!!!!! Yeh Faasle !!!!!!

by neelgold on May 20, 2010, 09:16:48 PM
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Tum se mil ke bhi kyun hum tum se na miley
kyun ab taak hai hum main yeh milon ke faasle

Shikayatein nahi hai ab zindagi se mujhe koi
Kyun fir bhi ab tak hai mujhe tum se kai Giley

Tanhayion ki chaadar odh ke so gaye hum tum
Kyun hum ne na tode aaj talak yeh silsile

Aahat bhi koi hoti hai to lagta hai ki tum ho
Kyun ab tak hai seene main yeh zalzale

Voh ek nazuk dor ka rista jode hai hume aj bhi
Par fir Kyun hai abhi taak Hum main yeh Fasle.......


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«Reply #1 on: May 20, 2010, 10:07:38 PM »
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GOOD ONE NEEL GOLD Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #2 on: May 20, 2010, 11:23:03 PM »
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bahut bahut sundar. Bahut khoob likha hai aapne Neel ji. Bahut achcha laga padh ke. bahut dard hai isme. par fir bhi bahut pyaara hai. bahut khoob. yunhi likhte rahiye...!!!
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«Reply #3 on: May 20, 2010, 11:51:56 PM »
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Wah wah Neel ji,bahut dard aur khoobsurti se apne ehsaaso ko bayaan kiya .great creation. Hats off to you! Hats off to you! Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Thumbs UP
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«Reply #4 on: May 21, 2010, 12:04:15 AM »
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Thnx Sheeba !!!!!!!!!!
Thnx 4 ur tym.........

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«Reply #5 on: May 21, 2010, 12:05:01 AM »
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Thnx Kapil Ji !!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Relly appre......
Bhut shukriya aap ki tarif ka

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bahut bahut sundar. Bahut khoob likha hai aapne Neel ji. Bahut achcha laga padh ke. bahut dard hai isme. par fir bhi bahut pyaara hai. bahut khoob. yunhi likhte rahiye...!!!
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«Reply #6 on: May 21, 2010, 12:05:49 AM »
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Thnx Madhu ji ............

bhut sara thnxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

Quote from: madhuwesh on May 20, 2010, 11:51:56 PM
Wah wah Neel ji,bahut dard aur khoobsurti se apne ehsaaso ko bayaan kiya .great creation. Hats off to you! Hats off to you! Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Thumbs UP
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«Reply #7 on: May 21, 2010, 12:32:25 AM »
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shabdon ki katilaana karigari

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«Reply #8 on: May 21, 2010, 12:49:56 AM »
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OfFo kya Andazz hai appka Tariff karne ka.......Naam nhi pata appka THEGRIMREAPER ji
bhut Khush ho gaye Hum......

Thnx A lot!!!!!!!!!!

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«Reply #9 on: May 21, 2010, 05:02:53 AM »
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NEEL JI BAHUT KHOOB!!!               

FASLE PAL ME SIMAT GAYE HOTE
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«Reply #10 on: May 21, 2010, 05:05:17 AM »
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Bahut khoob Neel Ji
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«Reply #11 on: May 21, 2010, 06:02:01 AM »
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Neel ji bahut achhi peshkash hai. Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
Quote from: neelgold on May 20, 2010, 09:16:48 PM
Tum se mil ke bhi kyun hum tum se na miley
kyun ab taak hai hum main yeh milon ke faasle

Shikayatein nahi hai ab zindagi se mujhe koi
Kyun fir bhi ab tak hai mujhe tum se kai Giley

Tanhayion ki chaadar odh ke so gaye hum tum
Kyun hum ne na tode aaj talak yeh silsile

Aahat bhi koi hoti hai to lagta hai ki tum ho
Kyun ab tak hai seene main yeh zalzale

Voh ek nazuk dor ka rista jode hai hume aj bhi
Par fir Kyun
Hum tum mil ke bhi aj talak nahi hai mile
Kyun hai abhi bhi milon ke yeh faasle

***Neel***


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«Reply #12 on: May 21, 2010, 02:55:08 PM »
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Bahut Bahut Khoob Neelji Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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«Reply #13 on: May 21, 2010, 10:12:53 PM »
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Bahaut bahaut sunder likha hai apne Neel jee... Applause
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«Reply #14 on: May 21, 2010, 10:22:47 PM »
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behadd umda peshkash hai,no doubt ..its a beautiful creation,and its a perfect ghazal from every aspects,there is no gramatical mistake n pronounsation of words every every thing is fit on its suitable place,and as i have been reading ur poetries i can say its ur one of the best work.xcellent.lekin thoda akhri shair main chook hogai,,i am not criticing u ,akhri shair main upar ki jo line hai it has lost its weight..kyun ke aap ne uss line main aapke doosre ashar main jitne words use kiye thhe usse ek do words ki izafe ki gunjaish thi lekin aap ne ek do words se badh kar words  istemal kiye hain ..bus iss pe thoda sa concentrate kijiega ,,aapki ghazal nayaab hojaegi..i was scaring 2 put suggesion coz i dnt knw either u mind or dnt mind ,i hav checkd ur profile but i hav not found ur e mail id there..its jst friendly suggestion. take care ..again i can say its perfect urdu shayeri..daad khobol kijiye..
Quote from: neelgold on May 20, 2010, 09:16:48 PM
Tum se mil ke bhi kyun hum tum se na miley
kyun ab taak hai hum main yeh milon ke faasle

Shikayatein nahi hai ab zindagi se mujhe koi
Kyun fir bhi ab tak hai mujhe tum se kai Giley

Tanhayion ki chaadar odh ke so gaye hum tum
Kyun hum ne na tode aaj talak yeh silsile

Aahat bhi koi hoti hai to lagta hai ki tum ho
Kyun ab tak hai seene main yeh zalzale

Voh ek nazuk dor ka rista jode hai hume aj bhi
Par fir Kyun
Hum tum mil ke bhi aj talak nahi hai mile
Kyun hai abhi bhi milon ke yeh faasle

***Neel***
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