<>*Meri Bachchii*<>

by *KasaK*....Dil Ki on August 28, 2010, 09:47:06 AM
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«Reply #15 on: August 28, 2010, 05:51:29 PM »
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Quote from: Matrix Guy on August 28, 2010, 01:15:45 PM
feelings of pain for kid........

kuch baate jo salooo se dil me dabi hoti he kuch isi tarah bahar aa jati he......dard ...pyar....dar........sab eksath.....

beautiful presentation ksask ji.....

this is not a poetry post this is feelings post....

hats off

bas dar lagta hai kabhi kabhi kuch aisi baton se ji...aur aa jate hain lafz word document pe...aap to jante hi hain mujhe....kya kahun ab iske aage....FHH ji
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«Reply #16 on: August 28, 2010, 05:54:52 PM »
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Quote from: khwaish on August 28, 2010, 05:14:09 PM
Kya Kahoon!!!!!!

Har lafz Apne Hisse Ki Kahani keh Raha Tha..

Anamika Ji, Agar Yeh Kavita Sirf Ek kalpana Hai To Iss Kavita Ka Anth Itna Dardnaak Kyon..Kuch Baatein to Aise thi jaise Dil Se nikal Kar Kalam Par Utri Ho.Bas ek sawaal Hai,Kya Yeh Kavita Sach Mein sirf Ek Kalpana Hai???

haan ye kavita ek kalpana hi thi khwaish ji...shayad ek aisi kalpana jo hakikat me kabhi suni ho dekhi ho mehsus ki ho..wo dard shayad uss waqt bayaan nahin hua aur aaj ho gaya....

waise ye sab aapki poem kakamaal hai jo main ye likh gai.....thnx alot hamesha ki tarah ek naya theme dene aur likhne pe majbur karne k liye...aapki wo poem nahin padhti to ye dar kabhi bahar na aata....
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«Reply #17 on: August 28, 2010, 06:02:02 PM »
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anamika ji,kya hua jo dil mein aise zazbaat bhar aaye aur keyboard se yoindia par utar gaye.
par likha bahut behtreen hai.sach maa ki bhi yahi duaen hoti hai kaun si maa doonia mein apni bachhi ko nahin chahti hogi.
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«Reply #18 on: August 28, 2010, 06:14:28 PM »
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Achhi par dard bhari kisi ki real ghatna ka chitran bade sunder dhang se aapne kiya hai........
.lagta hai jaise yahin kahin ghati ho ye ghatna........meine bhi mahsoos kiya hai eysa hi kisi ka dard...... Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause


Quote from: *KasaK*....Dil Ki on August 28, 2010, 09:47:06 AM
Aaj na jane kyun ek anjana sa dard dil me utha..kyun pata nahin ...aur kuch alfaaz apne aap hi likhti chali gai...
keyboard pe ungliyan chal rahi thi and man me kuch feelings...aur main likhti gai...
jab use khudne padha to ek nai kavita mere saamne thi...
padhkar mujhe bhi alag sa ehsaas hua k ye kyun kar likhi...
shayad ek maa k dil ki baat ...
yaa khwaish ji ki uss poem ka asar jo unhone likhi thi 2 din pehle..
khair wo yahan pesh karti hun bataiyega kaisi hai....

<>* Meri Bachchii*<>

Meri bachhci meri gudiya meri aankhon ka taara hai tu
Mere jism me jo palta raha wo mera hi ansh hai tu

Tujhe paaya jis pal maine apne jism k ehsason me
Uss pal mere rom rom me khushi banke bahi thi tu

Tere liye hi sapne sajaye maine apni har ek raaton me
Sajaungi sanwarungi main tujhe apne hi haathon se

Kitne rang birange kapde aur kitni hi tujh jaisi gudiya
Laaungi aur behlaungi main tujhe nit naye khilono se

Tere rup me maine paaya tha apna ek naya jeewan
Sapne ab main karungi pure socha tha maine pal pal me

Har lamha main aur tere papa bas yehi socha karte the
Kaisi hogi wo raaj dulari jiske sapne hum buna karte the

