मेरा इक काम कर.................................................ALFAAZ

by alfaaz on September 16, 2013, 05:51:55 PM
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मेरे पीठ में खंजर उतारने से पहले मेरा इक काम कर
तेरे पिछे कोई खडा न हो इसका तू पहले इतमीनान कर

लहू जो बहेगा मेरा तो कूछ तेरे जैसा ही होगा
सुकून से सो सकेगा  इसका तू पहले इंतिजाम कर

 खुन कि सुर्खि मजहब से कम ज्यादा नही होती
मूझे दफ़्नाने से पहले इसका तू पहले ऐलान कर

मेरी मां को दिलासा देने जाना जरुर
आंख मिला पायेगा उस्से इसका तू पहले ऐहतिराम कर

मेरे बच्चों को मेरे मौत के बारे में मत बताना
आके कंही न  लिपटें तूझ्से इसका तू पहले ऐहराम  कर

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'राज' दे रहा है तुझे  अपने बचपन का वास्ता
कोई बच्चा बडा होने से न डरे इसका तू पहले निजाम  कर

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«Reply #1 on: September 16, 2013, 06:02:07 PM »
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बहुत खूब सूरत पेशक़श की है आपने अल्फ़ाज़ जी. बहुत खूब.
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«Reply #2 on: September 16, 2013, 06:06:28 PM »
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its just outstanding gazal...... mujhe to bahut pasand aai Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Thumbs UP Thumbs UP Thumbs UP Thumbs UP Thumbs UP Thumbs UP Thumbs UP Thumbs UP Thumbs UP Thumbs UP Thumbs UP...
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«Reply #3 on: September 16, 2013, 06:39:29 PM »
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मेरे पीठ में खंजर उतारने से पहले मेरा इक काम कर
तेरे पिछे कोई खडा न हो इसका तू पहले इतमीनान कर
very nice,sir
लहू जो बहेगा मेरा तो कूछ तेरे जैसा ही होगा
सुकून से सो सकेगा  इसका तू पहले इंतिजाम कर
good one ,sir
 खुन कि सुर्खि मजहब से कम ज्यादा नही होती
मूझे दफ़्नाने से पहले इसका तू पहले ऐलान कर
gr8888888,sir
मेरी मां को दिलासा देने जाना जरुर
आंख मिला पायेगा उस्से इसका तू पहले ऐहतिराम कर
what is the use of ehteraam in this sher,sir

मेरे बच्चों को मेरे मौत के बारे में मत बताना
आके कंही न  लिपटें तूझ्से इसका तू पहले ऐहराम  कर
what is the meaning of ehraam in this content- ehraam is actually a cloths people  wear when go for haj or omrah,sir

 tearyeyed
'राज' दे रहा है तुझे  अपने बचपन का वास्ता
कोई बच्चा बडा होने से न डरे इसका तू पहले निजाम  कर
ok,sir


good,sir
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«Reply #4 on: September 16, 2013, 06:50:23 PM »
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well, i would like to clarify to certain points that you have raised and also try to explain the intended inference:

ehtiraam : the protagonist in the ghazal is cautioning his friend turned foe that when he goes to meet his mother to offer his condolences, he should pay adequate respect to her eyes, thus ehtiraam= respect

ehraam : you are correct that it denotes the clothes worn while going to the holy pilgrimage but for your kindest information it also denotes certain things which one considers taboo for oneself. so in this ghazal, the protagonist is requesting his friend who has killed him to avoid his children and telling them about his death.

i hope it is clear to you............sir.
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