Hamari Haveli ( Qadeertoopchi )

by qadeer_junaid on May 04, 2010, 09:58:17 AM
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Ahle Mahefil Adaab

5 Mahine Qabl Jab india gaya tha to Hamare Abba o Ajdad ki haweli ko jana naseeb howa , jahan humne apna adhe se ziyada bachpan guzara .. ussi ki manzar kashi karne ki koshih ki gayi hai ,, apni aara se nawazen..

Hamara Abha-e- Watan


Aaj eak tawil arse ke baad yahan aya hon to dil ki ajeeb kaifiyath hai ,,khuch aisi yadon ka nuzool howa ke maazi ke auraaq khud ba khud khulne lage ..

Yahi wo angan hai jahan kabhi bachpan ki gulkhariyan howa karti thin ,
yahi wo daraqth hai jahan parinde subha ka ilaan kiya karte the ,
yahi wo chabutre hain jahan patang baziyan howa karti thi ,
ye chaupale aaj bhi aama – chachimaa – aur badi maa ki yaad dilate hain ,
yahi wo kursi hai jahan dada jaan baitha karte the,
yahi wo diwaren hain jo kabhi rangin howa karti thi ,
ye wohi taaq hain jahan suraj ke guroob hote hi charag jalaya  karte the ,
aur wo charag haweli ki numayendigi kiya karte the ,
yahi wo kumra hai jahan bachpan din bhar ki halqaan ke baad so jaya karta tha ,
aur khuch aise qaabon ka tana bana bona karta tha,
jiski taabir shayad hi koi bata sake ,,

Magar aaj manzar badal chukka hai ,

Na wo awazen hain , na wo chahere ,
Na wo angan ki gulkhariyan hain ,
na daraqath ka wo Ghana saya hai ,
na uski wo taheniyan , na parinde na unke ghuslen ,
na chubutron pe wo patang baazi hai ,
na chaupalon pe wo raunaq hai, na taaq me wo charag hain ,
na wo diwaron ki ranginiyan , ab yahan khuch nahi hai ,,
na kursi pe wo saqt mizaj dada jaan hain,

bus…

Dada jaan ki ye qaali kursi ,
khud se uktaya howa ye budha daraqath ,
tawil arse se sukha ye kuwan ,  
charag ki maheromi ka matham karte ye benoor se taaq ,
ye dhundlai howi diwaren , ye nangle darwaze ,
char so viraani o bebasi , bus yahi rahe gaya hai hamari is pushteni haweli me ,,

aag lage ye char din ki jawani ko “Qadeer”!!
Chin Liya kambaqath ne Mujh se bachpan mera !!

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«Reply #1 on: May 04, 2010, 12:52:01 PM »
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Bahot achhi nazm likhi hai Abdul Qadeer bhai. Purani baatein ya to bahot dinon tak yaad nahi aati lekin jab aati hain to bahot tadpaati hai. Jee karta hai phir usi mahaul usi fiza mein jeene ka mauqa mil jaaye. Magar aisa kabhi nahi ho sakta. Bahot achhi manzarkashi ki hai aapne. Marhaba.
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«Reply #2 on: May 04, 2010, 01:36:19 PM »
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Quote from: riyaz106 on May 04, 2010, 12:52:01 PM
Bahot achhi nazm likhi hai Abdul Qadeer bhai. Purani baatein ya to bahot dinon tak yaad nahi aati lekin jab aati hain to bahot tadpaati hai. Jee karta hai phir usi mahaul usi fiza mein jeene ka mauqa mil jaaye. Magar aisa kabhi nahi ho sakta. Bahot achhi manzarkashi ki hai aapne. Marhaba.

riyaz sahab zarranawazi hai apki ,, bilkul baja farmaya hai apne ..inayath ke liye shukriya .. allah apko hamesha khush rakhe ..


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«Reply #3 on: May 04, 2010, 02:45:45 PM »
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Bahut Bahut Khoob Qadeer Bhai....

 Massumiyat se bhare ehsaas,Insaan chaahe kitna bhi Bada kyon na ho jaaye,Bachpan Ki yaadein Aur Woh Purana Makaan Jahan Woh rehta Tha,Jahan Woh Khelta Tha,Jahan Usne Zindagi ke sabse haseen Pal Beetaye,Kabhi Nahi Bhool Paata Hai..Yehi sach hai..Aapki iss nazm ne Mujhe Bhi Mere Guzre Hue daur Ki Tasveer dikhayi hai..Maine Meri Padhai Sharjah Jo ki U.A.E mein Ki thi,mujhe bhi mere woh haseen Pal Humesha Yaad Rahenge..Koshish Karunga Ke Inn ehsaas Ko Main Bhi Kabhi Nazm Mein Utaar Paau..

Bahut bahut Khoob Mere Bhai Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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«Reply #4 on: May 04, 2010, 05:07:54 PM »
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Quote from: khwaish on May 04, 2010, 02:45:45 PM
Bahut Bahut Khoob Qadeer Bhai....

 Massumiyat se bhare ehsaas,Insaan chaahe kitna bhi Bada kyon na ho jaaye,Bachpan Ki yaadein Aur Woh Purana Makaan Jahan Woh rehta Tha,Jahan Woh Khelta Tha,Jahan Usne Zindagi ke sabse haseen Pal Beetaye,Kabhi Nahi Bhool Paata Hai..Yehi sach hai..Aapki iss nazm ne Mujhe Bhi Mere Guzre Hue daur Ki Tasveer dikhayi hai..Maine Meri Padhai Sharjah Jo ki U.A.E mein Ki thi,mujhe bhi mere woh haseen Pal Humesha Yaad Rahenge..Koshish Karunga Ke Inn ehsaas Ko Main Bhi Kabhi Nazm Mein Utaar Paau..

