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waise to ham sabhi ke sath kabhi kabhi eisa hota he ki likhte waqt ehsaas hi nahi hota ki kya likh gayeee..bad me malum hota he ki asmaan ko zameen pe lakar jaise kisi ek hi shabda ne patak diya hoo...
karna tto nahi chahta tha par mujhse bhi eisi galti ek do bar ho gayi..unhi me se ek aapke samne aaj pesh kar raha hun ...aapne iske kuchh-ek sher to yahan mere dwara sune hi hoge aaj pehli bar poora kalaam pesh jar raha hun..gustakhi maaf hooo...
yun to aaj bhi mehfil me mere nam ki shamma jalai jati he
or me ab bhi "Abhi" khud ko maa ki god me mehsoos karta hun..
manjile waise to mere kadam tak aate aate hosh kho deti he
or me ab bhi "Abhi" manjilo ko khone ke khyal se darta hun..
muhabbat mere dil ko hoti nahi kisise itna paththar ho gay he kambakhta
or me ab bhi "Abhi" zaalim toot na jaye kahin is khyal se darta hun..
hain samandar or dariya meri shayari me samaye huye
oe me ab bhi "Abhi" ek boond pyaar ko pyasa bhatakta hun..
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«Reply #1 on: October 01, 2010, 06:51:04 AM » |
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abhi ji.......kya khubb kaha hai aapne...
har sher mere sune hue hain aapse..lekin aaj pura padhkar alag hi maza aaya...
sply apka fav last stanza....
jo aapne edit kar diya yahan....
par bht khubsurat ehsaas....
tu nahin janta k tu kya hai *abhi* hum sab ke liye
ek jharna hai *abhi* jo har dil ko shabdon se bhigota ai |
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«Reply #2 on: October 01, 2010, 06:58:17 AM » |
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nahi anu jiii me kuchh nahi hun zubaan se jo keh nahi saka kabhi wo likh kar keheta hu bas..ye shabd hi bas meri zindagi he kya karun..isse jyada me kuchh anhi hun...
bahut achha laga ki apko pasand aaya....
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«Reply #3 on: October 01, 2010, 07:12:04 AM » |
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apne dil ki baat keh to sakte ho na chahe jaise bhi kaho...
bas khudko jitna samjh paye ho kaash main bhi samjh paun...
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«Reply #4 on: October 01, 2010, 07:34:19 AM » |
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waise to ham sabhi ke sath kabhi kabhi eisa hota he ki likhte waqt ehsaas hi nahi hota ki kya likh gayeee..bad me malum hota he ki asmaan ko zameen pe lakar jaise kisi ek hi shabda ne patak diya hoo...
karna tto nahi chahta tha par mujhse bhi eisi galti ek do bar ho gayi..unhi me se ek aapke samne aaj pesh kar raha hun ...aapne iske kuchh-ek sher to yahan mere dwara sune hi hoge aaj pehli bar poora kalaam pesh jar raha hun..gustakhi maaf hooo...
yun to aaj bhi mehfil me mere nam ki shamma jalai jati he
or me ab bhi "Abhi" khud ko maa ki god me mehsoos karta hun..
manjile waise to mere kadam tak aate aate hosh kho deti he
or me ab bhi "Abhi" manjilo ko khone ke khyal se darta hun..
muhabbat mere dil ko hoti nahi kisise itna paththar ho gay he kambakhta
or me ab bhi "Abhi" zaalim toot na jaye kahin is khyal se darta hun..
hain samandar or dariya meri shayari me samaye huye
oe me ab bhi "Abhi" ek boond pyaar ko pyasa bhatakta hun..
Bahut Bahut Khoob Abhi Ji..Bahut Hi Khoobsurat Khayaalo Ko Lafzon mein Baandha Hai..Jigar Muraadi Saheb ka Sher Arz Karna Chaahta Hoon..
Teri khushi Se Agar Gham Mein Bhi Khushi Naa Hui
Woh Zindagi To Mohabbat Ki Zindagi Naa Hui.. |
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«Reply #5 on: October 01, 2010, 07:40:11 AM » |
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wah ji wah...bahut khoob kaha..
bahut bahut shukriya pasand karne ke liye~
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«Reply #6 on: October 01, 2010, 07:42:00 AM » |
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wah ji wah...bahut khoob kaha..
bahut bahut shukriya pasand karne ke liye~
Abhi ji, Yeh Sher Jigar Muraadi Saheb na Kaha Hai,Hmne To bas Yaad Rakha..Shukriya  |
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«Reply #7 on: October 01, 2010, 07:52:55 AM » |
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janta hu khwaish bhaii~
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«Reply #8 on: October 01, 2010, 10:19:00 AM » |
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bahut khoob abhi ji...
i like the third one more..
keep writing.
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«Reply #10 on: October 01, 2010, 10:49:38 AM » |
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bahut khoob abhi ji...
i like the third one more..
keep writing.
bahut bahut shukriya manjil ji apka ...hosla badhane ke liyee |
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«Reply #11 on: October 01, 2010, 10:51:07 AM » |
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Abhi jee, Maza agaya parrkar..maza bahaut aya parrkar...kuch apne dil ki awaz mehsoos hui iss nazm main isiliye zada dil se parra..bahaut khoob..  shukriya Rahim BHai apko pasand aayi bas wahi bahut he ahamre liyee~ |
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«Reply #12 on: October 01, 2010, 03:13:24 PM » |
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bahut khoob Abhi ji...!!!
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«Reply #13 on: October 04, 2010, 07:41:23 AM » |
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dhanyawad kapil sahab~
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«Reply #14 on: October 04, 2010, 07:52:56 AM » |
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WAH KYA BAT HAI ABHITAMRAKAR JI.....
"EK BOOND PYAR KO PYASA HUN"
PHIR BHI PYAS BHUJANE SE DARTA HUN
KAHIN PYAR KO AMRIT SAMAJH KAR PEENE SE
YE ZINDAGI ZAHER NA HOJAAYE JEENE MEIN...
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on eTI community..
