Kaisi Uljhan hai yea !!!!

by deepika_divya on November 05, 2009, 05:08:36 PM
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Meri Tarah Yea Poetry bhi AK Uljan mea hai Ki Kis section mea post karun.. isliye Miscellaneous  mea post kar rahi hun...
मन की व्याता, सुनाये गाता
कबहू सुख की बेला समझ पाये रे

देख दुझे की पीड़ा मेरे बाबुल
मन को मेरे  चैन अब न आए रे

किस असमंजस में पड़े है पाँव
जो मेरे मन को घात लगाए रे

मन मेरा क्यूँ पूछे मुझसे प्रशन
क्यूँ  उतर भी आपहु उलझ जाए रे

गूंजे ग़लत ध्वनी  हर दिशाए
मस्तिष्क भी क्यूँ पथ भटकाए रे

कौन बोले है मीठे  मीठे बोल यहाँ
कौन चुपके से यहाँ बाण चलाए रे

रंग ना जाए मेरे हाथ इस उलझन में
कैसे तेज़ लहरों  से  घर को बचाए रे



Mere iss kavita mea ak panchi( Bird) ka varnan kiya hai maine.. jo sulaj kar bhi uljan mea hai.. paida hone ke kuch ganto mea hi usko maa udna seekha deti hai.. aisi halat mea usko sahi galat ka pata bhi nahi hota... apni hi unchi udaan se woh panchi darne lagta hai uska dil kuch kehta hai aur deemaag kuch...aise mea kahi baar woh khud ko hi gaat( hurt ) kar leta hai... Dusre ki peeda ko jaane k baad woh dheere dheere sambhalne ki koshish karta hai par .. apni Maa pe bhi krodit ( angry ) ho jata hai kyun woh usko itni jaldi khud k pairo pe kada hona seekha deti hai... aur iss ke kaaran woh baad mea pachtata bhi hai...

Anth mea " रंग ना जाए मेरे हाथ इस उलझन में ,कैसे तेज़ लहरों  से  घर को बचाए रे " se tatparye yea hai ki khud k pairo mea khade hona jo itni jaldi usko maa seekha deti hai  usse woh bechara Panchi ( Bird) dar jata hai ki.. kahin khud k pairo me kade hone ki gatna kahin usko uske parivaar se door na kar de...

Iss anthim ( last ) lino se ak aur tathparya hai ki woh panchi unn apne khawabo ki duniyaa bana leta hai yea jaante hue ki maa k saaye k begair har sapna adura hai .( jaise ret mea hum ghar banate hai yea jaante hue bhi ki lehre usko udda denge)
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«Reply #1 on: November 05, 2009, 05:29:08 PM »
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ek alag hi andaaz mein aapne apni uljhano ko shabdon mein utaara hai Sophi ji....beshak lajwaab hai ye andaaz....varnan samajhne mein mushkil toh nahi hui
par aapki post ka intzaar zarur rahega... Usual Smile
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«Reply #2 on: November 05, 2009, 05:37:54 PM »
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Thanks Nikhaar.. thank you so so much..

maine update kiya hai iss kavita ki vyakya ko... Hope ab tume jayda asaani hogi samajne mea ...Usual Smile
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«Reply #3 on: November 05, 2009, 06:07:04 PM »
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Superb as usual Divya-di.... Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Applause Applause Applause

DI pehli line....kuchh jami nahi..

Mann ki vyatha,sunaaye jaati
Kabhu sukh ki bela samajh paaye re

कौन बोले है मीठे  मीठे बोल यहाँ
Mujhe nahi pehchana....koyal bolti meethe bol...

कौन चुपके से यहाँ बाण चलाए रे
Pag-pag par khade behruupiye hain yahaan
Swarth vash apno ko he katl karte sareaam

किस असमंजस में पड़े है पाँव
जो मेरे मन को घात लगाए रे....yahaan kya kehna chah rahi hain aap...what action is harmful for your consience...

