Yaadon ki narmi mehak rahi hai... .. . //annu//

by annu_genis on October 15, 2016, 09:17:52 AM
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Mausam tevar badal raha hai,
Gunguni sardi khidkiyo pe dastak de rahi hai,
Hawaon me yaadon ki narmi mehak rahi hai.

Iss baar alag hoga ehsaas,
na kisi ke roothne ka maza.. na manaane ka intezaar,
Dhoop me umeedo ki nayi chamak jhalak rahi hai
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«Reply #1 on: October 15, 2016, 08:39:14 PM »
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Mausam tevar badal raha hai,
Gunguni sardi khidkiyo pe dastak de rahi hai,                               Gunguni sardi khidkiyon pe khanak rahi hai,
Hawaon me yaadon ki narmi mehak rahi hai.                                 Hawaon mein yaadon ki narmi mehak rahi hai

Iss baar alag hoga ehsaas,
na kisi ke roothne ka maza.. na manaane ka intezaar,
Dhoop me umeedo ki nayi chamak jhalak rahi hai                         Dhoop mein umeedon ki nayi chamak jhalak rahi hai

Bahut khoob waah waah, main ne kuchh suggest kiyaa hai aap parhh leejiye, it will rhyme better.
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«Reply #2 on: October 16, 2016, 03:49:41 AM »
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Surindarn Jt.. bahut shukriya
Apne suggestion achcha diya hai... thanks for thinking and taking time for my post
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«Reply #3 on: October 17, 2016, 04:46:43 AM »
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«Reply #4 on: October 17, 2016, 07:46:49 PM »
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Rakesh Ji.... thank you for all the applause!
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«Reply #5 on: October 17, 2016, 08:36:14 PM »
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Mausam tevar badal raha hai,
Gunguni sardi khidkiyo pe dastak de rahi hai,
Hawaon me yaadon ki narmi mehak rahi hai.

Iss baar alag hoga ehsaas,
na kisi ke roothne ka maza.. na manaane ka intezaar,
Dhoop me umeedo ki nayi chamak jhalak rahi hai
ZINDGI ZINDGI pr mar rahi hai
tanhai se  kuch dar rahi hai
kholo aankho badhao aage qadam
manjil tujhe talaah kr rahi hai

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«Reply #6 on: October 19, 2016, 05:11:20 PM »
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Manoj Ji ..khoob farmaya apne!
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