Phir ek adhuri Kahani...............Nikhaar

by Nikhaar on November 12, 2010, 06:31:27 PM
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Doston..aaj kaafi waqt baad khuch likha hai....kya likha hai.....khud ko bhi nahi pta....bas dil mein jo aaya likh diya...isliye misc. section mein post kar rahi hai......aapke comments ka intzaar rahega.....


Thaama hai kalam ko inn ungliyon ne ye sochkar aaj
Zindagi k panno mein likhi jaayegi phir se ek kahani aaj

Raaton ki tanhayi  hogi, dhundhali  yaadon ki parchhayi  hogi
Aur mil kar likhenge dono koi naya geet aaj

Dil ko chot pahuchane k raaste par badhe chale ja rahe hai kadam
Dil ki haar ka wo manjar likhenge khuch iss tarah,
K uss pal par bhi haamein hoga naaz

Chand kadamon ka hi faasla tha manzil se,k kadam raahon par mud gaye
Khuch naya talashne ki khwaish mein
Aankhon mein chubh gaye kaanch

Zindagi kya hai...shayari hi toh hai
Likhte khuch hai aur ye likh jaati khuch hai
Taal par iski jhumna hi theek,
Na jaane kab kaunsa ye nachaye naach

Thaama tha kalam ko ye sochkar k ek nayi kahani likhenge aaj
Par phir se ek adhuri kahani likh gaye aaj
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«Reply #1 on: November 12, 2010, 07:18:08 PM »
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Wah bahut hi khoob Nikhaar sis,lajawab peshkash,hats off icon_thumleft Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #2 on: November 12, 2010, 07:29:42 PM »
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...Jajbaaton ki aandhi mai.......jab likha jaata hai....jeevan ki sachai ko.....sach ki aanch se
Kavita nikhaar jaati hai...haan Nikaarji such me.... Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause

Aapke apne shabdo mein...."..kya likha hai.....khud ko bhi nahi pta....bas dil mein jo aaya likh diya..."

ji haan aapki tarah mujhe bhi nahi pata....bas dil mein jo aaya likh diya tha....bina soche samjhe......ussiki xshma yaachna



Quote from: Nikhaar on November 12, 2010, 06:31:27 PM
Doston..aaj kaafi waqt baad khuch likha hai....kya likha hai.....khud ko bhi nahi pta....bas dil mein jo aaya likh diya...isliye misc. section mein post kar rahi hai......aapke comments ka intzaar rahega.....


Thaama hai kalam ko inn ungliyon ne ye sochkar aaj
Zindagi k panno mein likhi jaayegi phir se ek kahani aaj

Raaton ki tanhayi  hogi, dhundhali  yaadon ki parchhayi  hogi
Aur mil kar likhenge dono koi naya geet aaj

Dil ko chot pahuchane k raaste par badhe chale ja rahe hai kadam
Dil ki haar ka wo manjar likhenge khuch iss tarah,
K uss pal par bhi haamein hoga naaz

Chand kadamon ka hi faasla tha manzil se,k kadam raahon par mud gaye
Khuch naya talashne ki khwaish mein
Aankhon mein chubh gaye kaanch

Zindagi kya hai...shayari hi toh hai
Likhte khuch hai aur ye likh jaati khuch hai
Taal par iski jhumna hi theek,
Na jaane kab kaunsa ye nachaye naach

Thaama tha kalam ko ye sochkar k ek nayi kahani likhenge aaj
Par phir se ek adhuri kahani likh gaye aaj
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«Reply #3 on: November 12, 2010, 09:05:15 PM »
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Nikhaar di,
Bahaut bahaut khoob..
Mujhe bahaut achi lagi yeh peshkash apki..
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«Reply #4 on: November 13, 2010, 05:43:37 AM »
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hmm nikhar ji.........
apki post read ki.ek nahi sahyad bht baar chuka hu last 1 hour me.........well muje nahi pata ki kisi ko ye kya samaj aayi ya nahi ayi......but ha muje ye bahot bahot aachi lagi......

ek dard........ek ghutan......kuch past me jo kho chuke uska dard.....agey jo khone ja rahe he aur esa hone se rok bhi nahi sakte uska dar aur dard........pyar karna aur pyar ka tutna.....dono hi apne ek line me kah diya (4th paragraph)ye muje sabse aacha laga........hmm kya kahu bht kuch feelings aa rahi he .....shayd anadr bhi kuch esa hi he jo apne likha he .khud ko feel kar raha hu......

bas bht likh chuka aur kya likhu......i think it is one ur best poetry u wrote and one of my best poetry i read till now.....

keep going and be in touch
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«Reply #5 on: November 13, 2010, 07:58:51 AM »
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Quote from: Nikhaar on November 12, 2010, 06:31:27 PM
Doston..aaj kaafi waqt baad khuch likha hai....kya likha hai.....khud ko bhi nahi pta....bas dil mein jo aaya likh diya...isliye misc. section mein post kar rahi hai......aapke comments ka intzaar rahega.....


