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Rishi Agarwal
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Kitni Bechain Ho Gai Hai Ab Ye Saansein Meri
Tere Bin Bahut Roti Hai Ab Ye Aankhein Meri
Aake Lag Ja Gale Mere Tere Bin Ab Raha Na Jaye
Dil Bhulane Se Bhi Nahi Bhulta Woh Batien Teri
Na Jane Kabse Meri Aankho Ko Neend Aati Hi nahi
Ab Meri Bahein Mangti Hai Mujhse Ratein Teri
Mere Samne se Tu chali jati Hai To Jaan Nikal Jati Hai
Wapas Tere Aane Se Lot Aati Hai Ye Sanse Meri
Ab Kab Talk Ye Lamha Judai Ka Rulayega Mujhko
Dil Laga Beitha Hai Seene Se Bas Ab Yaadein Teri
Meri Rooh Ko Chorkar Tum Ja Payoge Kaha Tak
Wapas Lot Ke Le Aayengi Fir Paas Tumhe Wafaye Meri
Ab To Laut Ke Aajao Jan Tere Bin Dil Lagta Nahi
Wapas Tum Ko Bula Rahi Hai Ye Bahein Meri
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«Reply #2 on: January 11, 2010, 12:55:12 PM » |
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nice creation rishi ji... 
 Bahut Bahut Shukriya Devangi JI |
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«Reply #3 on: January 11, 2010, 02:23:53 PM » |
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KYA BAAT HAI RISHI AGARWAL JI...
AB TOH LAUT KE AAJAO MERI JAN
KAHIN NIKAL NA JAAYE MERI JAAN..
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«Reply #4 on: January 11, 2010, 03:22:22 PM » |
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Nice SHaring Rishi !
Please post in appropriate section !
Moved to Poetry lounge !
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«Reply #5 on: January 11, 2010, 05:48:02 PM » |
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wah wah agarwal ji bohot khoob  |
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«Reply #6 on: January 11, 2010, 11:57:29 PM » |
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«Reply #7 on: January 12, 2010, 07:05:05 AM » |
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Nice SHaring Rishi !
Please post in appropriate section !
Moved to Poetry lounge !
Sophi JI Aapko mujhse problem kya hai ye boliye aur aaj hum jannna chahte hai ki ye kisne aur kab likhi shophi ji can u explain mein kuch bhi likhta hu aap uska is tarah to mazak to mat banaiye aapki dushmani mujhse hai na ki meri likhi huvi kisi bhi shayari se agar aapko accha nahi lagta ki hum ya rahe to saf saf bol dijiye Kisi Ki Bhawnayo ki kadar karna to jane aap aur aapki respect karte hai iska ye to matlab nahi na ki aap chahe wo kare meine pahle bhi kai bar aapse bola hai aur aaj bhi bolta hu ki dard hota hai jab aap is tarah se kisi bat ka badla is tarah se leti ho Aur Aap Apne Adhikaro Ka Najayaz Fayda To Na Uthaye Kisi KI Himmat Badhane Ki Bajaye Kisi Ki Himmat Girana To Koi Aapse Sikhe I Know Ki Aap IS Post Ko Delete Kar Dogi Kar Do..... Is Saf Saf Jhalakta Hai Ki Aap Ke Pass Dil Nahi Hai Kahte Hai Ki Ek Shayar Dusre Shayar Ka Dard Bahut Acchi Tarah Se Jan Leta Hai Per Shayad Ye Galat Bat hai Mujhe Ye Laga Tha Ki Aap Bahut Acchi Hai But SHayad Ye Meri Galat Fahmi Thi I Want Your Reply..............? ? ? ? |
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«Reply #8 on: January 12, 2010, 07:36:03 AM » |
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nice work Rishi ji....
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«Reply #9 on: January 12, 2010, 07:44:48 AM » |
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Sophi JI Aapko mujhse problem kya hai ye boliye aur aaj hum jannna chahte hai ki ye kisne aur kab likhi shophi ji can u explain mein kuch bhi likhta hu aap uska is tarah to mazak to mat banaiye aapki dushmani mujhse hai na ki meri likhi huvi kisi bhi shayari se agar aapko accha nahi lagta ki hum ya rahe to saf saf bol dijiye Kisi Ki Bhawnayo ki kadar karna to jane aap aur aapki respect karte hai iska ye to matlab nahi na ki aap chahe wo kare meine pahle bhi kai bar aapse bola hai aur aaj bhi bolta hu ki dard hota hai jab aap is tarah se kisi bat ka badla is tarah se leti ho Aur Aap Apne Adhikaro Ka Najayaz Fayda To Na Uthaye Kisi KI Himmat Badhane Ki Bajaye Kisi Ki Himmat Girana To Koi Aapse Sikhe I Know Ki Aap IS Post Ko Delete Kar Dogi Kar Do..... Is Saf Saf Jhalakta Hai Ki Aap Ke Pass Dil Nahi Hai Kahte Hai Ki Ek Shayar Dusre Shayar Ka Dard Bahut Acchi Tarah Se Jan Leta Hai Per Shayad Ye Galat Bat hai Mujhe Ye Laga Tha Ki Aap Bahut Acchi Hai But SHayad Ye Meri Galat Fahmi Thi I Want Your Reply..............? ? ? ?
