Umeed..By Rahim

by dead heart on November 14, 2009, 04:35:18 PM

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dead heart

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Yeh palkein bhi issi umeed main beh rahi hai Rahim,
Woh bhagi chali ayegi inhe ponch ne...

~Rahim~


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guhar

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Re: Umeed..By Rahim

«Reply #1 on: November 14, 2009, 05:04:12 PM »

ok raheem....can u xplain ths line....palkein beh rahi hein...
dont want to critize u may be it would b diff kind of interpretation fr u...so if it is reveal it...


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KOYAL46

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Re: Umeed..By Rahim

«Reply #2 on: November 14, 2009, 06:10:40 PM »

MUJHE BHI EYSA HE LAGA Guhaar....
NAYAN BEHTE HAIN....
Aakhiyen behti hain....
Palkein tou qaid karti hain..
jhapakti hain...
Ab Rahimji batayenge ye prayog kaise kiya hai...


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Rajesh Harish

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Re: Umeed..By Rahim

«Reply #3 on: November 14, 2009, 10:50:38 PM »

Palkein bah agar yun jayengi
To aankhen khuli rah jayengi
Ashq ki samundar ban jayega
Aur tu bas machhli ban tairega

Machhliyon ki palkein nahi hote


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Rishi Agarwal

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Re: Umeed..By Rahim

«Reply #4 on: November 15, 2009, 06:25:56 AM »

Plake to sabhi ki hote hai jab rote hai to palke hi to bhig jati hai
Guhar Ji and KOyal JI aur Rahim bro ne yehi likha hai


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dead heart

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Re: Umeed..By Rahim

«Reply #5 on: November 15, 2009, 03:44:28 PM »

Hmm thanks Rishi jee for explaining it the way I wanted to do so...Ya i meant palkein beh rahi hai meaning they r 'num' with tears...Hope Koyal jee aur Guhar jee have got their answers...


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dead heart

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Re: Umeed..By Rahim

«Reply #6 on: November 15, 2009, 03:45:53 PM »

For the satisfaction of those who didn't like it...I can change it to 'yeh palkein bhi issi umeed main bheeg rahi hai...'


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dead heart

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Re: Umeed..By Rahim

«Reply #7 on: November 15, 2009, 03:47:17 PM »

Nice one Rajesh jee


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KOYAL46

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Re: Umeed..By Rahim

«Reply #8 on: November 15, 2009, 04:53:13 PM »

ye theek hai....Rahimji
Rishi ka logic sahi nahi hai...palke bheeg sakti hain beh nahi sakti...aansoo behte hain...
HUM...yo pe kuchh sikhne aate hain...
apni poetry ki lines ko sahi aur sashkt banane....
Agar hum words discus nahi karenge tou kabhi bhi achha nahi likh payenge....FIR BHI AGAR AAPKO ACHHA NAHI LAGA TOU AAGE SE NAHI BATAYENGE...kyu thee hai na Guhar-di

Quote from: -Rahim- on November 15, 2009, 03:45:53 PM

For the satisfaction of those who didn't like it...I can change it to 'yeh palkein bhi issi umeed main bheeg rahi hai...'


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dead heart

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Re: Umeed..By Rahim

«Reply #9 on: November 20, 2009, 07:04:53 AM »

Arey nahing Koyal jee aisi baat nahin hai..Acha hai ke aap logon ne bola...Hume bhi apke bolne se realise hua jab bhi toh humne change kiya apni line ko...So no gila..no shikva


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KOYAL46

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Re: Umeed..By Rahim

«Reply #10 on: November 20, 2009, 12:18:11 PM »

Thanks Raheem-bhai...this is sports man spirit...aap bhi hame suggestion dijiye agar kahin kuchh theek na lage...............quote author=-Rahim- link=topic=51906.msg981895#msg981895 date=1258700693]
Arey nahing Koyal jee aisi baat nahin hai..Acha hai ke aap logon ne bola...Hume bhi apke bolne se realise hua jab bhi toh humne change kiya apni line ko...So no gila..no shikva
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Rishi Agarwal

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Re: Umeed..By Rahim

«Reply #11 on: November 20, 2009, 12:21:26 PM »

Quote from: -Rahim- on November 15, 2009, 03:44:28 PM

Hmm thanks Rishi jee for explaining it the way I wanted to do so...Ya i meant palkein beh rahi hai meaning they r 'num' with tears...Hope Koyal jee aur Guhar jee have got their answers...

Thnx Rahim Bhai