Kaisi Uljhan hai yea !!!!

by deepika_divya on November 05, 2009, 05:08:36 PM
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«Reply #15 on: November 07, 2009, 06:19:20 AM »
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Ab Jin Lafzon Me Yeh Rachna Likhi Hai Unhi Lafzon Me Taareef Bhi Karni Padegi..  Giggle  Winking

Atyant Hi Sunder aur Manmohak Rachna Yahan Likhi hai aapne Divya Ji.. is Kavita Ke Maadhyam se aapne Jo vichaar Humaare saamne Rakhe Hain.. wo Prashansa Ke Adhikaari Hain.. Atyant Sunder.. Applause Applause  icon_thumleft icon_thumleft



**~** Mann **~**
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«Reply #16 on: November 07, 2009, 06:44:50 AM »
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Meri Tarah Yea Poetry bhi AK Uljan mea hai Ki Kis section mea post karun.. isliye Miscellaneous  mea post kar rahi hun...
मन की व्याता, सुनाये गाता
कबहू सुख की बेला समझ पाये रे

देख दुझे की पीड़ा मेरे बाबुल
मन को मेरे  चैन अब न आए रे

किस असमंजस में पड़े है पाँव
जो मेरे मन को घात लगाए रे

मन मेरा क्यूँ पूछे मुझसे प्रशन
क्यूँ  उतर भी आपहु उलझ जाए रे

गूंजे ग़लत ध्वनी  हर दिशाए
मस्तिष्क भी क्यूँ पथ भटकाए रे

कौन बोले है मीठे  मीठे बोल यहाँ
कौन चुपके से यहाँ बाण चलाए रे

रंग ना जाए मेरे हाथ इस उलझन में
कैसे तेज़ लहरों  से  घर को बचाए रे



Mere iss kavita mea ak panchi( Bird) ka varnan kiya hai maine.. jo sulaj kar bhi uljan mea hai.. paida hone ke kuch ganto mea hi usko maa udna seekha deti hai.. aisi halat mea usko sahi galat ka pata bhi nahi hota... apni hi unchi udaan se woh panchi darne lagta hai uska dil kuch kehta hai aur deemaag kuch...aise mea kahi baar woh khud ko hi gaat( hurt ) kar leta hai... Dusre ki peeda ko jaane k baad woh dheere dheere sambhalne ki koshish karta hai par .. apni Maa pe bhi krodit ( angry ) ho jata hai kyun woh usko itni jaldi khud k pairo pe kada hona seekha deti hai... aur iss ke kaaran woh baad mea pachtata bhi hai...

Anth mea " रंग ना जाए मेरे हाथ इस उलझन में ,कैसे तेज़ लहरों  से  घर को बचाए रे " se tatparye yea hai ki khud k pairo mea khade hona jo itni jaldi usko maa seekha deti hai  usse woh bechara Panchi ( Bird) dar jata hai ki.. kahin khud k pairo me kade hone ki gatna kahin usko uske parivaar se door na kar de...

Iss anthim ( last ) lino se ak aur tathparya hai ki woh panchi unn apne khawabo ki duniyaa bana leta hai yea jaante hue ki maa k saaye k begair har sapna adura hai .( jaise ret mea hum ghar banate hai yea jaante hue bhi ki lehre usko udda denge)
Beautiful puece of work Divya Ji
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«Reply #17 on: November 07, 2009, 10:23:12 AM »
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nice
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«Reply #18 on: December 03, 2009, 12:53:05 PM »
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kya baat hai.....sophi ji....

KAISI ULJHAN HAI YEA
SAMAJH NAHIN PAATI HUN MEA
IK TARAF BADI SIYAANI HOGAYI HUN MEA
GHAR KA BOJH LIYA HAI APNE HAATHON MEA
IK TARAF APNE HAATH RANGNE KO TARAS RAHI HUN MEA
MAA KA SAATH CHOD KE JAAUN YEH SOCH GABRA RAHI HUN MEA
KAISI ULJHAN HAI YEA
MAA AUR MERE SAPNO KE BEECH
KAISI ULJHAN HAI YEA.

Thanks and Bahoot Khoob Likha hai cera ji
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«Reply #19 on: December 03, 2009, 01:23:05 PM »
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bahut hi khubsurat likha hai aapne divya ji Applause

Thanks Rishi !
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«Reply #20 on: December 03, 2009, 01:23:32 PM »
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Ab Jin Lafzon Me Yeh Rachna Likhi Hai Unhi Lafzon Me Taareef Bhi Karni Padegi..  Giggle  Winking

Atyant Hi Sunder aur Manmohak Rachna Yahan Likhi hai aapne Divya Ji.. is Kavita Ke Maadhyam se aapne Jo vichaar Humaare saamne Rakhe Hain.. wo Prashansa Ke Adhikaari Hain.. Atyant Sunder.. Applause Applause  icon_thumleft icon_thumleft



**~** Mann **~**

Thank you sooooooooooo Much Mann urf Vicky Usual Smile
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«Reply #21 on: December 03, 2009, 01:23:55 PM »
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Beautiful puece of work Divya Ji

Thank you Rajesh ji!
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«Reply #22 on: December 03, 2009, 01:24:18 PM »
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nice

Thanks Qazgani ji
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«Reply #23 on: December 04, 2009, 12:12:16 PM »
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Sabhi achha likh rahe hain..... Applause Applause Applause


Kaisi uljhan hai yea,suljha-ye nahi sulajhti
Kaisi hai ye aag jo lakh bujhaye nahi bujhti
Raah tou hongi aneko,ek bhi magar nahi sujhti
Pee tou liya hai Aabe-hayaat,pyas nahi bujhti
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«Reply #24 on: December 21, 2009, 03:26:48 PM »
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Sabhi achha likh rahe hain..... Applause Applause Applause


Kaisi uljhan hai yea,suljha-ye nahi sulajhti
Kaisi hai ye aag jo lakh bujhaye nahi bujhti
Raah tou hongi aneko,ek bhi magar nahi sujhti
Pee tou liya hai Aabe-hayaat,pyas nahi bujhti


Wow.. Good One Koyal ~!
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«Reply #25 on: December 21, 2009, 06:29:40 PM »
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Thanks a lot Divya-di......
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«Reply #26 on: December 21, 2009, 06:37:48 PM »
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Kaisi Uljhan hai yea,kya haal huaa hai mera
Na mujh se rote bantaa hai na haste banta hai
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«Reply #27 on: December 26, 2009, 12:45:14 PM »
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waah bahut khoob likha hai sophi ji aapney Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #28 on: January 25, 2010, 07:31:12 AM »
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waah bahut khoob likha hai sophi ji aapney Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause

Thank You so  much.. itni saari taaliyaan mujhe samaj nahi a raha kaise shukriyaan karun.. thanks u again !
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«Reply #29 on: January 25, 2010, 07:40:27 AM »
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Bahut bahut Khoob Sophi..

Bahut Hi khoobsurat Kavita Likhi Hai Aapne..Waise To Aapne Ek panchi Ka Udhaaran Diya Hai,Par Agar isse Aise Bhi Padha Jaaye,To Bhaut Gehri Baatein Ki Hai Aapne..Bahut Ache.. Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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