MAJNOOmb

by marhoom bahayaat on July 11, 2009, 09:12:48 PM
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«Reply #15 on: July 12, 2009, 07:59:49 PM »
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Quote from: Rajesh Harish on July 11, 2009, 10:13:46 PM
Nice one MB N equally good response Celmira Ji

THANX HARISH JI
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«Reply #16 on: July 12, 2009, 08:12:50 PM »
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Mr. Bahayat, Nice rubai.
Word 'Ashkee' and 'chot' is feminie so 2nd line should be

Aj phir ashkee ney chot khaee hay

technically your work does not follow Urdu Grammar.

MH
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«Reply #17 on: July 12, 2009, 08:51:23 PM »
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Quote from: MHussain on July 12, 2009, 08:12:50 PM
Mr. Bahayat, Nice rubai.
Word 'Ashkee' and 'chot' is feminie so 2nd line should be

Aj phir ashkee ney chot khaee hay

technically your work does not follow Urdu Grammar.

MH


THANX FOR COMMENTS HUSSAIN SAHAB . I HAVE RCTIFIED THE LINES
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«Reply #18 on: July 12, 2009, 09:08:12 PM »
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Good, now it's a liberal short.
Anyway, thanks for being so kind.
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«Reply #19 on: July 13, 2009, 09:40:37 PM »
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Quote from: MHussain on July 12, 2009, 09:08:12 PM
Good, now it's a liberal short.
Anyway, thanks for being so kind.
u r welcome sir
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«Reply #20 on: July 22, 2009, 12:35:35 PM »
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ACHCHA HAI Applause
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«Reply #21 on: August 06, 2009, 09:53:20 PM »
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Quote from: Sheba on July 22, 2009, 12:35:35 PM
ACHCHA HAI Applause
thanx
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