main yea sabit kar sakti hun ki copy paste hai... Check this link. http://www.lovelysms.com/urdu-sms-hindi-sms-September-2007-3.htmCheck this link and see the SMS number 9th dekho... And lastly I m here to do my work... Jis tarah mujhe apni likhi cheezo ki ijjat karni aati hai utani hi doorsro ki kala bhi ijjat karni aati hai... |
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«Reply #10 on: January 12, 2010, 07:50:08 AM » |
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main yea sabit kar sakti hun ki copy paste hai... Check this link. http://www.lovelysms.com/urdu-sms-hindi-sms-September-2007-3.htmCheck this link and see the SMS number 9th dekho... And lastly I m here to do my work... Jis tarah mujhe apni likhi cheezo ki ijjat karni aati hai utani hi doorsro ki kala bhi ijjat karni aati hai... Agar Aap Sabit Karo To Thik Se To Sabit Kiya Kare Use Likhi Huvi aur meri likhi huvi mein Kitna fark Hai wo sab dekh Sakte hai and listen sophi ji lines mein bahut antar hai and aaj ye faisla sab karenge and aap apna work kare meine mana nahi kiya per mere hi piccche kyu pade ho aur dhyan dijiye aap un lino mein aur meri lino mein phir bolana aap ki kaun sahi hai aur kaun galat okkk |
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«Reply #11 on: January 12, 2010, 07:52:35 AM » |
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Lines Churana To Shayar Ka Kam Hota Hai Aur Isme Ye Nahi Hota Ki Wo ek dum ek jaisi hai mein chahta hu ki aaap bhi ek nazar mein usse puri tarah se padh le aap
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«Reply #12 on: January 12, 2010, 07:53:44 AM » |
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Kitni Bechain Ho Gai Hai Ab Ye Saansein Meri
Tere Bin Bahut Roti Hai Ab Ye Aankhein Meri
Aake Lag Ja Gale Mere Tere Bin Ab Raha Na Jaye
Dil Bhulane Se Bhi Nahi Bhulta Woh Batien Teri
Na Jane Kabse Meri Aankho Ko Neend Aati Hi nahi
Ab Meri Bahein Mangti Hai Mujhse Ratein Teri
Mere Samne se Tu chali jati Hai To Jaan Nikal Jati Hai
Wapas Tere Aane Se Lot Aati Hai Ye Sanse Meri
Ab Kab Talk Ye Lamha Judai Ka Rulayega Mujhko
Dil Laga Beitha Hai Seene Se Bas Ab Yaadein Teri
Meri Rooh Ko Chorkar Tum Ja Payoge Kaha Tak
Wapas Lot Ke Le Aayengi Fir Paas Tumhe Wafaye Meri
Ab To Laut Ke Aajao Jan Tere Bin Dil Lagta Nahi
Wapas Tum Ko Bula Rahi Hai Ye Bahein Meri
This above is your work and below the site shows the orginal work ... kitni bechain hai ye sanse meri
bina tere bohat roti hain ye aankhein meri
kab se meri aankho ko neend aati he nahi
bahain mangti hai mujh se ratain teri
jaan aajao k ab dil kahi lagta hi nahi
tum ko bola rahi hai ye bahein meri
kitni bechain hai ye sanse meri
bina tere bhut roti hai ye aankhein meri Tumari aankhe shayad kharab ho gai hai ... pure 2 sher copy kiye hai... may bhi baaki bhi copy ho.. I doubt please check again... ki kitna difference hai.. hah ! ?? |
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«Reply #13 on: January 12, 2010, 07:55:05 AM » |
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Lines Churana To Shayar Ka Kam Hota Hai Aur Isme Ye Nahi Hota Ki Wo ek dum ek jaisi hai mein chahta hu ki aaap bhi ek nazar mein usse puri tarah se padh le aap
The bold sentence showed you are copy cat... aur shayar kabhi sher nahi churate .. yea baat keh kar tum shayaro ki tauheen kar rahe ho.... |
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