VEER-GAATHA

by jannatjahan on March 23, 2009, 03:53:07 PM
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Paanv chuye maa ke
gale baap ke ja laga
diya vidaai behno ne
bandha hath me kala dhaga,

         kadam badhata  aage
         dil piche dhakelta tha
         phir bhi badhta tha wo aage
         par piche kuch chutata tha,

apni gali se nikalte hi
ped ke oat me chipi mili thi
nam aankhon se dekhti thi usko
sard ke dhup si wo khili thi

          bahon me bhar ke shish par uske
          usne halka chumban dhara tha
          "jaldi aaiyao" kaha tha usne
          swar me uske kampan bada tha,

dur talak jane par bhi wo
piche mud kar dekh raha tha
lautunga ya nahi in galiyon me
apne aap se puch raha tha

         suru ho gayee thi jung
         insaan insaan ko kaat rahe the
         khun bahate apne bhaiyon ka
         dard ek duje ko baant rahe the

wo bhi ho gaya tha saamil
haiwaniyat ke is khel me
jane kaisi ranjeesein nikalte the ve
chand minato ke mel me

         lason pe lasein bichti thi
         khun ki dhara beh nikli
         tha dehsat ka aisa manjar
         ruhon ki bhi ruh hili

darjano goliyaan kha kar bhi wo
apni jeed me ada raha
"DHARTI MAA" ki aan bachane
ranbhumi me pada raha

         jism ka aakhri khun bhi
         usne maa ke naam kiya
         anth samay bhi uth kar usne
         tirange ko salam kiya

so gaya maa ki god me
wo bharat ratna aanke meeche
khwabon ko band kar mutthi me
chala gaya mutthi bheenche

         uski galiyan, maa ka aanchal
         baap ki lathi bula rahi thi
         aur "DHARTI MAA" laal ko apne
         god me rakh kar sula rahi thi

       
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«Reply #1 on: March 23, 2009, 03:59:10 PM »
wah jannat,  bahut dil koh chu gayi aap yeh kavita, bahut pyare thang sey aap ney bayaan ki hai


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«Reply #2 on: March 23, 2009, 04:25:08 PM »
Wah! Wah! Wah!!! Bahut Bahut Khoob Jannat..Sach mein dil ko chuu gayi yeh kavita.. Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #3 on: March 23, 2009, 08:14:24 PM »
Tumhare is likhe ko Ghayel koti koti pranam karta hain. Aur salam karta hain un Bharat ke Jawano ko jo haste haste apni dharti ma ke liye apni jaan de dete hain, aur hamari hifazat karte hain. Aao hum sab milkar kahe JAI HIND
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«Reply #4 on: March 24, 2009, 06:35:21 AM »
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«Reply #5 on: March 24, 2009, 10:44:28 AM »
Wah wah Bahoot khoob Janat ji . Super lines with lots of emotions on it.
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«Reply #6 on: March 24, 2009, 10:59:00 AM »
Tumhare is likhe ko Ghayel koti koti pranam karta hain. Aur salam karta hain un Bharat ke Jawano ko jo haste haste apni dharti ma ke liye apni jaan de dete hain, aur hamari hifazat karte hain. Aao hum sab milkar kahe JAI HIND
Aapki is hausala afjai ke liye bahut bahut shukriya ghayal ji  "JAI HIND"
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«Reply #7 on: March 24, 2009, 11:33:17 AM »
Nice One, Jannat Ji !
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«Reply #8 on: March 25, 2009, 01:15:07 PM »
wah jannat,  bahut dil koh chu gayi aap yeh kavita, bahut pyare thang sey aap ney bayaan ki hai


jasbir singh
Wah! Wah! Wah!!! Bahut Bahut Khoob Jannat..Sach mein dil ko chuu gayi yeh kavita.. Applause Applause Applause Applause
khubsurat
Wah wah Bahoot khoob Janat ji . Super lines with lots of emotions on it.
Nice One, Jannat Ji !
thanks aap sabhi ka , mujhe yun hi encourage karte rahiye.
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«Reply #9 on: March 25, 2009, 01:28:25 PM »
Bahut khoob Seema dear  Applause Applause
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«Reply #10 on: March 25, 2009, 01:48:46 PM »
Bahut khoob Seema dear  Applause Applause
Thanks dear but i m not seema yaaaaarrrrrrrr
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«Reply #11 on: March 25, 2009, 02:10:17 PM »
Thanks dear but i m not seema yaaaaarrrrrrrr

Welcome dear..(seema)ooh nahi nahi... Jaanat ...tongue3
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«Reply #12 on: March 31, 2009, 06:12:24 AM »
bahoot bahoot khoob likha hai aapne ek foji kee vidaayee par ghar walo kee bhavnaao ko bakhoobee pesh kiyaa hai.....

netra.....

de deti hai vidayee koi apne hee laal ko
muskaraa kar chipa leti hai ansuon ko

ek maa ko chod gyaa uskaa wo laal koi
chal pada karj chukaane ek mahaan koi

wo ayegaa lot kar yaa saheed ho jayegaa
apnee shadaahat ko wo yaad dilaayegaa
bhool jayenge sab us anjaan  ko, kyaa...
Maa kee kurbaanee ko kya koi yad kar payegaa?



netra..
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«Reply #13 on: April 01, 2009, 01:36:02 AM »
bahoot bahoot khoob likha hai aapne ek foji kee vidaayee par ghar walo kee bhavnaao ko bakhoobee pesh kiyaa hai.....

netra.....

de deti hai vidayee koi apne hee laal ko
muskaraa kar chipa leti hai ansuon ko

ek maa ko chod gyaa uskaa wo laal koi
chal pada karj chukaane ek mahaan koi

wo ayegaa lot kar yaa saheed ho jayegaa
apnee shadaahat ko wo yaad dilaayegaa
bhool jayenge sab us anjaan  ko, kyaa...
Maa kee kurbaanee ko kya koi yad kar payegaa?



netra..

Thanks netra ji....

sahi likha hai aapne koi un maaon ki kurbaniyon ko yaad nahi rakhta...

kyun bhul jate hain sab wo khuni manjar
kya dil nahi rah gaya insano ke ander Huh???
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«Reply #14 on: April 09, 2009, 02:09:46 PM »
Subhan Allah, Subahn Allah, Kya Khoob Likha Hai jannat Jahana Ji,.
And Nice Netra Bhai,.
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