Kaisi Uljhan hai yea !!!!

by deepika_divya on November 05, 2009, 05:08:36 PM
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«Reply #30 on: January 25, 2010, 08:43:55 AM »
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Bahoot Bahoot Aabaar Khwaish ji.. Aapko Yea kavita pasand aai aur iske bhaav bhi.. Shukriyaa !
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«Reply #31 on: January 25, 2010, 10:31:16 AM »
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bahut hi achi rachna
bade ache se likha hai aapne Sophi ji
umda, awesome  Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause

Bahoot Bahoot Shukriyaa Kaash ji !
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«Reply #32 on: January 26, 2010, 02:35:57 PM »
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Meri Tarah Yea Poetry bhi AK Uljan mea hai Ki Kis section mea post karun.. isliye Miscellaneous  mea post kar rahi hun...
मन की व्याता, सुनाये गाता
कबहू सुख की बेला समझ पाये रे

देख दुझे की पीड़ा मेरे बाबुल
मन को मेरे  चैन अब न आए रे

किस असमंजस में पड़े है पाँव
जो मेरे मन को घात लगाए रे

मन मेरा क्यूँ पूछे मुझसे प्रशन
क्यूँ  उतर भी आपहु उलझ जाए रे

गूंजे ग़लत ध्वनी  हर दिशाए
मस्तिष्क भी क्यूँ पथ भटकाए रे

कौन बोले है मीठे  मीठे बोल यहाँ
कौन चुपके से यहाँ बाण चलाए रे

रंग ना जाए मेरे हाथ इस उलझन में
कैसे तेज़ लहरों  से  घर को बचाए रे



Mere iss kavita mea ak panchi( Bird) ka varnan kiya hai maine.. jo sulaj kar bhi uljan mea hai.. paida hone ke kuch ganto mea hi usko maa udna seekha deti hai.. aisi halat mea usko sahi galat ka pata bhi nahi hota... apni hi unchi udaan se woh panchi darne lagta hai uska dil kuch kehta hai aur deemaag kuch...aise mea kahi baar woh khud ko hi gaat( hurt ) kar leta hai... Dusre ki peeda ko jaane k baad woh dheere dheere sambhalne ki koshish karta hai par .. apni Maa pe bhi krodit ( angry ) ho jata hai kyun woh usko itni jaldi khud k pairo pe kada hona seekha deti hai... aur iss ke kaaran woh baad mea pachtata bhi hai...

Anth mea " रंग ना जाए मेरे हाथ इस उलझन में ,कैसे तेज़ लहरों  से  घर को बचाए रे " se tatparye yea hai ki khud k pairo mea khade hona jo itni jaldi usko maa seekha deti hai  usse woh bechara Panchi ( Bird) dar jata hai ki.. kahin khud k pairo me kade hone ki gatna kahin usko uske parivaar se door na kar de...

Iss anthim ( last ) lino se ak aur tathparya hai ki woh panchi unn apne khawabo ki duniyaa bana leta hai yea jaante hue ki maa k saaye k begair har sapna adura hai .( jaise ret mea hum ghar banate hai yea jaante hue bhi ki lehre usko udda denge)

Dear divya bahut bahut accha likha hai tumne. aur

" रंग ना जाए मेरे हाथ इस उलझन में
कैसे तेज़ लहरों  से  घर को बचाए रे "

Wonderful  Applause Applause Applause



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«Reply #33 on: January 27, 2010, 06:07:23 AM »
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Dear divya bahut bahut accha likha hai tumne. aur

" रंग ना जाए मेरे हाथ इस उलझन में
कैसे तेज़ लहरों  से  घर को बचाए रे "

Wonderful  Applause Applause Applause





Thank You so much Roja !
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«Reply #34 on: January 30, 2010, 03:18:55 AM »
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One more nice creation from you dear divya...

Koyal nice description and as usual good sher from you Cara ji  Usual Smile
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«Reply #35 on: January 30, 2010, 12:29:47 PM »
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Thanks Malli for appeciation...

One more nice creation from you dear divya...