Ek hawa ka jhonka aaya le gaya wo har sapne sang apne
Ek jhatke se tut gaya har rishta mera mere sapne se

Aaj tu nahin hai sath mere reh gai bas kuch yaadein aur sapne
khokar tujhe ab meri laadli kuch na bacha mere jeewan me

Byaah k tujhe karti paraya tab bhi ek sukun to hota
Tu nazar k saamne hoti ek raunak hoti mere jeewan me

Aaj kyun bhagwaan ne mujhe aisa ye din dikhlaya hai
Tu nirjeev padi hai mere saamne aur maine na ashk bahaya hai
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«Reply #19 on: August 28, 2010, 06:27:13 PM »
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Koyal itna emotional hone ki jarurat nahi hain.......
Tum kewal ek disha mai soch rahi ho..........
Jain ho...Anekaant-wad tou jaanti hogi.....
Har individual ka sochne ka apna ek alag tarika hota hai......
Bura mat lagaana......tumhaare dost ko uss k mummy-papa ne itna bada kiya par kya huaa.....
socho.....


Quote from: KOYAL46 on August 28, 2010, 09:59:34 AM
Anamika-di kya ye sachi ghatna par aadhaarit hai ya kori kalpana.....bahut touching hai....ander se hillaa deti hai....
Kalpana hai tou dukh bhari kyu...kyu di....
Last 8 lines kyu....kyu usse mujh jitna bada nahi hone diya...
kyu usse jeevan k rang nahi dekhne diye....kyu kyu kyuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu
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«Reply #20 on: August 28, 2010, 06:27:46 PM »
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Quote from: *KasaK*....Dil Ki on August 28, 2010, 05:54:52 PM
haan ye kavita ek kalpana hi thi khwaish ji...shayad ek aisi kalpana jo hakikat me kabhi suni ho dekhi ho mehsus ki ho..wo dard shayad uss waqt bayaan nahin hua aur aaj ho gaya....

waise ye sab aapki poem kakamaal hai jo main ye likh gai.....thnx alot hamesha ki tarah ek naya theme dene aur likhne pe majbur karne k liye...aapki wo poem nahin padhti to ye dar kabhi bahar na aata....

Anuji,Agar Yeh sirf Ek Kalpana Hai To Main Sar Jhuka Kar Aapko salaam karta Hoon,Bhaut Darddddddddd Hai Iss Kavita Mein..

Aur Thanks Kis Baat Ka, Anuji Uss poetry Ka Maaqsad hi sirf yeh tha ke Log Ab yeh sochna band kare ke Sirf beta Hi Ghar ka Chiraag Hota Hai,Betiyan Bhi Ghar Ko Utna Hi Roshan Karte hai jitne Bete Karte Hai.
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«Reply #21 on: August 28, 2010, 07:57:14 PM »
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bohat achcha likha hai aapne kasak ji
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«Reply #22 on: August 28, 2010, 07:59:02 PM »
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Quote from: ANAAM on August 28, 2010, 06:14:28 PM
Achhi par dard bhari kisi ki real ghatna ka chitran bade sunder dhang se aapne kiya hai........
.lagta hai jaise yahin kahin ghati ho ye ghatna........meine bhi mahsoos kiya hai eysa hi kisi ka dard...... Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause



thnx anaam ...mehsus karne aur samjhne k liye.....
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«Reply #23 on: August 28, 2010, 08:00:51 PM »
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Quote from: khwaish on August 28, 2010, 06:27:46 PM
Anuji,Agar Yeh sirf Ek Kalpana Hai To Main Sar Jhuka Kar Aapko salaam karta Hoon,Bhaut Darddddddddd Hai Iss Kavita Mein..