मन मेरा क्यूँ पूछे मुझसे प्रशन
क्यूँ  उतर भी आपहु उलझ जाए रे

गूंजे ग़लत ध्वनी  हर दिशाए
मस्तिष्क भी क्यूँ पथ भटकाए रे....ye char panktiyen bahut sunder ban padi hain...bada gehra soch hai inmai....gr8 di....

Divya-di xshma karna mera udeshy kewal aapse seekhne kaa hai...            samiksha karne ka kattai nahi...
kai baar likhne wale k mann k bhaav samajh paana behad kathin hota hai...
Shabd chhote pad jaate hain sahi maayna dene mai...

Quote from: Sophi on November 05, 2009, 05:08:36 PM
Meri Tarah Yea Poetry bhi AK Uljan mea hai Ki Kis section mea post karun.. isliye Miscellaneous  mea post kar rahi hun...
मन की व्याता, सुनाये गाता
कबहू सुख की बेला समझ पाये रे

देख दुझे की पीड़ा मेरे बाबुल
मन को मेरे  चैन अब न आए रे

किस असमंजस में पड़े है पाँव
जो मेरे मन को घात लगाए रे

मन मेरा क्यूँ पूछे मुझसे प्रशन
क्यूँ  उतर भी आपहु उलझ जाए रे

गूंजे ग़लत ध्वनी  हर दिशाए
मस्तिष्क भी क्यूँ पथ भटकाए रे

कौन बोले है मीठे  मीठे बोल यहाँ
कौन चुपके से यहाँ बाण चलाए रे

रंग ना जाए मेरे हाथ इस उलझन में
कैसे तेज़ लहरों  से  घर को बचाए रे



Main iss kavita ka sahi varnan sheegrah post karungi.. jisske aapko iss kavita ka sahi arth samajne mea aasani hogi...


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«Reply #4 on: November 05, 2009, 06:14:17 PM »
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sorry di maine pehle hi likhna shuru kar diya aapka update dekhe bina......Sahi hai vyakhya k bina shabd chhote pad jaate hain sampurn baav samjhane ko...
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«Reply #5 on: November 05, 2009, 07:00:42 PM »
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Wah bahut bahut khoob Sophi ji,really touched.lovely creation,Koyal ji aapne bhi khoob Saath diya Sophi ka.mujhe bahut pasand aayi,aapne itne achi tarah se ye kavita likhi bhi aur samjaayi bhi.keep it up. icon_thumleft Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #6 on: November 05, 2009, 07:13:56 PM »
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Bohot KHoob Divs...bohot hi alag andaaz main likha hai...bohot gehri baatain kahin hain.....Beautiful work  Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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«Reply #7 on: November 06, 2009, 04:44:22 AM »
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Quote from: KOYAL46 on November 05, 2009, 06:07:04 PM
Superb as usual Divya-di.... Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Applause Applause Applause

DI pehli line....kuchh jami nahi..

Mann ki vyatha,sunaaye jaati
Kabhu sukh ki bela samajh paaye re

कौन बोले है मीठे  मीठे बोल यहाँ
Mujhe nahi pehchana....koyal bolti meethe bol...

कौन चुपके से यहाँ बाण चलाए रे
Pag-pag par khade behruupiye hain yahaan
Swarth vash apno ko he katl karte sareaam

किस असमंजस में पड़े है पाँव
जो मेरे मन को घात लगाए रे....yahaan kya kehna chah rahi hain aap...what action is harmful for your consience...

मन मेरा क्यूँ पूछे मुझसे प्रशन
क्यूँ  उतर भी आपहु उलझ जाए रे

गूंजे ग़लत ध्वनी  हर दिशाए
मस्तिष्क भी क्यूँ पथ भटकाए रे....ye char panktiyen bahut sunder ban padi hain...bada gehra soch hai inmai....gr8 di....

Divya-di xshma karna mera udeshy kewal aapse seekhne kaa hai...            samiksha karne ka kattai nahi...
kai baar likhne wale k mann k bhaav samajh paana behad kathin hota hai...
Shabd chhote pad jaate hain sahi maayna dene mai...


