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I am not a teacher, but still wanna share what I feel... Coz some of new members write Very Well but some writes without legs and tails ... I appreciate their effort but the Effort made without good techniques will not be recognize in future.
I don’t want to Name them but yes wanted to guide them. I am asking you all Members to contribute your Lesson here so that New Members those who are not aware of it can learn it from you!
Firstly I wanna say, Yes Shayari , poetry and Kavita is written by heart but still it needs a Rhythm and techniques....
I hope you will agree with my point...
When I had joined Yoindia that time I was also not aware of it... When somebody try to teach me I feel really bad those days but soon I realised feeling bad will make me dumb for ever but If I will try to learn I will sure do better in future ..
I am still trying to learn something new and for that I read others poetry and see they way that shayari , poetry or Kavita written..
So if you are doesn't know how to write with a proper techniques I will request you to read others poetry first read atleast 5 poetry, shayari or Kavita of others and learn from them.
Because I have seen many people just try to match up last words.
For Eg:- "Tu Yaar Mera Rutana fasana ho gaya
Main thak gaya aur tu Mera parwana ho gaya"
Something like this ... So there is no match up in first line and second line but some of the New Members just try to match up the last words.
This thread is for all of you as well for me too ... I too wanna learn.
Those who want to learn and want to teach some of their good points you are requested to post your guidelines...
Don't take it personally but I request you all to take it positively and participate with write attitude...
Thanking you!
Sophi
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«Reply #1 on: January 25, 2010, 02:28:36 PM » |
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WHY ONLY NEW MEMBERS..
WE OLD MEMBERS LIKE ME ALSO CANT WRITE PROPERLY..
PLEASE ALWAYS CORRECT US WHERE EVER WE ARE WORNG..
AND I WILL BE THE MOST HAPPY IF SOMEBODY CORRECT ME..
OTHERWISE HOW WILL WE COME TO KNOW WE ARE WRIGHT OR WRONG..
AGAR LIKHNA JARURI HAI
TOH PEHLE SIKHNA JARURI HAI..
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«Reply #2 on: January 25, 2010, 02:38:33 PM » |
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This thread is for All who wanna learn things !
Sabse pehle tho aap hi aao aapki jayada shikayat aa rahi hai ki kuch aap sabki thread pe Kuch bhi likh kar chale jaate ho ...
I will suggest you.. Kuch bhi likhne ya post karne se pehle usko pado aur samjo ki aapne kya likha hai.. kya iska koi matlab hai....ya nahi...
Hope you understand what I am guiding you here !
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«Reply #3 on: January 25, 2010, 02:44:01 PM » |
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YES MADAM I UNDERSTOOD..
AND PLEASE CORRECT ME WHEN EVER I AM WRONG..
AAJ AAPKE THREAD MEIN "YA KHUDA YEA KAISA MANZAR HAI" ME RPLY DIYA HAI ..
ZARA USME BHI CHECK KIJIYE KUCH GALTI HAI KYA..PLEASE..
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«Reply #4 on: January 25, 2010, 02:47:10 PM » |
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YES MADAM I UNDERSTOOD..
AND PLEASE CORRECT ME WHEN EVER I AM WRONG..
AAJ AAPKE THREAD MEIN "YA KHUDA YEA KAISA MANZAR HAI" ME RPLY DIYA HAI ..
ZARA USME BHI CHECK KIJIYE KUCH GALTI HAI KYA..PLEASE..
Main Galtiyaan bataun.. Usse Pehle Aap Jara Usse Khud pado aur samjo ki kya galti hai... |
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«Reply #5 on: January 25, 2010, 02:50:34 PM » |
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Verry nice n very true sophi ji yo need this..yahan kayi ache shayar hai per unhe lafzo ko sahi tarah se pirone mein kayi baar taklif hoti,jaisa ki apne kaha apko shuru mein hoti thi waise hi mujhe bhi hoti hai kayi shayri's ko complete karne mein kaafi waqt lag jata hai sahi alfaz na milne ki wajah se,per apne dosto ki shayri padhti ya internet pe search karti hu aur tab apni shayari ko poora karti hu aur post karti hu..aur mujhe sophiji k iss thread ki maddat se shayri se related baate sikhne ko milengi aur jitna mujhe malum hai main bhi zarur share karungi...ALL THE BEST all of u...
