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Ye kahaN hu main
Meri aankho ke aage andhera kyOn hai
Mujhme taakat jaise hai hi nahi
Bahut jor ki pyaas lagee hai..
Paani..kisi ne shayd kuch nahi suna..paaaaaaaaaaaani
Mai yahaN kaise aa gaya
Mai to kisi ki talaash me nikla tha
Kab behosh ho gaya.. Pata hi nahi chala
Badan toot raha hai….
Aankhe khul kyoN nahi rahi..
Ye chipchipaahat kaisi hai..aur ye laal sa kya hai
Ghabra gaya huN mai…
Dar se maathe pe paseena aa gaya hai
Mai abhi jeena chahta huN..par
Mai khada hone ke kaabil bhi nahi
Gir pada huN mai..
Shayad yahi meri niyati thii
Jise mai badal na saka..
is jungle me..
kisi ko shayad pata bhi na chale..
usko bhee…jiske liye………………..
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Satish Shukla
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«Reply #1 on: March 11, 2012, 08:40:20 AM » |
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mkv ji,
good.....really touching..
keep on writing...all the best.
Satish Shukla 'Raqeeb'
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«Reply #2 on: March 11, 2012, 08:43:40 AM » |
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«Reply #3 on: March 11, 2012, 08:49:16 AM » |
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«Reply #4 on: March 11, 2012, 08:59:13 AM » |
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MKV ji . Bahut khoob likha hai.Roz afzoon qalam
ki androoni taaqat khul kar saamne aa rahi hai.
Meri taraf se bahut bahut mubarakbaad.Hasan
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«Reply #6 on: March 11, 2012, 02:08:17 PM » |
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really gud one mkvji...
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«Reply #7 on: March 11, 2012, 03:57:15 PM » |
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mkv ji,
good.....really touching..
keep on writing...all the best.
Satish Shukla 'Raqeeb'
Thanks a lot for your encouraging words Sir |
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«Reply #8 on: March 11, 2012, 03:59:53 PM » |
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Ye kahaN hu main
Meri aankho ke aage andhera kyOn hai
Mujhme taakat jaise hai hi nahi
Bahut jor ki pyaas lagee hai..
Paani..kisi ne shayd kuch nahi suna..paaaaaaaaaaaani
Mai yahaN kaise aa gaya
Mai to kisi ki talaash me nikla tha
Kab behosh ho gaya.. Pata hi nahi chala
Badan toot raha hai….
Aankhe khul kyoN nahi rahi..
Ye chipchipaahat kaisi hai..aur ye laal sa kya hai
Ghabra gaya huN mai…
Dar se maathe pe paseena aa gaya hai
Mai abhi jeena chahta huN..par
Mai khada hone ke kaabil bhi nahi
Gir pada huN mai..
Shayad yahi meri niyati thii
Jise mai badal na saka..
is jungle me..
kisi ko shayad pata bhi na chale..
usko bhee…jiske liye………………..
tooooooooooooo good mkv............! |
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«Reply #9 on: March 12, 2012, 03:14:28 AM » |
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«Reply #10 on: March 12, 2012, 03:27:39 AM » |
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waah mkvji.. padte padte aankhon ke samne ek tasvir si chalne lagi thi... waaah
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«Reply #11 on: March 12, 2012, 03:30:27 AM » |
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waah mkvji.. padte padte aankhon ke samne ek tasvir si chalne lagi thi... waaah
Mann ji Bahut bahut dhanyavaad maine ise bhare aansuoN ke saath likha hai..na jaane kyoN koshish kuch hadd tak kaamyaab hui. thanks again |
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«Reply #12 on: March 12, 2012, 05:07:12 AM » |
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Rachnaa hai aapkee badee gahrairaan liye.
alfaaz iske hain badee baareekiyaan liye. keep it up
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«Reply #13 on: March 12, 2012, 09:47:24 AM » |
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boht khoob
Thanks saahil ji |
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«Reply #14 on: March 12, 2012, 11:30:59 AM » |
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MKV ji . Bahut khoob likha hai.Roz afzoon qalam
ki androoni taaqat khul kar saamne aa rahi hai.
Meri taraf se bahut bahut mubarakbaad.Hasan
Bahut Bahut Shukriya Sir dil bhar aaya aapke comments padhkar. |
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