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! Hawao Ka Rukh !
Intzaar Karne Walo Ko Utna Hi Milta He
Jitna Koshish Karne Wale Chod Dete He
Banna He To Tufaan Ban Kar Dekho
Jo Hawao Ka Rukh Mod Dete He
Mukkadar Hatho ki lakiro me nahi hausle me he
Ghar Ban Hi Jata He Jo Tinka Tinka Jod Lete He
Faulad Me Wo Taqat Nahi Jo Apne Hatho Me He
Hath Hi He Jo Faulad Bhi Tod Dete He
Hum Wo Nahi Jo Waqt Ke Sath Mit Jaye
Hum Wo Zakhm He Jo Jate Jate Nishan Chod Dete He
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«Reply #1 on: February 01, 2011, 02:15:16 PM » |
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*KasaK*....Dil Ki
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«Reply #2 on: February 01, 2011, 03:43:08 PM » |
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waahhhhhhhh ji kya baat kahi hai last stanza mastam hai ji.....maza aagaya ji ye poem padhkar....
mast mast ji
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«Reply #3 on: February 01, 2011, 03:43:27 PM » |
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gudduuuuu mastam reply re....bht achcha likha hai
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«Reply #4 on: February 01, 2011, 04:11:47 PM » |
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! Hawao Ka Rukh !
Intzaar Karne Walo Ko Utna Hi Milta He
Jitna Koshish Karne Wale Chod Dete He
Banna He To Tufaan Ban Kar Dekho
Jo Hawao Ka Rukh Mod Dete He
Mukkadar Hatho ki lakiro me nahi hausle me he
Ghar Ban Hi Jata He Jo Tinka Tinka Jod Lete He
Faulad Me Wo Taqat Nahi Jo Apne Hatho Me He
Hath Hi He Jo Faulad Bhi Tod Dete He
Hum Wo Nahi Jo Waqt Ke Sath Mit Jaye
Hum Wo Zakhm He Jo Jate Jate Nishan Chod Dete He
Good One ....... ! Very Nice Creation ....... dil se daad ! |
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«Reply #5 on: February 01, 2011, 06:02:55 PM » |
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NICE
! Hawao Ka Rukh !
Intzaar Karne Walo Ko Utna Hi Milta He
Jitna Koshish Karne Wale Chod Dete He
Banna He To Tufaan Ban Kar Dekho
Jo Hawao Ka Rukh Mod Dete He
Mukkadar Hatho ki lakiro me nahi hausle me he
Ghar Ban Hi Jata He Jo Tinka Tinka Jod Lete He
Faulad Me Wo Taqat Nahi Jo Apne Hatho Me He
Hath Hi He Jo Faulad Bhi Tod Dete He
Hum Wo Nahi Jo Waqt Ke Sath Mit Jaye
Hum Wo Zakhm He Jo Jate Jate Nishan Chod Dete He
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«Reply #7 on: February 02, 2011, 05:05:35 AM » |
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thx koyal ji for ur lovely reply....bahot aacah reply diya he apne......thx alot........
anamika ji apko meri koshsih pasand ayi ye khushi ki baat he......but apke andaaj me reply kaha he ji ?.....
naresh ji apki daad dil se kubul karta hu......shukirya jo apne hausla badaya........
manoj ji apne waqt diya us ke liye apka abhari hu........ese hi sath dete rahiye........
headmaster ji "parwaj ji" apki wah wahi mil gayi ab muje aur kya chahiye........muje mera inaam mil gaya........ese hi encouragement dete rahiye.......
once again thx all
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«Reply #9 on: February 02, 2011, 05:41:43 AM » |
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rajaji reply karungi sab post pe par aajakl likha nahin ja raha ji..so plzz wait ji...jaise hi likhte banega wil reply....
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«Reply #10 on: February 02, 2011, 05:48:36 AM » |
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Matrix ji--
lajawaab creation aapka.
bas ek sikayat kar rha hun--
poore poem me aapne ek Gazab ki seekh di hausle se bharpoor. jo sabke liye tha.
lekin last wala line jo mast h aisa laga ki aapne kisi ko indicate kiya jaise ki Aapne khud par ya jo padhe uss par.
bas ye mera sochna hai--
aapke iss post par dil se daad.
kgus rahiye
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«Reply #11 on: February 02, 2011, 09:41:51 AM » |
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Ban k toofaan badla jo tune hawao ka rukh
Udd gaye unkey bhaav aur shabd ab tou ruk
Likhna bahut hai unhe,dil mai uthta hai vichaaron ka gubbaar
Ginnte hain lekin wo tere diye har zakhm k nishan reh-reh kar rajaji reply karungi sab post pe par aajakl likha nahin ja raha ji..so plzz wait ji...jaise hi likhte banega wil reply....
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«Reply #12 on: February 02, 2011, 10:20:49 AM » |
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mere dil ke zakhmo ki ginti main nain kar sakta
koi dawaa nahin aisi ke zakham bhar nahin sakta
hai dil mein aisi soch ke likh jaoun main pano par
kya karun magar dil ka haal share aam likh nahin sakta
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«Reply #14 on: February 02, 2011, 10:49:39 AM » |
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intezaar wo karte hain
jo kosiso se darte hain
hawaon ka rukh mod de wo
saanson me aisi jo hawa bharte hain
lakeeron me kismat dhundte hai wo
hausle se pastt hote hain jo
faulaad se wo kahan darrte hain
haathon me jo apna zigar rakhte hain
ghar bhi ban jaate hain unke
neele aakas tale jo so sakte hain
zakhmo ke nishaan bhi khanroch daale
wo aisa khanzar rakhte hain
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aapki lajawaab poetry bahut hi jhakashhh hai yaara--
kamaal likhte ho bhai--: meri naadani me likhi baato ka don mind
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thanx
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hum aisi
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