Thaama hai kalam ko inn ungliyon ne ye sochkar aaj
Zindagi k panno mein likhi jaayegi phir se ek kahani aaj

Raaton ki tanhayi  hogi, dhundhali  yaadon ki parchhayi  hogi
Aur mil kar likhenge dono koi naya geet aaj

Dil ko chot pahuchane k raaste par badhe chale ja rahe hai kadam
Dil ki haar ka wo manjar likhenge khuch iss tarah,
K uss pal par bhi haamein hoga naaz

Chand kadamon ka hi faasla tha manzil se,k kadam raahon par mud gaye
Khuch naya talashne ki khwaish mein
Aankhon mein chubh mein gaye kaanch

Zindagi kya hai...shayari hi toh hai
Likhte khuch hai aur ye likh jaati khuch hai
Taal par iski jhumna hi theek,
Na jaane kab kaunsa ye nachaye naach

Thaama tha kalam ko ye sochkar k ek nayi kahani likhenge aaj
Par phir se ek adhuri kahani likh gaye aaj

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Bahut Bahut Khoob pooja..Sach mein Gehre Lafz,Padhkar Yeh Mehsoos Hota hai Ke Aapne Dil Se Likha Hai Aur Ek Hi baar mein Aap Yeh Likh gaye..Bas Ek baar 4rth Sher Ko Kuch Edit Zaroor karna..

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«Reply #6 on: November 13, 2010, 08:05:36 AM »
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Quote from: ANAAM on November 12, 2010, 07:29:42 PM
Maaf kariyega kuchh pale nahi pad raha hai......
bhav aapke bahak gaye hain......
lines bikhar gayee hain.....
shabd bhi control main nahi lag rahe.....
mast khichdi ban gayee hai....
par kadhi k bina sach mai adhuri lag rahi hai.....
Chat-pati chatni he de deti tou kuchh taste aa jaata....
Kavita nikhaar jaati...haan Nikaarji such me.... Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Giggle Giggle Giggle Giggle Giggle Giggle

Anaam Ji Aapne Yeh Kya Comment Diya Hai Yeh Aap hi jaane,Par Agar Aap Ko yeh poetry kichdi Dikhti hai To Aap meharbaani Karke Comments Naa Dijiye,Aap Yuhi padhkar jaa Sakte The,Mujhe Aapke Yeh comments Bilkul Bhi JUSTIFIED Nahi Dikhe..yeh Likhi poetry kisi ke kuch Jazbaat hai Waha Par yeh kehna Ke,

"Chat-Pati Chatni Hi de Dete To kuch Taste Aa jaata Tha" Yeh Sab kya Hai??

Aaenda Plz Khayal Rakhiye....
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«Reply #7 on: November 13, 2010, 08:24:08 AM »
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Nikhar ji dil ko kagaz pe rakh dena agar ek hunar hai to mai kahunga ki aap ek jaheen ustaad hain is hunar ki....koshish karunga ki aaj hi balki abhi hi kuch likh paun jawab me.....likhte rahen   Applause Applause
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«Reply #8 on: November 13, 2010, 08:26:38 AM »
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@ anaam ji,
asanyamit prtikriya kisi ke jajbaaton ko thes panhucha sakti hai umeed hai aage dhyan rkhenge
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«Reply #9 on: November 13, 2010, 08:40:47 AM »
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Quote from: Nikhaar on November 12, 2010, 06:31:27 PM
Doston..aaj kaafi waqt baad khuch likha hai....kya likha hai.....khud ko bhi nahi pta....bas dil mein jo aaya likh diya...isliye misc. section mein post kar rahi hai......aapke comments ka intzaar rahega.....


Thaama hai kalam ko inn ungliyon ne ye sochkar aaj
Zindagi k panno mein likhi jaayegi phir se ek kahani aaj

Raaton ki tanhayi  hogi, dhundhali  yaadon ki parchhayi  hogi
Aur mil kar likhenge dono koi naya geet aaj

Dil ko chot pahuchane k raaste par badhe chale ja rahe hai kadam
Dil ki haar ka wo manjar likhenge khuch iss tarah,
K uss pal par bhi haamein hoga naaz

Chand kadamon ka hi faasla tha manzil se,k kadam raahon par mud gaye
Khuch naya talashne ki khwaish mein
Aankhon mein chubh mein gaye kaanch

