geet jo tu gungunaave,,,,,,jeet jainam

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thoda sa diffrent likhne ki koshish ki hai ger koi galti ho to maaf kijiyega

aangan me geet jo tu gungunaave,
koyaliya bhi wohi sur dohraave,

jis bhi nagari meintu chali jaave,
zamana bhi tere piche chal  aave,

ek nazar bhar jo tujhe dekh leve,,
hosh o hawaas me bhi behak sa jaave,

morni chaal se teri qamer balkhave,
dil pe rakh lu hath ye fisal sa jaave,

savere uthke jab baalo ko lehraave,
mosam ki chaal bhi badal see jaave,

khiyalo me jab tu nazar nhi aave,
mun vichlitt hoke dehal sa jaave,

           jj saini
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«Reply #1 on: June 24, 2014, 03:00:22 AM »
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bahut umdah Jeet Sahib.
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«Reply #2 on: June 24, 2014, 04:29:54 AM »
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Khoobsuratttttttttttttttttttttttttttt Nice one Jeet jee.
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«Reply #3 on: June 24, 2014, 09:06:06 AM »
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hunnn... acha hau jeetji

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«Reply #8 on: June 24, 2014, 02:01:22 PM »
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बहुत अच्छी कोशिश है......


रचना की तारतम्यता को बनाये रखने के लिये कुछ सुझाव.....

savere uthke jab baalo ko lehrati hai, lehraave
mosam ki chaal bhi badal see jaave,

khiyalo me jab tu nazar nhi aati, aave
mun vichlitt hoke dehal sa jaave,
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Wah kya baat.
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Quote from: jeet jainam on June 24, 2014, 01:51:15 AM
thoda sa diffrent likhne ki koshish ki hai ger koi galti ho to maaf kijiyega

aangan me geet jo tu gungunaave,
koyaliya bhi wohi sur dohraave,

jis bhi nagari meintu chali jaave,
zamana bhi tere piche chal  aave,

ek nazar bhar jo tujhe dekh leve,,
hosh o hawaas me bhi behak sa jaave,

morni chaal se teri qamer balkhave,
dil pe rakh lu hath ye fisal sa jaave,

savere uthke jab baalo ko lehraave,
mosam ki chaal bhi badal see jaave,

khiyalo me jab tu nazar nhi aave,
mun vichlitt hoke dehal sa jaave,

           jj saini




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