Bahut bahut Khoob Mere Bhai Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley

inayath ka shukriya , apne baja farmaya ha khawish sahab ,, bacha ban jaata hai insaan jab kabhi maazi me chala jaata hai ,, waise apki nazm ka besabri se intezar rahega mere bhai .. allah apko hamesha khush rakhe ..


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«Reply #5 on: May 04, 2010, 09:11:10 PM »
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Kya baat hai mere bhai........lajawab kar diya aapne, dil se daad kabool kare.....

Meri aukaat to nahi ke main bhi aisa kuch keh saku par jo toota foota samajh me aaya isi mauzu par maine bhi likhne ki koshish ki hai jo aapki is khoobsurat peshkash ki nazar kar raha hu..

http://www.yoindia.com/shayariadab/shayri-for-dard-e-judai/lautoge-kab-ghayel-t56049.0.html;new
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«Reply #6 on: May 04, 2010, 09:25:48 PM »
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Qadeer sahab bhut hi khoobsruti se piroya hai aapne apne jazbato.N ko alfaazo.n mai.n, gaye dino ke saare qisse aankho.N mai lambi lambi qatarein baandhe khade hote hai.N jinko banyaan karna ek mushkil kaam hi nahi bhlke hosla bhi chahiye un beete huway kal se bahar aane ka bhi, aapki is paishkash ke baare mai kya kaha jaaye lafz nhi hai bas itna hi keh sakta hu.N bhut khoob bhut khoob, likhte rahiye


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«Reply #7 on: May 04, 2010, 11:19:43 PM »
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Quote from: Sajid_Ghayel on May 04, 2010, 09:11:10 PM
Kya baat hai mere bhai........lajawab kar diya aapne, dil se daad kabool kare.....

Meri aukaat to nahi ke main bhi aisa kuch keh saku par jo toota foota samajh me aaya isi mauzu par maine bhi likhne ki koshish ki hai jo aapki is khoobsurat peshkash ki nazar kar raha hu..

http://www.yoindia.com/shayariadab/shayri-for-dard-e-judai/lautoge-kab-ghayel-t56049.0.html;new

bahoth bahoth shukriya is inayath ka .. apki nazron ka kamal hai sajid sahab baaqi hamari kya bisath...sub apke mahubbath hai jo is tarhan se nawazte ho ..dad ke liye mashkor o mumno hon .. allah tumhe khush rakhe .. waise apke kya kahene hamesha se hi lajawab kahete ho app .. link dene ke liye behad shukriya ..



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«Reply #8 on: May 05, 2010, 07:49:48 AM »
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Kya baat hai TOPCHI saahab.
 ainsa manzar to bade dilwale dekhte hain.
 or aapme wo baat hai,bahut khubsurat dil ko chu gaya
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«Reply #9 on: May 05, 2010, 02:15:38 PM »
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Quote from: reyan KHAN on May 05, 2010, 07:49:48 AM
Kya baat hai TOPCHI saahab.
 ainsa manzar to bade dilwale dekhte hain.
 or aapme wo baat hai,bahut khubsurat dil ko chu gaya


karam nawazi ke liye behad mumnoo hon bhai ,, apki mahubbath hai bhaijaan ,, yunhi nawazte rahiyega ,,hausla afzai ke liye fir se shukriya .. allah apko khush rakhe ..


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«Reply #10 on: May 05, 2010, 02:17:22 PM »
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Quote from: aaina on May 04, 2010, 09:25:48 PM
Qadeer sahab bhut hi khoobsruti se piroya hai aapne apne jazbato.N ko alfaazo.n mai.n, gaye dino ke saare qisse aankho.N mai lambi lambi qatarein baandhe khade hote hai.N jinko banyaan karna ek mushkil kaam hi nahi bhlke hosla bhi chahiye un beete huway kal se bahar aane ka bhi, aapki is paishkash ke baare mai kya kaha jaaye lafz nhi hai bas itna hi keh sakta hu.N bhut khoob bhut khoob, likhte rahiye


aslam

bhai aslam sahab ,, ya apka badtpan hai jo hame is tarhan se nawazte ho app .. app ke aage hamari kya bisath bhai .. hausla afzai ka shukriya ,,inayath banaye rakhiyega bhaijaan .. allah apko khush rakhe ..


apka bhai

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bohat khoob likha hai qadeer ji...behtareen Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #12 on: May 05, 2010, 09:57:02 PM »
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Quote from: Tanha(Saurabh) on May 05, 2010, 04:24:40 PM
bohat khoob likha hai qadeer ji...behtareen Applause Applause Applause Applause

shukriya sahab..



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«Reply #13 on: May 06, 2010, 06:27:43 AM »
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Wah Qadeer ji.bahut dard bhari nazm aapne pesh kiya.apne bachpan ke ehsaaso ko bahut khoobsurti se likha.great work.keep it up.excellent Hats off to you! icon_thumleft Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
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Bohot bohot khoob Qadeer Bhai, aapki nazm ne aakhon ke saamne manzar kheench diya.....jaise aankhain wo sab dekh rahi hon jo aapne likha hai......Aur mere paas lafz nahin ki kuch likhun, bas aap ki nazm dil ke qareeb se guzar gayi......
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