Zindagi kya hai...shayari hi toh hai
Likhte khuch hai aur ye likh jaati khuch hai
Taal par iski jhumna hi theek,
Na jaane kab kaunsa ye nachaye naach

Thaama tha kalam ko ye sochkar k ek nayi kahani likhenge aaj
Par phir se ek adhuri kahani likh gaye aaj

Chand kadamon ka hi faasla tha manzil se,k kadam raahon par mud gaye
Aapki kavita ki ek line jisne mere dil ko choo liya usi ko aadhar bana kar chaar line aapki najar


nai rahon pe chal diye, magar manjil wahi purani rakhkhi
usi taraf uth gaye kadam jis raah pe teri nishani rakkhi,

har us shakhs ka ho gaya mai jisme teri adayen dekhi,
Har kali ko chooa maine, taasir magar ruhaani rakkhi,
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«Reply #10 on: November 13, 2010, 08:43:41 AM »
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Quote from: bekarar on November 13, 2010, 08:40:47 AM
Chand kadamon ka hi faasla tha manzil se,k kadam raahon par mud gaye
Aapki kavita ki ek line jisne mere dil ko choo liya usi ko aadhar bana kar chaar line aapki najar


nai rahon pe chal diye, magar manjil wahi purani rakhkhi
usi taraf uth gaye kadam jis raah pe teri nishani rakkhi,

har us shakhs ka ho gaya mai jisme teri adayen dekhi,
Har kali ko chooa maine, taasir magar ruhaani rakkhi,



Bahut Bahut Khoob Sanjeev Bro..

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«Reply #11 on: November 13, 2010, 08:46:35 AM »
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shukriya khawish bro..are bhai jab aa hi gaye ho to fir aaj likho yaar is thread pe kuch..........
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«Reply #12 on: November 13, 2010, 08:55:06 AM »
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Quote from: khwaish on November 13, 2010, 08:05:36 AM
Anaam Ji Aapne Yeh Kya Comment Diya Hai Yeh Aap hi jaane,Par Agar Aap Ko yeh poetry kichdi Dikhti hai To Aap meharbaani Karke Comments Naa Dijiye,Aap Yuhi padhkar jaa Sakte The,Mujhe Aapke Yeh comments Bilkul Bhi JUSTIFIED Nahi Dikhe..yeh Likhi poetry kisi ke kuch Jazbaat hai Waha Par yeh kehna Ke,

"Chat-Pati Chatni Hi de Dete To kuch Taste Aa jaata Tha" Yeh Sab kya Hai??

Aaenda Plz Khayal Rakhiye....

i also want to say same thing to anam ji which khwaish ji told......"agar kisi ko appriciate nahi kar sako to koi baat nahi but kisi ki feelings ko majak me nahi lena chahiye" its humble request to all members from me.....
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«Reply #13 on: November 13, 2010, 09:03:30 AM »
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Sanjeev bro..
Aap Ka Hukum Sar Aankhon par... icon_salut icon_salut

Jis Kahani Mein Milne Se pehle Bichadna Likha Ho
Hasne Se Pehle Rona Likha Ho
Paane Se Pehle Khona Likha Ho

Kuch Ankahe Jazbaton ko Lafzon Mein Utaarenge Aaj!!!
Zindagi Ke Panho Mein Likhenge Phir Ek Kahani Aaaj!!!

Jis Kahani Mein Manzil To kareeb Thi
Par Kadam Ladkada Gaye
Kuch Tasveere Bahut Hi Haseen Thi
Par Waqt Ki Tez Aandhi Mein
Tasveere Dhoondhla Gaye
Jeet Naa Tha Jis Baazi Ko
Woh Baazi Hi Haar Gaye

Roti Hui kalam Se Kuch Dil Ki Baatein Kahenge Aaj!!!
Zindagi Ke Panho mein Likhenge Phir Se Ek kahani Aaj!!!

Apni majbooriyon Se Darr kar Zindagi Ghabra Gayi!!!
Buland Hauslo Ko bhi Jaise Maut Aa Gayi!!!
Kuch Faisle Zindagi ke Aise The jo Sunna Nahi chaahte The
Par Zindagi Khud Humein Woh Faisle Suuna Gayi
"Khwaish" Aaj Phir Mohabbat Hi Kyon Maat Kha Gayi

Bhooli-Bisri Dastaan Ko Phir se Dohraayenge Aaj!!!
Zindagi Ke Panho Mein Likhenge Phir Se Ek Kahaani Aaj!!!!
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Quote from: madhuwesh on November 12, 2010, 07:18:08 PM
Wah bahut hi khoob Nikhaar sis,lajawab peshkash,hats off icon_thumleft Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
shukriya madhu di........aapne hamesha saath diya hai
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