---deewaano si jaat thi---

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unn khoobiyon se lais ab hum nahi
kho du ‘kuch’ ab iska bhi ghum nahi……

wo beetey zamaane ki baat thi
jab apni bhi, deewaano si ‘jaat’ thi……

lahar utth ta tha kabhi jo ‘armaano’ ka
khaak pada hai ab,sirf bikhre ‘saamano’ ka……

andaaz wo feeka hua, judaa tha kabhi jo ‘auron’ se
ruut ki karwat badli kuch aisi, ja laga wo bhi ‘gairon’ se……

wahi saawan aya hai fir ‘jhoom’ kar
khus hai koi apna bht hi, ik naye saathi ko ‘chooom’ kar
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«Reply #1 on: April 29, 2011, 09:46:18 AM »
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har ek sher individually bht accha hai kb...
par saath....
rhythm hi nahi ban rahi..
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«Reply #2 on: April 29, 2011, 05:00:36 PM »
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hahaha priya…
tum bhi bachchi ho yar………

rythm dhoond rahi iska !!!

isko bht kam log smjh skte hain kunki…

ye uss waqt ki feel h jab mai bhayankar akelapan feel kar rha tha……

wesa waqt jab sucide ka khayal aata hai kayro ko aur bahduro ko bhi…

isme kaha se rythm aata……

mene ise dlt karna chaha tha subah ko lekin…yahi ek kharaabi hai yo me bs ki dlt nai hota.…

khus raho bachcha Usual Smile
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«Reply #3 on: May 01, 2011, 10:12:02 AM »
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Koee baat naheen fir se theek kar ke likh kar

post to kar sakte hain...so kariye..Janab..Raqeeb
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«Reply #4 on: May 01, 2011, 10:43:35 AM »
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sukriya janaab idea dene ke lie…
lekin mai kuch sudhar nai sakta…
coz sudhara usko jata h jo kahi likha hua ho soch smjh kar…

lekin me bas kuch wese waqt par likhta hu direct yahi yo me jb muje kisi ki jarurat hoti h…

ab wo bate wo feel to hai nai to sudhar kaise hoga
haan bigaad jarur sakta hu aur jada Usual SmileUsual Smile

apka sukriya satish ji
aapne parha aur reply ke lie waqt dia

khus rahiye ji
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«Reply #5 on: May 01, 2011, 10:44:23 AM »
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sukriya janaab idea dene ke lie…
lekin mai kuch sudhar nai sakta…
coz sudhara usko jata h jo kahi likha hua ho soch smjh kar…

lekin me bas kuch wese waqt par likhta hu direct yahi yo me jb muje kisi ki jarurat hoti h…

ab wo bate wo feel to hai nai to sudhar kaise hoga
haan bigaad jarur sakta hu aur jada Usual SmileUsual Smile

apka sukriya satish ji
aapne parha aur reply ke lie waqt dia

khus rahiye ji
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«Reply #6 on: May 01, 2011, 10:56:11 AM »
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Quote from: killbill on May 01, 2011, 10:44:23 AM
sukriya janaab idea dene ke lie…
lekin mai kuch sudhar nai sakta…
coz sudhara usko jata h jo kahi likha hua ho soch smjh kar…

lekin me bas kuch wese waqt par likhta hu direct yahi yo me jb muje kisi ki jarurat hoti h…

ab wo bate wo feel to hai nai to sudhar kaise hoga
haan bigaad jarur sakta hu aur jada Usual SmileUsual Smile

apka sukriya satish ji
aapne parha aur reply ke lie waqt dia

khus rahiye ji



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«Reply #7 on: May 01, 2011, 11:06:41 AM »
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Huh??sad5sad5
Quote from: adil bechain on May 01, 2011, 10:56:11 AM


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«Reply #8 on: May 01, 2011, 11:09:23 AM »
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Huh??sad5sad5


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?!?!?! \:\: :-(:-(
Quote from: khamosh_aawaaz on May 01, 2011, 11:09:23 AM

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«Reply #10 on: May 01, 2011, 11:23:40 AM »
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YE KUCH SAMAJH NAHIN AYA
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«Reply #11 on: May 01, 2011, 11:27:42 AM »
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eise khayal ki wajah kb....

Quote from: killbill on April 29, 2011, 05:00:36 PM
hahaha priya…
tum bhi bachchi ho yar………

rythm dhoond rahi iska !!!

isko bht kam log smjh skte hain kunki…

ye uss waqt ki feel h jab mai bhayankar akelapan feel kar rha tha……

wesa waqt jab sucide ka khayal aata hai kayro ko aur bahduro ko bhi…

isme kaha se rythm aata……

mene ise dlt karna chaha tha subah ko lekin…yahi ek kharaabi hai yo me bs ki dlt nai hota.…

khus raho bachcha Usual Smile
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donno………
Quote from: manzil-e-ishq on May 01, 2011, 11:27:42 AM
eise khayal ki wajah kb....
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