Koyal nice description and as usual good sher from you Cara ji  Usual Smile

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mkv
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«Reply #36 on: December 30, 2011, 04:13:34 PM »
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Vow
wonderful..u have written it so nicely that i don't have proper words for praise.
pahli line se hi.. nice.
laybaddha panktiya.. afterall...explained everything..how nice..
god bless u.
Applause Applause
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«Reply #37 on: December 30, 2011, 04:28:14 PM »
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One more nice creation from you dear divya...

Koyal nice description and as usual good sher from you Cara ji  Usual Smile


thank you Roja )
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«Reply #38 on: December 30, 2011, 04:28:51 PM »
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Vow
wonderful..u have written it so nicely that i don't have proper words for praise.
pahli line se hi.. nice.
laybaddha panktiya.. afterall...explained everything..how nice..
god bless u.
Applause Applause

Thank you so much for your lovely encouraging appreciation Usual Smile thank you so much !
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«Reply #39 on: January 04, 2012, 02:11:52 PM »
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Meri Tarah Yea Poetry bhi AK Uljan mea hai Ki Kis section mea post karun.. isliye Miscellaneous  mea post kar rahi hun...
मन की व्याता, सुनाये गाता
कबहू सुख की बेला समझ पाये रे

देख दुझे की पीड़ा मेरे बाबुल
मन को मेरे  चैन अब न आए रे
tearyeyed

किस असमंजस में पड़े है पाँव
जो मेरे मन को घात लगाए रे
Applause Applause Applause

मन मेरा क्यूँ पूछे मुझसे प्रशन
क्यूँ  उतर भी आपहु उलझ जाए रे
icon_silent icon_silent icon_silent icon_silent

गूंजे ग़लत ध्वनी  हर दिशाए
मस्तिष्क भी क्यूँ पथ भटकाए रे
Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
कौन बोले है मीठे  मीठे बोल यहाँ
कौन चुपके से यहाँ बाण चलाए रे
Thumbs UP Thumbs UP Thumbs UP Thumbs UP

रंग ना जाए मेरे हाथ इस उलझन में
कैसे तेज़ लहरों  से  घर को बचाए रे
Embarrased Embarrased Embarrased Embarrased



Mere iss kavita mea ak panchi( Bird) ka varnan kiya hai maine.. jo sulaj kar bhi uljan mea hai.. paida hone ke kuch ganto mea hi usko maa udna seekha deti hai.. aisi halat mea usko sahi galat ka pata bhi nahi hota... apni hi unchi udaan se woh panchi darne lagta hai uska dil kuch kehta hai aur deemaag kuch...aise mea kahi baar woh khud ko hi gaat( hurt ) kar leta hai... Dusre ki peeda ko jaane k baad woh dheere dheere sambhalne ki koshish karta hai par .. apni Maa pe bhi krodit ( angry ) ho jata hai kyun woh usko itni jaldi khud k pairo pe kada hona seekha deti hai... aur iss ke kaaran woh baad mea pachtata bhi hai...

Anth mea " रंग ना जाए मेरे हाथ इस उलझन में ,कैसे तेज़ लहरों  से  घर को बचाए रे " se tatparye yea hai ki khud k pairo mea khade hona jo itni jaldi usko maa seekha deti hai  usse woh bechara Panchi ( Bird) dar jata hai ki.. kahin khud k pairo me kade hone ki gatna kahin usko uske parivaar se door na kar de...

Iss anthim ( last ) lino se ak aur tathparya hai ki woh panchi unn apne khawabo ki duniyaa bana leta hai yea jaante hue ki maa k saaye k begair har sapna adura hai .( jaise ret mea hum ghar banate hai yea jaante hue bhi ki lehre usko udda denge)



           afsos hai maine iss kavita ko pahle nahin padha.
           NYSHA JI aapki ye khubsurat kavita kisi bhi badhaai ki mohtaaj nahin

           simply superb.
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«Reply #40 on: January 04, 2012, 02:27:41 PM »
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Thank you sooooooooooooooooo  Much Dear Usual Smile
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