Quote from: KOYAL46 on November 05, 2009, 06:14:17 PM
sorry di maine pehle hi likhna shuru kar diya aapka update dekhe bina......Sahi hai vyakhya k bina shabd chhote pad jaate hain sampurn baav samjhane ko...

Thanks Koyal.. its good to see your description regarding the Topic...

No problem dear.. pehle maine socha sayad samajna aasaan hoga.. lekin shabdo peeche chupe pehaluo ko samjana utna hi mushkil hota.. ak k man ki vyata dusre se behad alag hoti hai.. ayways.. maina ab update kar diya hai... shayad ab meri iss kavita k bhav puran roop se spast ho chuke honge...

Thanks again !
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«Reply #8 on: November 06, 2009, 04:45:13 AM »
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Quote from: madhuwesh on November 05, 2009, 07:00:42 PM
Wah bahut bahut khoob Sophi ji,really touched.lovely creation,Koyal ji aapne bhi khoob Saath diya Sophi ka.mujhe bahut pasand aayi,aapne itne achi tarah se ye kavita likhi bhi aur samjaayi bhi.keep it up. icon_thumleft Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause

Thank you so so so much Madhu ji... thanks ki aapko mera likha itna pasand aaya .. thank you !
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«Reply #9 on: November 06, 2009, 04:48:56 AM »
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Quote from: Celmira on November 05, 2009, 07:13:56 PM
Bohot KHoob Divs...bohot hi alag andaaz main likha hai...bohot gehri baatain kahin hain.....Beautiful work  Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley

Thank you soooooo much di... thanks ki aapko meri yea rachna pasand aai.. Usual Smile thanks Di

Aksar gehre saaye mea chupi raah
galat raah ki aur hame mood deti hai
Kis par aithbaar kare ya na kare
kabi khud ki aankhe jhoot bol deti hai
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«Reply #10 on: November 06, 2009, 04:03:21 PM »
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kya baat hai.....sophi ji....

KAISI ULJHAN HAI YEA
SAMAJH NAHIN PAATI HUN MEA
IK TARAF BADI SIYAANI HOGAYI HUN MEA
GHAR KA BOJH LIYA HAI APNE HAATHON MEA
IK TARAF APNE HAATH RANGNE KO TARAS RAHI HUN MEA
MAA KA SAATH CHOD KE JAAUN YEH SOCH GABRA RAHI HUN MEA
KAISI ULJHAN HAI YEA
MAA AUR MERE SAPNO KE BEECH
KAISI ULJHAN HAI YEA.
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«Reply #11 on: November 06, 2009, 04:17:12 PM »
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Quote from: Sophi on November 05, 2009, 05:08:36 PM
Meri Tarah Yea Poetry bhi AK Uljan mea hai Ki Kis section mea post karun.. isliye Miscellaneous  mea post kar rahi hun...
मन की व्याता, सुनाये गाता
कबहू सुख की बेला समझ पाये रे

देख दुझे की पीड़ा मेरे बाबुल
मन को मेरे  चैन अब न आए रे

किस असमंजस में पड़े है पाँव
जो मेरे मन को घात लगाए रे

मन मेरा क्यूँ पूछे मुझसे प्रशन
क्यूँ  उतर भी आपहु उलझ जाए रे

गूंजे ग़लत ध्वनी  हर दिशाए
मस्तिष्क भी क्यूँ पथ भटकाए रे

कौन बोले है मीठे  मीठे बोल यहाँ
कौन चुपके से यहाँ बाण चलाए रे

रंग ना जाए मेरे हाथ इस उलझन में
कैसे तेज़ लहरों  से  घर को बचाए रे



Mere iss kavita mea ak panchi( Bird) ka varnan kiya hai maine.. jo sulaj kar bhi uljan mea hai.. paida hone ke kuch ganto mea hi usko maa udna seekha deti hai.. aisi halat mea usko sahi galat ka pata bhi nahi hota... apni hi unchi udaan se woh panchi darne lagta hai uska dil kuch kehta hai aur deemaag kuch...aise mea kahi baar woh khud ko hi gaat( hurt ) kar leta hai... Dusre ki peeda ko jaane k baad woh dheere dheere sambhalne ki koshish karta hai par .. apni Maa pe bhi krodit ( angry ) ho jata hai kyun woh usko itni jaldi khud k pairo pe kada hona seekha deti hai... aur iss ke kaaran woh baad mea pachtata bhi hai...

