Ek shaam andheri si.....ek nayi subah ki aas.....!!!

by Talat on August 25, 2008, 05:30:27 PM
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Hi Friends

I have tried this time to post on negative and positive feelings together.... Nirasha main ashaa, andhere main roshni khojne ki koshish ki hai...Pehli peshkash ke ek sher ko hi lekar apni doosri peshkash tayyar ki hai.......shayad pasand aaye.....Please do write if I have failed to convey the message...!!

Talat
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«Reply #1 on: August 25, 2008, 06:19:11 PM »
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wah kay abaat hai, bahoot khoob Celmira.... Good work!!! kabil-e-Tareef!!!
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«Reply #2 on: August 25, 2008, 07:08:37 PM »
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celmira ji,

aapka shabdo ka chayan-bahut prabhaavshaali raha yahan.niraashavaadi rudan ek aashaavadi geet ban gaya.....aapne behtareen likha he aur gehrai bhee bade saral tareeke se ujaagar hui.aapko badhai.

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«Reply #3 on: August 26, 2008, 02:01:24 AM »
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«Reply #4 on: August 26, 2008, 02:14:53 AM »
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Quote from: Celmira on August 25, 2008, 05:30:27 PM
Hi Friends

I have tried this time to post on negative and positive feelings together.... Nirasha main ashaa, andhere main roshni khojne ki koshish ki hai...Pehli peshkash ke ek sher ko hi lekar apni doosri peshkash tayyar ki hai.......shayad pasand aaye.....Please do write if I have failed to convey the message...!!

Talat




Shayad pasand aaya ?? Bahut pasand aaya hai Talat. Bahut accha likha hai aapne. Pehle wale sher ka aakhir do line hame behat pasand aaya hai and second wala superb creation.. Good Work  Clapping Smiley  Thumbs UP
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«Reply #5 on: August 26, 2008, 02:19:06 AM »
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Bahut khoob Sayyid Randhari ji.. Bahut accha likha hai aapne.
Daad hazir hai kabul farmayiyega zarur.
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«Reply #6 on: August 26, 2008, 03:17:19 AM »
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murjhaya hua ped... shayed tumhe khud pata nahi ke tumne kitni khoobsurat cheeze likhi hai aaj ke daur me insan jab zindagi se mayous hain use murjhaya hua ped.. zaroor padhna chahiye.

thank you celmira thank you very much
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«Reply #7 on: August 26, 2008, 03:20:21 AM »
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Quote from: Roja on August 26, 2008, 02:19:06 AM
Bahut khoob Sayyid Randhari ji.. Bahut accha likha hai aapne.
Daad hazir hai kabul farmayiyega zarur.

Aap ki daad sar-aankhon par roja ji, bohot bohot shukriya...
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«Reply #8 on: August 26, 2008, 05:02:33 AM »
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bahoot achcha likha hai talat...........anokha dhang aur bahoot khoobsurat kavita...... Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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«Reply #9 on: August 26, 2008, 05:13:43 AM »
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Celmira sis Wah wah bohut hi khoob likha
hai dono hi kalam ek dam umda pesh
kiya hai aapne superb!! lines... g88 work... 
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Sayyid ji kamaal ka likha hai jawab bhi
khoobsurat se pesh kiya hai aapne g88 work..
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«Reply #10 on: August 26, 2008, 05:19:40 AM »
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bahoot dumdaar likha aapne randeri sahab....
zindagi kya hai koi samjhe agar,
sab badal jata hai gar badle nazar...
kam shabdon me adbhut sachchai..wah wah wah wah Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #11 on: August 26, 2008, 05:47:27 AM »
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BAHUT KHOOB
VERY WELL EXPLAIN FEELINGS,
BY. K.SHAEL
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«Reply #12 on: August 26, 2008, 05:55:48 AM »
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HaaN talat heek kaha tumne....bahoot hi purasar tehreereiN likhieN haiN aapne....Merii jjaanibb see iss  dil paziir tehreeriN par daad qubool farmayeiN....Harash

LeherroN maiN doobtii ek dardeelii awaaaw
Jaise doob raha ho samanDer maiN koi saaz

Woh konpleiN jo phootne se pehle toot gaieN
KahaN gaya unkii zindagii ka  woh aagaaz

Ab sab taraf Khouff ke andhere hain raahi
Raho tum KhizaaN ki zind maiN ya pehn lo taaz



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Quote from: Celmira on August 25, 2008, 05:30:27 PM
Hi Friends

I have tried this time to post on negative and positive feelings together.... Nirasha main ashaa, andhere main roshni khojne ki koshish ki hai...Pehli peshkash ke ek sher ko hi lekar apni doosri peshkash tayyar ki hai.......shayad pasand aaye.....Please do write if I have failed to convey the message...!!

Talat
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«Reply #13 on: August 26, 2008, 06:00:33 AM »
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Quote from: Celmira on August 25, 2008, 05:30:27 PM
Hi Friends

I have tried this time to post on negative and positive feelings together.... Nirasha main ashaa, andhere main roshni khojne ki koshish ki hai...Pehli peshkash ke ek sher ko hi lekar apni doosri peshkash tayyar ki hai.......shayad pasand aaye.....Please do write if I have failed to convey the message...!!

Talat





Bahut khoobsurat.. Applause
Aasaan shabd, alag andaaz aur gehra arth... Bahut pyaara likha hai Celmira..   Thumbs UP
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«Reply #14 on: August 26, 2008, 06:03:28 AM »
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Waah... Bahut bahut khoob... Sayyid Randeri ji
Bahut umda likha hai aapne...  Applause
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