Raavan nazero mei (CSET)

by MANOJ6568 on November 05, 2012, 07:36:13 PM
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raavan nazero mei sabKi raja tha auro se nyara
ram ke haatho raavan ,ram ko hi ho gaya pyara
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«Reply #1 on: November 05, 2012, 07:56:51 PM »
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Dear I think you should concentrate your effort in writing some good poem instead of these incomplete shers. It is because writing a full 5 verses Ghazal or even small Nazm need many folds effort than writing a single sher, so I suggest you to polish your skill and start trying a Ghazal, Nazm or something more than 2 lines.

Good luck.
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«Reply #2 on: November 05, 2012, 08:12:59 PM »
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Quote from: CIC on November 05, 2012, 07:56:51 PM
Dear I think you should concentrate your effort in writing some good poem instead of these incomplete shers. It is because writing a full 5 verses Ghazal or even small Nazm need many folds effort than writing a single sher, so I suggest you to polish your skill and start trying a Ghazal, Nazm or something more than 2 lines.

Good luck.
THX FOR GUIDING ME
MUJHE SHER BAHUT PASAD HAIN,BADI CHIZo KE CHAKKER MEI INSAAN CHOTI CHOTI CHIZE BHUL JAATA HAI,BADI jABHI LIKHI JAYEGI JAB AAP CHOTI LIKHANA SHIKH LEGE
 aisa nahi hain mei gazel nahi likhata,meine wo bhi likhi hain


mei ek astrologer bhi hu,mere clint mujse khush hai kyuki mei unhe chote chote upaye hi batata hu
 isiliye chote bade ke chakker mei mat pado,jo accha lage wo likhna chahiye,aisa mera manna hai.

sher koi bhi incomplete nahi hota,likhne wala use apne bhav se likhta hai aur padne wala use apne bhav se padta hai

sorry yadi aapko meri baat buri lagi ho
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«Reply #3 on: November 05, 2012, 08:24:34 PM »
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Mujhe aapki baat buri nahi lagi, balki kayi logo ko lagi, ab kaun kahe... kaun kahe.. so maine kah diya.


Fitrat zamane ki aise rahi,
Goya, humko hi fitrati bana diya..

Hope you can get the poetic essence of sher I just wrote

Good Luck !
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«Reply #4 on: November 05, 2012, 08:34:39 PM »
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Quote from: CIC on November 05, 2012, 08:24:34 PM
Mujhe aapki baat buri nahi lagi, balki kayi logo ko lagi, ab kaun kahe... kaun kahe.. so maine kah diya.


Fitrat zamane ki aise rahi,
Goya, humko hi fitrati bana diya..

Hope you can get the poetic essence of sher I just wrote

Good Luck !
i under stand
shuru shuru mei meine yoindia pe hikisi ke sher ki tarriff
sher ke roop mei hi kari,afsos logo ne ulta matlab nikala,kaafi ulta sidha mere baare mei likha,yakin na ho to wo post mei aaj bhi padhwa sakta hu,kyuki wo sab yoindia pe hi hai.mujhe khud pe rona aaya,meine himmat nahi haari,aur apne dil ki baat mei yoindia pe likhta chala gaya
aur dost paacho anguliya baraber nahi hain,aap kisi ke liye acche ho to kisi ke liye bure bhi hoge.so wo karo jo dil ko accha kage,kisi ke dil ko takleeff naho bus ye dhayan mei jarur rakhta hu
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«Reply #5 on: November 06, 2012, 03:20:30 AM »
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bahut khoob
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«Reply #7 on: November 06, 2012, 07:21:54 AM »
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very nice manoj ji
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Quote from: aqsh on November 06, 2012, 03:20:30 AM
bahut khoob
thx
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bahut badhiya manoj.@@ do line me likho ya dus line me. Ager likha acha hain to sab  khush
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very nice manoj ji
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bahut badhiya manoj.@@ do line me likho ya dus line me. Ager likha acha hain to sab  khush
very very thanx

her shayer ki khawish hai ke wo accha likhe
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«Reply #13 on: November 07, 2012, 12:36:01 PM »
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very very thanx

her shayer ki khawish hai ke wo accha likhe

aapki do lines hume to bahut achi lagti hai..umeed hai aur bhi bahut padhne mile
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Quote from: samnoj on November 07, 2012, 12:36:01 PM
aapki do lines hume to bahut achi lagti hai..umeed hai aur bhi bahut padhne mile
hausla afsai ke kiye tahe dil se sukriya
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