Anth mea " रंग ना जाए मेरे हाथ इस उलझन में ,कैसे तेज़ लहरों  से  घर को बचाए रे " se tatparye yea hai ki khud k pairo mea khade hona jo itni jaldi usko maa seekha deti hai  usse woh bechara Panchi ( Bird) dar jata hai ki.. kahin khud k pairo me kade hone ki gatna kahin usko uske parivaar se door na kar de...

Iss anthim ( last ) lino se ak aur tathparya hai ki woh panchi unn apne khawabo ki duniyaa bana leta hai yea jaante hue ki maa k saaye k begair har sapna adura hai .( jaise ret mea hum ghar banate hai yea jaante hue bhi ki lehre usko udda denge)



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«Reply #12 on: November 06, 2009, 04:18:52 PM »
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Quote from: KOYAL46 on November 05, 2009, 06:07:04 PM



Mann ki vyatha,sunaaye jaati
Kabhu sukh ki bela samajh paaye re

कौन बोले है मीठे  मीठे बोल यहाँ
Mujhe nahi pehchana....koyal bolti meethe bol...

कौन चुपके से यहाँ बाण चलाए रे
Pag-pag par khade behruupiye hain yahaan
Swarth vash apno ko he katl karte sareaam

किस असमंजस में पड़े है पाँव
जो मेरे मन को घात लगाए रे....yahaan kya kehna chah rahi hain aap...what action is harmful for your consience...

मन मेरा क्यूँ पूछे मुझसे प्रशन
क्यूँ  उतर भी आपहु उलझ जाए रे

गूंजे ग़लत ध्वनी  हर दिशाए
मस्तिष्क भी क्यूँ पथ भटकाए रे....ye char panktiyen bahut sunder ban padi hain...bada gehra soch hai inmai....gr8 di....

Divya-di xshma karna mera udeshy kewal aapse seekhne kaa hai...            samiksha karne ka kattai nahi...
kai baar likhne wale k mann k bhaav samajh paana behad kathin hota hai...
Shabd chhote pad jaate hain sahi maayna dene mai...


Nice Koyal JI
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«Reply #13 on: November 06, 2009, 04:19:35 PM »
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Quote from: cara on November 06, 2009, 04:03:21 PM


KAISI ULJHAN HAI YEA
SAMAJH NAHIN PAATI HUN MEA
IK TARAF BADI SIYAANI HOGAYI HUN MEA
GHAR KA BOJH LIYA HAI APNE HAATHON MEA
IK TARAF APNE HAATH RANGNE KO TARAS RAHI HUN MEA
MAA KA SAATH CHOD KE JAAUN YEH SOCH GABRA RAHI HUN MEA
KAISI ULJHAN HAI YEA
MAA AUR MERE SAPNO KE BEECH KAISI ULJHAN HAI YEA.

Nice Cara Ji
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«Reply #14 on: November 06, 2009, 06:22:26 PM »
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Thanks a lot Divya-di.....aapse bahoot kuchh seekhna hai mujhe....

Quote from: Sophi on November 06, 2009, 04:44:22 AM
Thanks Koyal.. its good to see your description regarding the Topic...

No problem dear.. pehle maine socha sayad samajna aasaan hoga.. lekin shabdo peeche chupe pehaluo ko samjana utna hi mushkil hota.. ak k man ki vyata dusre se behad alag hoti hai.. ayways.. maina ab update kar diya hai... shayad ab meri iss kavita k bhav puran roop se spast ho chuke honge...

Thanks again !
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