Aur Thanks Kis Baat Ka, Anuji Uss poetry Ka Maaqsad hi sirf yeh tha ke Log Ab yeh sochna band kare ke Sirf beta Hi Ghar ka Chiraag Hota Hai,Betiyan Bhi Ghar Ko Utna Hi Roshan Karte hai jitne Bete Karte Hai.



khwaish ji thnx alot aapne ise pasand kiya and itna maan diya hume...par hum iss layak nahin k aap jaise shayar hamare samne sir jhukayen....ye ek koshish thi jo sahi ban gai baki kuch nahin..aapki tarah hum har gazal me wo baat nahin la paate jo chhaiye hoti hai..u really rock ji.....
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«Reply #24 on: August 28, 2010, 08:02:06 PM »
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Quote from: Azeem on August 28, 2010, 07:57:14 PM
bohat achcha likha hai aapne kasak ji


shukriya azeem bhai...
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«Reply #25 on: September 01, 2010, 08:48:25 AM »
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Quote from: *KasaK*....Dil Ki on August 28, 2010, 09:47:06 AM
Aaj na jane kyun ek anjana sa dard dil me utha..kyun pata nahin ...aur kuch alfaaz apne aap hi likhti chali gai...
keyboard pe ungliyan chal rahi thi and man me kuch feelings...aur main likhti gai...
jab use khudne padha to ek nai kavita mere saamne thi...
padhkar mujhe bhi alag sa ehsaas hua k ye kyun kar likhi...
shayad ek maa k dil ki baat ...
yaa khwaish ji ki uss poem ka asar jo unhone likhi thi 2 din pehle..
khair wo yahan pesh karti hun bataiyega kaisi hai....

<>* Meri Bachchii*<>

Meri bachhci meri gudiya meri aankhon ka taara hai tu
Mere jism me jo palta raha wo mera hi ansh hai tu

Tujhe paaya jis pal maine apne jism k ehsason me
Uss pal mere rom rom me khushi banke bahi thi tu

Tere liye hi sapne sajaye maine apni har ek raaton me
Sajaungi sanwarungi main tujhe apne hi haathon se

Kitne rang birange kapde aur kitni hi tujh jaisi gudiya
Laaungi aur behlaungi main tujhe nit naye khilono se

Tere rup me maine paaya tha apna ek naya jeewan
Sapne ab main karungi pure socha tha maine pal pal me

Har lamha main aur tere papa bas yehi socha karte the
Kaisi hogi wo raaj dulari jiske sapne hum buna karte the

Ek hawa ka jhonka aaya le gaya wo har sapne sang apne
Ek jhatke se tut gaya har rishta mera mere sapne se

Aaj tu nahin hai sath mere reh gai bas kuch yaadein aur sapne
khokar tujhe ab meri laadli kuch na bacha mere jeewan me

Byaah k tujhe karti paraya tab bhi ek sukun to hota
Tu nazar k saamne hoti ek raunak hoti mere jeewan me

Aaj kyun bhagwaan ne mujhe aisa ye din dikhlaya hai
Tu nirjeev padi hai mere saamne aur maine na ashk bahaya hai


BAHUT HI DARD BHARA EHSAAS.....NAAAAAAAAAICE ONE  KDK
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«Reply #26 on: September 11, 2010, 04:17:56 PM »
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Bahoot Bahoot Umda Lajawaab , Shandaar, Bahoot Bahoot Bahoot Khoob.. Mujhe apni likhi ak kavita yaad aa gai thi...

Ladiyaan chahe Kitna bhi chupa le... Bhar Ak ehsaas hota hai chahe woh shadi se pehle ho ya baad mein... Woh ehsaas hai Maa ki Mamta ki.. woh kabhi man mea halchal macha jaati hai...

Mujhe bhi ak beiti ki tamana hai uss par maine ak kavita likhi thi Meri Bitiyaan aaj Tumari yea kavita pad ke Bahoot Bahoot acha laga... Bahoot Khoob !
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«Reply #27 on: November 18, 2010, 10:32:57 AM »
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Why god created daughters?

When god created daughters,
He took very special care to find
The precious treasures that could make
Them sweet and fair

He fashioned them from sugar
And a little bit of spice.............
He gave them a sunny laughter
And everything thats nice!!

God smiled when he made daughters
He was glad
As..........he had created love and happiness
For every mum and dad.........

.................not mine................
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