saheb aap yeh na samjh len ke adeeb saheb se yahaan bahes horahi hai.aur aap yeh bhi na  samjhein ke adeeb saheb ki salahiyaataon se ahl-e-bazm ko inkaar hai,aap ke khud ke alfaaz(hum adeeb ji ki bhi side lenge) kya matlab ?ke yahaan adeeb saheb ki "hum sub ahl-e-bazm ko unki salahiyato'n se tazad hai? nahi ..hum adeeb saheb ka dil se ehteraam karte hain,agar unse bahes bhi karte hain to kuch sikhne ke liye naa ke ilzaam tarashi ke falsafe ki buniyaad pe,.aap ko shayed meri baad giraan guzri ho,meine yeh iss liye keh raha hon ke aap ki qabilayat se mein waqif hon aur na hi meri kam ilmi se aap ,lehaza aap se darkhwast hai ke muhtaat andaaz main hi ilmi bahes main hissa lein,kyun ke yahaan sub seekhne ke liye aae hain ,agar aapke pass ilmi qaabiliyat zyada ho to hum jaise talib ilmao main baanteiga,.behatar rahega befuzul ki bahessaon se,.kisi ko meri baat giraan guzri ho to muzarat chahta hon.

Maine yeh thread, meri ek bahaut khaas dost kay liye likhi thi aur ek koshish thi kay woh laut aaein aur yeh bhi kay koi professionally writing ko bhool, jazbaton ko bhi parra kare..Khair main chahunga kay agey se iss thread par koi arguments na ho..

Parwaaz jee, ap dil pe na lein..Logon ka kaam kehna hai aur kehte rahenge, ap itna dekhiye kay kayi log yahan hai jo apki kavitaon ko pasand karte hai..bas itna hi kehna chahunga..

Yeh thought pe dhyan dijiyega..:

Ager koi sabki sirf tariff karta,
Toh hum usse insaan nahin kehte..


Neel jee, thanks for coming back.! 

Kapil Dost, haan koshish kamyab hui.!