kahin pe bijliyan gir rahin !!!:Shairi - E

sarfira

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!!
!!
kahin pe bijliyan gir rahin koi aashiya loot raha
dekh jahan ke manzar ko har shakhs yhan ka toot raha--

kamzor kaandhe kishoron ki bhar bhar ghoome laade boojh
apno ki ummeedon aashaon se,bachcha bachcha joojh raha--

kahin maikadon ka shor hai kahin badhazmi sa humgama
kahin bhookhe bachchon ko dekh 'MAA' ki aankhon se, aansoo reh reh chhutt raha--

bhari aankhon se jo dekha sach to yakeen aya Sarfire
lekar seene me hazar zakhm, muskurata har shaks ghoom raha--
!!
!!


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khujli

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Re: kahin pe bijliyan gir rahin !!!

«Reply #1 on: February 07, 2012, 05:52:23 AM »

Quote from: sarfira on February 07, 2012, 05:40:10 AM


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EpicLover

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Re: kahin pe bijliyan gir rahin !!!

«Reply #2 on: February 07, 2012, 06:11:55 AM »

very nicely written. Usual Smile


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sksaini4

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Re: kahin pe bijliyan gir rahin !!!

«Reply #3 on: February 07, 2012, 06:50:19 AM »

Sarfiraa ji bahut achhee peshkash hai par teesree line samajh naheen aayee plz clear karen aur shaayad 5th line kaa aakhiree lafz hangaamaa hai jo shaayad n ki jaghah ghaltee se m likhaa gayaa.

bahut bahut badhaai


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Re: kahin pe bijliyan gir rahin !!!

«Reply #4 on: February 07, 2012, 07:20:40 AM »

Quote from: sarfira on February 07, 2012, 05:40:10 AM

Sarfira ji,
Bahut ache, Bahut hi ache jazbaat, Aap ki dil ki naiki jhalak rahi thi iss se.
Kuch alfaaz hamare samajh men bhi
Aap ko thora kasht donga magar 4th line zara samjha den

Aabhari aapka
Abul Asad
nahi arehe the...


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sarfira

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Re: kahin pe bijliyan gir rahin !!!

«Reply #5 on: February 07, 2012, 07:52:48 AM »

Saini sahab--
Abul sahab--
teesri aur 4th line aaplogo ki smjh me nhi aya iske lie humari soch zimmedar hai--

iss aashaar ke mtlb humare lahze me--
jawan hote bacho ke lie hai jo poori tarah paripakva nhi hote pr apne pariwar ki bht si ummedon ka bojh lekar jeene ko mazbur hain--
jo samay se pehle hi bade ho rahe--
aasha hai ki ye umeed aur aashaon ke mtlb aap smjh gaye honge--

sukriya