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Dosto pata nahi kabhi kabhi kya ho jata hai...na aage badha jata hai na wapas lautne koi rasta nazar nazar ata hai..kuchh eisii hi baten hain jo aaaj likh gaya ...jaise jaise yaad aati gayi likhta gaya...shayad aapko pasand aaye~kashtiyan to kai hoti hain majhdhaar me yaron
har kashti ko magar kinara nahi milta...
umra bhar jaagte he chakor kai chand ke intzaar me
har kisi ko chand ka deedar nahi milta...
har ghadi dil me koi baat nahi hoti
har dhadkan ko koi saaj nahi milta...
tez chalti hain hawayein aandhi bankar
thehre huye paani ko bhi aaram nahi milta...
waqt ke kante ko bahaar or patjhad se matlab kahan
phool ke sath bhi ho to kante ko chain nahi milta...
umra bhar likhte he shayar kayi
har kisi ki nazzm se araam nahi milta...
kai baar aatee he zindagi me rukne ko panaahgaare
har padaav ko manzil ka naam nahi milta...
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«Reply #1 on: February 07, 2011, 07:49:00 AM » |
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tez chalti hain hawaye----
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Abhi dear kamaal ki line aur kamaal ki soch hai ye.
sabhi aashar behad se bhi jada khub hain lekin Nirala ke liye ek nazm me kuch na kuch mil jaata hai.
mene aapki ye line le li don mnd
aur aapko hazaron kilo daad aur subhkamnaye ki aisi paristhiti na aye
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thanx
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Matrix Guy
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«Reply #2 on: February 07, 2011, 07:57:14 AM » |
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waah dear ........dil ko chu gaya har ek lafj........
behtareen theme bro..........maja aa gaya......
kabhi lafjo me ikraar nahi milta
har baar khamoshi me inkaar nahi milta
ishq ka koi roop nahi koi rang nahi
umrrr beet jati he magar saccha pyar nahi milta
duniya he ye kesi ye koi na jana
milte to log bahot he per yaar nahi milta
dekhta hu harpal duniya ke rangin najare
per khuda kasam ek uska hi deedar nahi milta
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«Reply #3 on: February 07, 2011, 08:59:52 AM » |
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kya baat hai abhi ji....
tareef ke lilye shabd bhi nahi mil rahe....
bht bht khoob....
& mg aap ne bhi kamal likha hai
& last one ke to kahne hi kya....
too good ji..
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dead heart
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«Reply #4 on: February 07, 2011, 12:49:28 PM » |
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Abhi mere dost, apka intro hi mere dil kay jazbaat kehgaya.. haan kabhi aagey nahin barra jata na hi peeche murra jata hai.. wah kya nazm likhi hai apne.. woh 'Tez chalti hai' wala shaer bahaut acha hai..  Dil se daad mere dost..! |
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«Reply #5 on: February 07, 2011, 12:51:19 PM » |
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Utkarsh mere bhai, apne chaar chand laga diye iss thread main.. bahaut khoob likha hai apne.. akhri line kamal hai.. Daad mere bhai.. Khush rahiye..! |
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«Reply #6 on: February 07, 2011, 01:03:54 PM » |
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wow......too good aapne bhaut accha likha hai..  |
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«Reply #7 on: February 07, 2011, 02:14:34 PM » |
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BAhut Khub Abhi Ji
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AbhiTamrakar
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«Reply #8 on: February 08, 2011, 05:48:50 AM » |
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"
tez chalti hain hawaye----
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Abhi dear kamaal ki line aur kamaal ki soch hai ye.
sabhi aashar behad se bhi jada khub hain lekin Nirala ke liye ek nazm me kuch na kuch mil jaata hai.
mene aapki ye line le li don mnd
aur aapko hazaron kilo daad aur subhkamnaye ki aisi paristhiti na aye
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thanx
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shukriya nirala ji... apka sath hi aksar behtar ke liye prerit karta hai.. yunhi sat dijiye~ |
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AbhiTamrakar
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«Reply #9 on: February 08, 2011, 06:01:31 AM » |
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waah dear ........dil ko chu gaya har ek lafj........
behtareen theme bro..........maja aa gaya......
kabhi lafjo me ikraar nahi milta
har baar khamoshi me inkaar nahi milta
ishq ka koi roop nahi koi rang nahi
umrrr beet jati he magar saccha pyar nahi milta
duniya he ye kesi ye koi na jana
milte to log bahot he per yaar nahi milta
dekhta hu harpal duniya ke rangin najare
per khuda kasam ek uska hi deedar nahi milta
u r too good bhaii.. mast reply diyela he ...maja a gaya.. kehene ki jarurat to anh hai fir bhi .. sath rehena yaara~ |
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«Reply #12 on: February 08, 2011, 09:13:21 AM » |
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shayad ab aapki narazgi kuch durr hogi na humse abhi ji.... 
ek behtareen ehsaas jagati kavita hai ye aapki  ......
bas padhte hi likhe bina raha na gaya  ..
janti hun achhca nahin likh pai..but i tried.... 
Lafz nikla rahe hain bht mere dil se
Lekin inko jod de aisa ehsaas nahin milta
Kehna chahti hun bht kuch tumse har baar
Keh dein dil ki baat aisa koi shabd nahin milta
Rangon se bahri padi hai duniya yun to saari
Jo mere chehre ko khilaye aisa koi rang nahin milta
Suron saazon se saji hai mehfil meri fir bhi dost
Dil ko de sukuuun aisa koi manohar geet nahin milta
“Abhi” kya kahun k kya baat hai teri iss kavita me
Na likhun main iska jawab aisa koi kaaran nahin milta…!!!
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«Reply #14 on: February 08, 2011, 09:27:34 AM » |
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Dosto pata nahi kabhi kabhi kya ho jata hai...na aage badha jata hai na wapas lautne koi rasta nazar nazar ata hai..kuchh eisii hi baten hain jo aaaj likh gaya ...jaise jaise yaad aati gayi likhta gaya...shayad aapko pasand aaye~kashtiyan to kai hoti hain majhdhaar me yaron
har kashti ko magar kinara nahi milta...
umra bhar jaagte he chakor kai chand ke intzaar me
har kisi ko chand ka deedar nahi milta...
har ghadi dil me koi baat nahi hoti
har dhadkan ko koi saaj nahi milta...
tez chalti hain hawayein aandhi bankar
thehre huye paani ko bhi aaram nahi milta...
waqt ke kante ko bahaar or patjhad se matlab kahan
phool ke sath bhi ho to kante ko chain nahi milta...
umra bhar likhte he shayar kayi
har kisi ki nazzm se araam nahi milta...
kai baar aatee he zindagi me rukne ko panaahgaare
har padaav ko manzil ka naam nahi milta...
ji khoobsoorat ehsaah..................... |
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