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aaj se kuchh din pehle ek thread likha gaya ki itne sare shayar or shayara hone par or itna achha likhne par bhi unhe wo appreciation or unki kavita ko wo ijjat kyun nahi milti..kuchh to kaha maine bhi tha uspar par socha ki ise dusre andaz me bhi pesh karna chahiye...ham sabhi likhte waqt shayad yahi tamanna karte hain or kisike bhi na padhne par shayad yahi sochte bhi honge...
aaiyee ab dekhte hain kitne log padhte hain ye baatein...ummeed aaap sabhi se wah wahi ki nahi sirf padhne ki karugaa...kisine na suni mere dil ki baaten
khushi ki baaten mere gam ki baaten
kisine na suni....
ro ro kar likhi thi jo aansu ki syahi se
dil ke toote panne par ikraar ki baaten
kisine na suni....
or beh gaye aansu yunhi pani ki tarah
kisine na padhi adhoore armaan ki baaten
kisine na suni....
main tadapta raha isi ek chah me "Abhi"
wo samjhege mohabbat ke paigaam ki baaten
kisine na suni....
kitni justju thi kitni thi arzoo unhe batane ki
kuchh manane ke afsaane kuchh rooth jane ki baaten
kisine na suni....
me kalam dil ki ghista raha unke intezaar mein
wo aaye to sunane apne dili farmaan ki baaten
kisine na suni....
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«Reply #1 on: October 28, 2010, 12:00:34 PM » |
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Bahut Khub Janaab Abhi Sahab.
Khush Rahiye...
~Shihab~
ek gubaar tha sahab ...dil me kuchh rakhne ki adat nhai so ise bhi nikal diya... waqt dene ke liye shukriyaa apka~ |
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«Reply #2 on: October 28, 2010, 12:12:25 PM » |
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bht dil ko chhu gai aaj teri ye batein
dil se nikli tere jazbaat ki baatein
bht dil ko....
kaash sab samjhe aur sochen iss bare me
dil o jaan se likhi jati hai har kalaam ki batein
bht dil ko....
kai yaadein kai rang zindagi k hote hain inme
jo baantte hain hum tumse apne yaar ki baatein
bht dil ko....
chahte hain k sune aap aur samjhen hamara haal e dil
hamari kavitaon gazlon me likhi hamare haalaat ki baatein
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«Reply #3 on: October 28, 2010, 12:26:51 PM » |
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wah wah wah kya andaaz hai janaab ka.....   Ye shikaayat kyu hai janaab aapko.... Har baar tou suni hai teri he baatein....
Yaad hain humko tujhse huyee mulaakaatein....
aaj se kuchh din pehle ek thread likha gaya ki itne sare shayar or shayara hone par or itna achha likhne par bhi unhe wo appreciation or unki kavita ko wo ijjat kyun nahi milti..kuchh to kaha maine bhi tha uspar par socha ki ise dusre andaz me bhi pesh karna chahiye...ham sabhi likhte waqt shayad yahi tamanna karte hain or kisike bhi na padhne par shayad yahi sochte bhi honge...
aaiyee ab dekhte hain kitne log padhte hain ye baatein...ummeed aaap sabhi se wah wahi ki nahi sirf padhne ki karugaa...kisine na suni mere dil ki baaten
khushi ki baaten mere gam ki baaten
kisine na suni....
ro ro kar likhi thi jo aansu ki syahi se
dil ke toote panne par ikraar ki baaten
kisine na suni....
or beh gaye aansu yunhi pani ki tarah
kisine na padhi adhoore armaan ki baaten
kisine na suni....
main tadapta raha isi ek chah me "Abhi"
wo samjhege mohabbat ke paigaam ki baaten
kisine na suni....
kitni justju thi kitni thi arzoo unhe batane ki
kuchh manane ke afsaane kuchh rooth jane ki baaten
kisine na suni....
me kalam dil ki ghista raha unke intezaar mein
wo aaye to sunane apne dili farmaan ki baaten
kisine na suni.... |
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«Reply #4 on: October 28, 2010, 02:13:30 PM » |
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«Reply #5 on: October 28, 2010, 03:19:55 PM » |
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Bahut khoob khayal aur sath hi mein behetareen lafzo ka prayog kiya hai abhi ji...kasak ji nice reply...
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«Reply #6 on: October 28, 2010, 05:26:57 PM » |
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bahut hi pyara likha hai aapne abhi ji.... .............sach kha...dil ki baatein koi sune na sune lekin wo jarur samajhe jo bahut khaas hai hamare liye..... behtrin...... |
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«Reply #7 on: October 29, 2010, 04:00:02 AM » |
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abhi ji bahoot hi umda andaz
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«Reply #8 on: October 29, 2010, 05:45:56 AM » |
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Bahut Achhi Aadat Hai Janaab Ki.
Khush Rahiye...
~Shihab~
ek bar fir shukriya shihab jii~ |
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«Reply #9 on: October 29, 2010, 05:59:39 AM » |
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bht dil ko chhu gai aaj teri ye batein
dil se nikli tere jazbaat ki baatein
bht dil ko....
kaash sab samjhe aur sochen iss bare me
dil o jaan se likhi jati hai har kalaam ki batein
bht dil ko....
kai yaadein kai rang zindagi k hote hain inme
jo baantte hain hum tumse apne yaar ki baatein
bht dil ko....
chahte hain k sune aap aur samjhen hamara haal e dil
hamari kavitaon gazlon me likhi hamare haalaat ki baatein
bht dil ko.... bahut khoob kaha anu jii..kya bat hai sach likha he aapne...dher sari daad~ |
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«Reply #10 on: October 29, 2010, 06:02:17 AM » |
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wah wah wah kya andaaz hai janaab ka..... Ye shikaayat kyu hai janaab aapko.... Har baar tou suni hai teri he baatein....
Yaad hain humko tujhse huyee mulaakaatein....
koyaliya ji hame shikayat nahi...hamne to sabki shikayat ko labz dene ki koshish bhar ki.. apki two liner badi achhi rahi...daad dher sari~ |
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«Reply #11 on: October 29, 2010, 08:03:08 AM » |
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«Reply #12 on: October 29, 2010, 08:03:41 AM » |
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Bahut khoob khayal aur sath hi mein behetareen lafzo ka prayog kiya hai abhi ji...kasak ji nice reply...
shukriya geet di...sath rahiyega yunhi~ |
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«Reply #13 on: October 29, 2010, 08:04:19 AM » |
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bahut hi pyara likha hai aapne abhi ji.... .............sach kha...dil ki baatein koi sune na sune lekin wo jarur samajhe jo bahut khaas hai hamare liye..... behtrin...... shukriya nikhaar jii, waqt dene ke liye..or hosla badhane ke liye... |
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«Reply #14 on: October 29, 2010, 08:05:43 AM » |
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abhi ji bahoot hi umda andaz
shukriya sir ji hosa badhane ke liye or waqt dene ke liye dhanyawad.. |
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