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Kuch tukde dil ke dil ko hi zakhami kar raheN haiN
Mere ahsaas mere khayaal ghut ghut ke mar raheN haiN
Aik khawaab ka kachcha shisha banne se pahle tut gaya
Kis ummid pe hum seene meiN sanse bhar raheN haiN
Kuch chupaa hi nahi hai tujhse dil ka haal tak janta hai
Kaise kaheN khuda yaa kaise halaat guzar raheN haiN
Hum un lamhaat ko kareeb dekh rahe haiN " ParwaaZ"
Ajnaabi apne se hume lene aasmaaN se utar raheN haiN
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«Reply #1 on: October 08, 2010, 07:08:38 PM » |
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bahut khoob parwaaz ji... keep writing
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«Reply #2 on: October 09, 2010, 11:25:53 AM » |
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kya baat hai parwaaz ji...
i just luv d first one
simply superb. sir...
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«Reply #3 on: October 09, 2010, 04:43:57 PM » |
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«Reply #4 on: October 09, 2010, 07:01:17 PM » |
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nice parwaz ji keep writting  |
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«Reply #5 on: October 09, 2010, 07:39:09 PM » |
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bht hi khubsurat peshkash hai ye aapki parwaz ji ..har ek sher dil k jazbaat bakhubi bayaan karta hua...hamesha aap sabki poem ka postmartem karte ahin ..aaj humne socha kyun na main hi kar dun..lekin apne style me....aap ki tarah na likhne ki samjh hai na kala...na technic pata hai...bas dil ne jo mehsus kiya padhke wahi bata ti hun...
to chaliye aapki kalam pe aate hain......
Kuch tukde dil ke dil ko hi zakhami kar raheN haiN
Mere ahsaas mere khayaal ghut ghut ke mar raheN haiN
waahhhhhhhh...kya khub sher kaha hai ye aapne sach me dil khush ho gaya...
is ka jawab gar hum dete to aisa hota...
Yun na ghutne do tum apne jazbaat apne dil k andar
Kuch apne hain jo tumhari khushi ki dua kar rahe hain
Aik khawaab ka kachcha shisha banne se pahle tut gaya
Kis ummid pe hum seene meiN sanse bhar raheN haiN
waahhhhh ji kya dard bayaan kiya hai aapne ..iss sher me..bht khub...
Kya hua jo ek khwaab kachcha pakka sa tut gaya
Har ek raat zindagi ki naye sapne saja kar aa rahe hain
Kuch chupaa hi nahi hai tujhse dil ka haal tak janta hai
Kaise kaheN khuda yaa kaise halaat guzar raheN haiN
bht mastttt parwaz ji bht hi pyara sher hai ye shikayat bhara....
Khuda sath hai tere aur usi ki raza se ho raha hai sabkuch
Fir kyun iss tarah tere hausle himmat haar rahe hain
Hum un lamhaat ko kareeb dekh rahe haiN " ParwaaZ"
Ajnaabi apne se hume lene aasmaaN se utar raheN haiN
aisi baat nahin kehte ji....par sher bada pyara kaha hai sply last line bht acchi lagi..ise humne light kar diya yahan....
Har ek dil ki baat reh jati hai mere dil me *kasak*
Faasle fir bhi hum dono k bich k kum kar rahe hain…!!!
[/b] Yun na ghutne do tum apne jazbaat apne dil k andar
Kuch apne hain jo tumhari khushi ki dua kar rahe hain
Kya hua jo ek khwaab kachcha pakka sa tut gaya
Har ek raat zindagi ki naye sapne saja kar aa rahe hain
Khuda sath hai tere aur usi ki raza se ho raha hai sabkuch
Fir kyun iss tarah tere hausle himmat haar rahe hain
Har ek dil ki baat reh jati hai mere dil me *kasak*
Faasle fir bhi hum dono k bich k kum kar rahe hain…!!!
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«Reply #6 on: October 09, 2010, 08:14:16 PM » |
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«Reply #7 on: October 09, 2010, 08:25:47 PM » |
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bht hi khubsurat peshkash hai ye aapki parwaz ji ..har ek sher dil k jazbaat bakhubi bayaan karta hua...hamesha aap sabki poem ka postmartem karte ahin ..aaj humne socha kyun na main hi kar dun..lekin apne style me....aap ki tarah na likhne ki samjh hai na kala...na technic pata hai...bas dil ne jo mehsus kiya padhke wahi bata ti hun...
to chaliye aapki kalam pe aate hain......
Yun na ghutne do tum apne jazbaat apne dil k andar
Kuch apne hain jo tumhari khushi ki dua kar rahe hain
Kya hua jo ek khwaab kachcha pakka sa tut gaya
Har ek raat zindagi ki naye sapne saja kar aa rahe hain
Khuda sath hai tere aur usi ki raza se ho raha hai sabkuch
Fir kyun iss tarah tere hausle himmat haar rahe hain
Har ek dil ki baat reh jati hai mere dil me *kasak*
Faasle fir bhi hum dono k bich k kum kar rahe hain…!!!
Behad umdaa reply kiya hai jee aapne .....
Aapke is reply ke liye dil se shukra guzaar hai...
And aapke in khubsurat ahsaasoN per dil se daad hazir hai 
Aapke reply ke reply meiN hume haliyaa naye film ka geet yaad aaya film shayad Kites thi....
Zindagi do pal ki intezaar kab tak hum kareNge bhala
Tumhe pyaar kab tak Naa kareNge bhala
Thanks again for this reply aapke reply ka reply hum
per udhar raha abhi to kuch mood nahi ho raha hai shayari karne ka.. jab ban jayeNga aapko reply kar deNge...
Khush O aabaad rahiye.....
Khuda Hafez.... |
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«Reply #8 on: October 10, 2010, 06:19:08 AM » |
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kasak jee Aadaab!
Behad umdaa reply kiya hai jee aapne .....
Aapke is reply ke liye dil se shukra guzaar hai...
And aapke in khubsurat ahsaasoN per dil se daad hazir hai
Aapke reply ke reply meiN hume haliyaa naye film ka geet yaad aaya film shayad Kites thi....
Zindagi do pal ki intezaar kab tak hum kareNge bhala
Tumhe pyaar kab tak Naa kareNge bhala
Thanks again for this reply aapke reply ka reply hum
per udhar raha abhi to kuch mood nahi ho raha hai shayari karne ka.. jab ban jayeNga aapko reply kar deNge...
Khush O aabaad rahiye.....
Khuda Hafez.... to wo sweet si smile aai y anhin aapke face pe hamara reply padhke..hamesha wali? ye nahin bataya aapne...
hume aapke reply ka wait rahega parwaz ji.... |
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«Reply #9 on: October 17, 2010, 01:33:54 PM » |
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«Reply #11 on: October 18, 2010, 09:05:07 AM » |
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wah ji bahut khoob chhaa gaye aap log...
dher saari daad ke sath lkhte rahiye`
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«Reply #12 on: October 18, 2010, 02:00:48 PM » |
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Parwaz jee! sabse pahle ek khoobsoorat kalaam ke liye aap ko mubaarak baad denaa chaahatee hooN.Aap ki gazal nazar nawaaz hui .deri ke liye mazarat khwah hooN.aap waqai behad umda likhte haiN.bas ek guzarish hai ki ek shair or likh kar kalaam ko gazal ka haq ada karte to behtar hota...
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