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bekarar
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«Reply #1 on: September 17, 2010, 07:04:01 PM » |
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Suno! Ik baat kehni thee
Hamen tum say kai din say
Buhat chaaha tha k keh dain
Magar kuch keh nahi payay
Or ab khud ko buhat roka
Magar hum reh nahi payay
Tumhen maaloom hay na k
Akelay thay jahaan main hum
Yoonhi may k piyaalay say
Bhula letay thay saaray ghum
Phir ik din tum mili hum ko
Kisi chatting k kamray main
Tumhen achhi lageen theen kuch
Hamaari gham-zida nazmen
Yoonhi har raat ghanton tak
Na baaten khatm hotee theen
Na din dhaltay they jaldee say
Na raaten khatm hotee theen
Hamen achha laga jag main
Koi apna saa lagta hay
Jo ab sochen kabhi wo din
Tu ik sapna sa lagta hay
Zara mushkil hay kehna par
Hamen achhi lagi thee tum
Agarche chand baaton main
Zara hum say bari thee tum
Magar phir yoon huva tum ko
Achaanak kho diya hum ne
Tumhaari yaad aatee thee
Tu aksar ro diya hum ne
Tumhen gar ho yakeen hum par
Har ik lamhaa taraptay thay
Gayay waqton ka har ik pal
Har ik pal yaad kartay thay
Hamen ik baat kehni thee
Jo tum say keh nahi payay
Mili ho tum dobaara jo
Tu ab hum reh nahi paayay
Tumhaaray saath har ik pal
Hamen jeenay ki hasrat hay
Jahaan bhe tum ho, jaisi ho
Hamen tum say mohabbat hay
Hamen tum say…
bahhhhhhhhhhhhhhooooooooooooot khooooooooob likha janab...hazaaron lakhon daad |
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Anshumali
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«Reply #2 on: September 17, 2010, 11:29:39 PM » |
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Suno! Ik baat kehni thee
Hamen tum say kai din say
Buhat chaaha tha k keh dain
Magar kuch keh nahi payay
Or ab khud ko buhat roka
Magar hum reh nahi payay
Tumhen maaloom hay na k
Akelay thay jahaan main hum
Yoonhi may k piyaalay say
Bhula letay thay saaray ghum
Phir ik din tum mili hum ko
Kisi chatting k kamray main
Tumhen achhi lageen theen kuch
Hamaari gham-zida nazmen
Yoonhi har raat ghanton tak
Na baaten khatm hotee theen
Na din dhaltay they jaldee say
Na raaten khatm hotee theen
Hamen achha laga jag main
Koi apna saa lagta hay
Jo ab sochen kabhi wo din
Tu ik sapna sa lagta hay
Zara mushkil hay kehna par
Hamen achhi lagi thee tum
Agarche chand baaton main
Zara hum say bari thee tum
Magar phir yoon huva tum ko
Achaanak kho diya hum ne
Tumhaari yaad aatee thee
Tu aksar ro diya hum ne
Tumhen gar ho yakeen hum par
Har ik lamhaa taraptay thay
Gayay waqton ka har ik pal
Har ik pal yaad kartay thay
Hamen ik baat kehni thee
Jo tum say keh nahi payay
Mili ho tum dobaara jo
Tu ab hum reh nahi paayay
Tumhaaray saath har ik pal
Hamen jeenay ki hasrat hay
Jahaan bhe tum ho, jaisi ho
Hamen tum say mohabbat hay
Hamen tum say…
Very Nice Poetry... Very Nice Creation... dil se daad ! |
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riyaz106
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«Reply #3 on: September 18, 2010, 06:06:08 AM » |
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Wah wah VB bade kamaal ki nazm likhi hai aapne jo apna ek munfarid asar chhorti hai. Daad hazir hai.
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AbhiTamrakar
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«Reply #4 on: September 18, 2010, 06:15:10 AM » |
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bahut khoob umda likha he jiii..lkhte rahiye~
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Sajid_Ghayel
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«Reply #5 on: September 18, 2010, 08:01:19 AM » |
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Ise kehte hai khoobsurti se ateet ko bayaan karna.........yado ko bayaan karne ka hunnar ho to nahi karna chahiye warna yaadein bemaza ho jati hai.
Aur yeh hunar aapke paas hai hai VB jee.........bohat achcha laga aapko padhkar.
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Rajesh Harish
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«Reply #6 on: September 18, 2010, 11:36:14 AM » |
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Bahut khoobsurat likha hai aap ne VB Ji
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bhavsarnayna
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«Reply #7 on: September 18, 2010, 11:51:49 AM » |
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Hi
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«Reply #9 on: September 18, 2010, 05:20:02 PM » |
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deepika_divya
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«Reply #13 on: September 19, 2010, 02:14:27 PM » |
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I read this 2 days before.. thought to comment but didnt comment on this you know why?
Coz it made me speechless.... ITs Simply fantastic.. !!!!!
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«Reply #14 on: September 19, 2010, 02:30:23 PM » |
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i m new in this platform bt u hav written great lines sach mai dil le liye janab
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on eTI community..
