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mamta bajpai
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roke nahee ruktaa hai ye josh e jawaanee hai
khud raah banaa legaa bahtaa huaa paanee hai
naaqaabil e pursish haiN haalaat mere dil ke
tootaa saa khilounaa hai barbaad kahaanee hai
yuN saath meraa kab tak degee meree barbaadee
ye sustqadam dhadkan bas chhootatee jaanee hai
virse me nahee miltee aamaal kee ye doulat
khud nek karam karke tujhko hee kamaanee hai
khaamoshee ne sun lee hai tanhaai kee sab baateN
hai ishq bahut inme yaaree ye puraanee hai
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«Reply #1 on: February 10, 2011, 02:53:08 PM » |
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Nice Mamta Ji
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«Reply #2 on: February 10, 2011, 04:07:35 PM » |
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wahhhhhhhhh wahhhhhhh aur wahhh aapki rachna ki prashansa me kuch likhen shabd nahi lekin aupcharikta-wash. wah wah likh diya bahoot khoob mamta ji
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«Reply #3 on: February 10, 2011, 04:20:16 PM » |
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mamta jee bahut khub likha aapne.
lekin gustakhi muaf mai kuch puchna chahunga--
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1st aur 4th ashar shayri ye zindgi hai shayd jisme ek seekh hai
last wala dard e judai aur
2sra n 3sra dard bhara sher hai--
agr mai sahi hun to aapke iss khubsurat kalaam ko mai kis ehsaas se feel karun!!!!
har pal alg sa feel confusion ho gaya
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bura lage to iss naadaan ko maaf kariyega
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thanx
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«Reply #4 on: February 10, 2011, 04:54:42 PM » |
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Niralaa jee ! gazal ka har shair alheda maani rakhtaa hai...or ye zarooree nahee ke har shair ek doosare se vaabastaa ho...or loving child buraa maan-ne jaisi yahaaN koi baat naheeN...hum ne bhee jo kuchh seekhaa hai woh yaheeN se seekhaa hai....
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«Reply #5 on: February 10, 2011, 04:55:17 PM » |
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Shukriyaa Rishi jee!
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«Reply #6 on: February 11, 2011, 01:09:16 AM » |
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Bekaraar jee!behad shukriyaa.....aap kee waaah hee humaare kalaam kee praanvaayu hai.....kuchh or likhne kaa josh jeevit ho jaataa hai...
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«Reply #7 on: February 11, 2011, 12:28:01 PM » |
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bht bht khoob mamta ji....
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«Reply #8 on: February 11, 2011, 02:56:44 PM » |
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shukriyaa Manzil e ishq jee!
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«Reply #9 on: February 11, 2011, 03:07:44 PM » |
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Very Nice Mamta ji , Sare sher khoobsurat hai,maza aaya padhkar, yun hi achha-achha likhte rahein.  |
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«Reply #10 on: February 11, 2011, 05:32:53 PM » |
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Mamtaa Jee Aadaab!
Hum jab bhi aate hai aapki kalaam se ruberu hona
behad achcha lagta hai....
Aap kafi umdaa khayaaloN ki malik hai... Jo aapke
ashaaroN meiN saaf jhalakta hai...
Aapki yeH kalaam bhi behad khoob rahi... Daad hazir hai..  roke nahee ruktaa hai ye josh e jawaanee hai khud raah banaa legaa bahtaa huaa paanee hai Masha Allah kafi achcha matla kaha aapne daad... naaqaabil e pursish haiN haalaat mere dil ke tootaa saa khilounaa hai barbaad kahaanee hai Waah jee waah bahut khoob daad..
toota sa khilouna" kia baat bahut umdaa
Haan yahaaN aapke ulaa misre meiN aik takta jyada ho
gaya hai... aap gaur farmaa lijiye. yuN saath meraa kab tak degee meree barbaadee ye sustqadam dhadkan bas chhootatee jaanee hai Oye hoye kia baat hai Masha Allah..
Behad khoob.. " yeH sustkadam dhadkan" kia kahne jee waah daad daad daad virse me nahee miltee aamaal kee ye doulat khud nek karam karke tujhko hee kamaanee hai Kia baat hai Mamtaa jee waqai behad nek khayaal ko anjaam diyaa hai aapne .... Waah daad janab dil se daad hazir hai.. khaamoshee ne sun lee hai tanhaai kee sab baateN hai ishq bahut inme yaaree ye puraanee hai Masha Allah kia kahne hai jee ...
Behad umdaa khayaal aur behad khoob bayaani daad daad daad Mamta Bajpai
Waqai sabhi ashaar la jawaab rahe..
Dil se daad kabool kijiye...
Likhati rahiye...
Khush O aabaad rahiye...
Khuda Hafez....
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«Reply #11 on: February 12, 2011, 01:01:28 AM » |
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roke nahee ruktaa hai ye josh e jawaanee hai
khud raah banaa legaa bahtaa huaa paanee hai
naaqaabil e pursish haiN haalaat mere dil ke
tootaa saa khilounaa hai barbaad kahaanee hai
yuN saath meraa kab tak degee meree barbaadee
ye sustqadam dhadkan bas chhootatee jaanee hai
virse me nahee miltee aamaal kee ye doulat
khud nek karam karke tujhko hee kamaanee hai
khaamoshee ne sun lee hai tanhaai kee sab baateN
hai ishq bahut inme yaaree ye puraanee hai
Mamta Bajpai
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«Reply #12 on: February 14, 2011, 01:28:31 PM » |
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«Reply #13 on: February 14, 2011, 01:35:36 PM » |
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Shukriyaa Khwaish jee ! ye aap kee dariyaadili hai jo zarre ko aaftaab banaa baithe haiN........
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«Reply #14 on: March 07, 2011, 07:27:25 PM » |
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Hamesha kee tarah saath nibhane ka behad shukriya Shihab jee!
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