Lavzo ki kami hai fir bhi ibarat banani hai !

by Ricky on July 23, 2007, 06:39:44 PM
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Too much of anything is bad, when you try too much to write then what you get.. no words, it feels that someone has stolen your words from you, may be someone.. !
Unhi lavzo ki kami se joojhte hue kuch lavz kasmasakar hazir hai !


    Mujhe kehna hai bohot, meri ek ankahi kahani hai,
        Kaise mein kahu sab, mere lavz ab mujhse hi bemani hain !

        Ek ek zarra jorkar maine socha ki aaj kuch  kehdun..
        Magar aisi zarre ki kafiyat jaise bair meri uski purani hai !

        Fir poocha zindagi se tu kyun itni bebas khadi hai..
        Ek qatra bahaya usne aansu,nahin bachi usme zindagi hai !

        Fir kadam aur badhe, dhunda kuch apno ko..
        Haath badhaya parr dekho wahan bhi masumiyat badi hai !

        Fir dekha uss aasma ki aur, suna hai uski daulat badi hai,
        Ab kya usse poochon, zindagi toh uski hi dee hui hai !

        Fakat ek chhoti si zindagani hai usme bhi kitni kahani hain…
        Iss rah k hum nahin rahi fir bhi kadmo se yahan dhool udani hai !

        Murr k dekha unn panno pe jahan apni kahani sunani hai..
        Kaun Chura le gaya mere lavz,sukhi syahi se ibarat banani hai!!!
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    «Reply #1 on: July 23, 2007, 09:41:49 PM »
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    too good lines Ricky ji..

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    Fir poocha zindagi se tu kyun itni bebas khadi hai..
    Ek qatra bahaya usne aansu,nahin bachi usme zindagi hai !

    Fakat ek chhoti si zindagani hai usme bhi kitni kahani hain…
    Iss rah k hum nahin rahi fir bhi kadmo se yahan dhool udani hai !

    Murr k dekha unn panno pe jahan apni kahani sunani hai..
    Kaun Chura le gaya mere lavz,sukhi syahi se ibarat banani hai!!!


    simte hue shabd bhi shabd bahot kuch kah gaye!!  Good job!!!
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    «Reply #2 on: July 24, 2007, 02:24:12 AM »
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          Fakat ek chhoti si zindagani hai usme bhi kitni kahani hain…
          Iss rah k hum nahin rahi fir bhi kadmo se yahan dhool udani hai !

          Murr k dekha unn panno pe jahan apni kahani sunani hai..
          Kaun Chura le gaya mere lavz,sukhi syahi se ibarat banani hai!!!
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      Yeh ek sher main aapne bahut kuch keh diya...

      Jalti huyee chita ko mazar samaj lena
      Dil ke walwalon ko angaar samaj lena
      Koyee karz tujhpe bakhi na rahe "Roja"
      Zindagi ko maut ka uphar samaj lena..

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      «Reply #3 on: July 24, 2007, 07:18:40 AM »
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      Thori si kami dikhi thi so abhi zara sa fer-badal kiya hai, I hope now its better.

      @Pooja,
      Thankyou for heartly praising.

      @Roja,
      Thankyou too and your words are really nice.
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      «Reply #4 on: July 24, 2007, 04:13:23 PM »
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      You are Most Welcome Ricky ji[/color]
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      «Reply #5 on: July 24, 2007, 07:49:42 PM »
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      You are welcome Roja, did you notice the changes I did ?
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      «Reply #6 on: July 24, 2007, 11:27:11 PM »
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      You are welcome Roja, did you notice the changes I did ?


      Nops Ricky ji... I could not.... if possible do tell where u
      did miner changes...
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      «Reply #7 on: July 25, 2007, 10:13:33 AM »
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      Ek ek zarra jorkar maine socha ki aaj kuch kehdun..
      Magar aisi zarre ki kafiyat jaise bair meri uski purani hai !
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      «Reply #8 on: July 31, 2007, 10:07:42 AM »
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      bahut hi badiya ....RICKY JI........ Usual Smile
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      Ek ek zarra jorkar maine socha ki aaj kuch kehdun..
      Magar aisi zarre ki kafiyat jaise bair meri uski purani hai !
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      «Reply #9 on: August 02, 2007, 06:55:52 AM »
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      Thankyou Luvfruit !
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      «Reply #10 on: August 02, 2007, 07:03:36 AM »
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      Too much of anything is bad, when you try too much to write then what you get.. no words, it feels that someone has stolen your words from you, may be someone.. !
      Unhi lavzo ki kami se joojhte hue kuch lavz kasmasakar hazir hai !


        Mujhe kehna hai bohot, meri ek ankahi kahani hai,
            Kaise mein kahu sab, mere lavz ab mujhse hi bemani hain !

            Ek ek zarra jorkar maine socha ki aaj kuch  kehdun..
            Magar aisi zarre ki kafiyat jaise bair meri uski purani hai !

            Fir poocha zindagi se tu kyun itni bebas khadi hai..
            Ek qatra bahaya usne aansu,nahin bachi usme zindagi hai !

            Fir kadam aur badhe, dhunda kuch apno ko..
            Haath badhaya parr dekho wahan bhi masumiyat badi hai !

            Fir dekha uss aasma ki aur, suna hai uski daulat badi hai,
            Ab kya usse poochon, zindagi toh uski hi dee hui hai !

            Fakat ek chhoti si zindagani hai usme bhi kitni kahani hain…
            Iss rah k hum nahin rahi fir bhi kadmo se yahan dhool udani hai !

            Murr k dekha unn panno pe jahan apni kahani sunani hai..
            Kaun Chura le gaya mere lavz,sukhi syahi se ibarat banani hai!!!
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        Waaah Waaah Fantastic Ricky Sir jee.....Bahut hee acche emotions likhe hai.....Superb......!!!!
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        «Reply #11 on: August 02, 2007, 05:50:57 PM »
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        Thankyou Gaurav, those are your nice words which actually payback for my effort to write those lines.
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        «Reply #12 on: August 03, 2007, 07:15:40 AM »
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        Ricky Ji after a long time .. reading ur poetry.. But seriously.. Wonder ful lines by u. seriously . some time we lyk to say lots of stuff. but that tiem we dont have such words to express our feelings.

        this thing u beautifully expressed by ur poetry...

        Divya
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        «Reply #13 on: August 04, 2007, 01:15:44 PM »
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        Deepika_divya, you liked  it. Its more than appreciation when reader 'seriously' likes the poetry.
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