Shudhh Hindi Kavita Thread : Deshbhakit pe

[Ricky]

I hope its clear from the Title.
Yes this is about posting 4-8 lines on Deshbhakti but in TRUE HINDI , no urdu or any other language in it.  Ofcourse you can type in English but should be Shuddh Hindi.

I will start soon but would love to see if someone else can initiate.

[Talat]

Would love to see the contributions...though i wont be able to write as I dont have good command over shuddh hindi

[Roja]

I hope its clear from the Title.
Yes this is about posting 4-8 lines on Deshbhakti but in TRUE HINDI , no urdu or any other language in it.  Ofcourse you can type in English but should be Shuddh Hindi.

I will start soon but would love to see if someone else can initiate.

Good thought Mr Ricky .... Let me try this TRUE HINDI.
( Friends... Plz Do comment. ....)

घर घर मैं अपने बच्चों से कहो...

कहानियां वीर शहीदों की सुनाओ आज हिंदी मैं
जिन विभूतियों ने हिंदुस्तान को ग़ुलामी से निकाला है
चिराग़ उनकी यादों के जलाओ आज हिंदी मैं

हिंदुस्तान हमारी दुनिया मैं महान है
हिंदी के वास्ते ये मेरी जान भी क़ुरबान है

बापू की ये आकाशगंगा फैली जवाहर की फुलवारी तक
हिमाला सा सीना ताने है ये कश्मीर से कन्याकुमारी तक
भगत सिंग आज़ाद सुभाष की ये क्रांति की एक मशाल है
सरोजनी के मन मैं बसी ये इंदिरा गाँधी के बेकरारी तक
"रोज़ा",  हिंदी के गर्व का तिरंगे को अभीमान है
हिंदी के वास्ते ये मेरी जान भी क़ुरबान है...

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Ghar ghar main apne bachchon se kaho...

Gaathaye Veer Shahidon ki sunao aaj hindi main
Jin vibhutiyon ne Hindustan ko gulami se nikala hai
Chiraag unki yaadon ke jalao aaj hindi main

Hindustan hamari dunia main mahan hai
Hindi ke vaste ye meri jaan bhi kurbaan hai

Bapu ki ye aakashganga faili Jawahar ki fulwari tak
Himala sa seena tane hai ye Kashmir se Kanyakumari tak
Bhagat singh Aajad Shubash ki ye kranti ki ek mashal hai
Sarojini ke mann main basi ye Indira Gandhi ke bekarari tak
"Roja",  Hindi ke garv ka tirange ko abhi man hai
Hindi ke vaste ye meri jaan bhi kurbaan hai...[/color][/size]

[Ricky]

You wrote a nice Poem but unfortunately its not that Hindi which I was talking about.
By Shudhh Hindi I meant to use those words which are specific to Hindi only, nor even Hindi-urdu common words.
Your poem is surely having a touch of urdu at many places but still I am glad your tried first.

[Talat]

Very good Roja =D>

Though I agree, words like Chiraagh, qurban, bekarari are urdu words but still a very good try !  

[Roja]

You wrote a nice Poem but unfortunately its not that Hindi which I was talking about.
By Shudhh Hindi I meant to use those words which are specific to Hindi only, nor even Hindi-urdu common words.
Your poem is surely having a touch of urdu at many places but still I am glad your tried first.

Mr Ricky.. jaise aapne point out kiya... haan urdu beech beech main
aagaya   I will again try to create in Shuddhh Hindi ...  :lol:

[Roja]

Very good Roja =D>

Though I agree, words like Chiraagh, qurban, bekarari are urdu words but still a very good try !  

Shukhriya Talat ... I was not knowing that words like
Hindustan and bekarari etc... are urdu?    Anyway again
sometime in near future shall try again and again ...  :D

[Ricky]

I wrote this poem on this 15th August but never posted as I felt it not upto the mark.

But now posting as I have to initiate, it is in Shuddh Hindi.

Bharat maa tujhe pranaam

O maa teri hum santaan
Tune jo diya hume ..
Teri har den k liye tujhe Pranaam

Teri hi goad humari palanhaar
Natmastak hum tere
Maa ki mamta apaar

O maa tujhse hai prarthna
Ek sur me hum fir bandhe
Gunje fir ekta ki garjana

Jaise pushp sare ek daal k wasi
ke antarman mein ho sada
deshprem ki bhawna aisi

Kartavya sae naa koi hathe pare
Desh hith desh samman hetu
Nagrik harr ek desh ka aage bare !!

Kare raksha, na bache koi vyatha
Bharat maa ke hridaya mile sukh
Har aur gunje bass yahi naveen gatha !!

Dharam Jati se upar
O maa ho akela tera hi naam..
Bharat maa tujhe pranaam !!

[Roja]

You made it Mr Ricky... Thought little tough i felt while reading
but dil bahut khush hua ji..... Maa Tujhe Salam....
Daad Hazir hai..

[Roja]

My second trial.... Shudhh Hindi ka.... :lol: (Your Comments Plz)

Dekho sare jag ke desho
Bharat ki sena ko dekho
Khadi huyi simaper hai ye
Apne pran nuchavar karne
Dekho sare jag ke desho

Bharat ki ekta ko dekho
Sare hindu, muslim, sikh esayi
Kehte ek dujhe ko bhai-bhai
Kaise khade huwe hai dekho
Apana seena taan ke
Dekho sare jag ke desho

Is desh ke vatavaran ko dekho
Vayu, Jal aur Sthal hai dete
Gavahi iske shurya ki
Dekho sare jag ke desho

Is desh ke ethihas ko dekho
Ek ek panna cheekkar
Kehta hai dharti hai balidan ki
Aao aankhein faad ker dekho
Kaise dushmano ko hai bhagaya
Jo is mitti ko chuyega
Vo mitti mein milaya jayega
Dekho sare jag ke desho.......[/color][/size]

[Ricky]

Nice attempt Roja this time.
I am happy that you are successful this time. liked you effort.

[Roja]

Nice attempt Roja this time.
I am happy that you are successful this time. liked you effort.

    .... Yes i made it..and got your comments...Thanks  

[Ricky]

So no one else tried!

I found my this thread again via "More Similar Poetry and Posts" .
I will try to go more Hindi on Deshbhakti soon!

[Shikha12]

Nice Idea for a thread.. Ricky...

And Good work too Ricky and Roja..

[zakhmola]

main man ko kaisey samjhaaun
kyon bhatak raha hai yeh nirmohi
har chinta ko chita banata
har aahat sey mujhey darata

sukh sab mere irshya le jaati

dukh baney ab sangi-saathi

main man ko kaisey samjhaun
kyon bhatak raha hai yeh nirmohi

vytha suno koyi meri bhi
mujko meri raah bata do
bhatak raha hai kyon mann mera
mujko koyi aaj bata do...

main man ko kaise samjhaun...