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«Reply #6 on: January 25, 2010, 02:57:18 PM » |
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Main Galtiyaan bataun.. Usse Pehle Aap Jara Usse Khud pado aur samjo ki kya galti hai...
YES MADAM MUJHE LAGA KI AAKHRI PARAGRAPH ME GADBAD HAI DEKHIYE TOH MAENE USKO DELETE KARDIYA HAI... AB ZARA AAP CHECK KIJIYE .. NAHI TOH PURA DELETE KAR DETE HAI... |
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«Reply #7 on: January 25, 2010, 03:16:55 PM » |
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YA KHUDA YEA KAISA MANZAR HAI
SAAMNE DONO KE SAMANDAR HAI
PHIR BHI PYAAS USKE ANDHAR HAI - PYAAS MERE ANDHAR HAI
YA KHUDA YEA KAISA MANZAR HAI
ARMAAN DONO KE DIL KE ANDHAR HAI
PHIR BHI DIL USKA BANZAR HAI - DIL MERA BANZAR HAI This Written By Cara ... Its Nice ... It Could be More better.. I want others to comment on this .. Please Give your suggestions... |
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«Reply #8 on: January 25, 2010, 03:25:04 PM » |
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YA KHUDA YEA KAISA MANZAR HAI
SAAMNE DONO KE SAMANDAR HAI
PHIR BHI PYAAS USKE ANDHAR HAI - PYAAS MERE ANDHAR HAI...WRITTEN BY CARA JI...
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Ya khuda ye kaisa manzar hai,
saamne dono k samander hi samander hai,
chah k bhi vo apne labo ki pyas ko bujha nhi pa rhe,
jo mhbt ki pyas aaj un dono k ander hai...
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«Reply #9 on: January 25, 2010, 03:31:03 PM » |
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YA KHUDA YEA KAISA MANZAR HAI
ARMAAN DONO KE DIL KE ANDHAR HAI
PHIR BHI DIL USKA BANZAR HAI - DIL MERA BANZAR HAI..WRITTEN BY CARA JI..
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Ya khuda ye kaisa manzar hai,
armaan dono k dilo k ander hai,
ugg tou raha hai pyar ka paudha unke beech..
phir bhi riwazo ki qaid se dil unka banjar hai......
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«Reply #10 on: January 25, 2010, 03:34:07 PM » |
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YA KHUDA YEA KAISA MANZAR HAI
SAAMNE DONO KE SAMANDAR HAI
PHIR BHI PYAAS USKE ANDHAR HAI - PYAAS MERE ANDHAR HAI...WRITTEN BY CARA JI...
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Ya khuda ye kaisa manzar hai,
saamne dono k samander hi samander hai,
chah k bhi vo apne labo ki pyas ko bujha nhi pa rhe,
jo mhbt ki pyas aaj un dono k ander hai...
BROKENBYLUV JI... AAPNE BAHUT ACHHA LIKHA HAI.. KYA KARUN ME AAP KA LIKHA KAISE LIKH SAKHTA HUN... MUJHE KYA APNA LIKHA DELETE KARNA HOGA..? |
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«Reply #11 on: January 25, 2010, 03:37:42 PM » |
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Thnx cara ji..aur apko apni post ko delete karne ki zarurat nhi hai balki jaise maine alfazo k istemaal se ise badla hai aap bhi badal sakte hai aur behtar tarike se likh sakte hai..koshish kijiye aap kar sakenge..kyun sophiji sahi kaha na maine???
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«Reply #12 on: January 25, 2010, 03:41:18 PM » |
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@ Geet - Thanks for guiding him and You have written Very Nice !
@ Cara - No need to delete anythings... but next time when you write try to do better ... You will learn it...
And keep reading others poetry - Its the best way to learn !
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«Reply #13 on: January 25, 2010, 03:50:45 PM » |
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Thnx cara ji..aur apko apni post ko delete karne ki zarurat nhi hai balki jaise maine alfazo k istemaal se ise badla hai aap bhi badal sakte hai aur behtar tarike se likh sakte hai..koshish kijiye aap kar sakenge..kyun sophiji sahi kaha na maine???
THANKS BROKENBYLUV JI... AINDA ME DYAN DIUNGA.. MERI EK KHARAB AADAT HAI JO ME KABHI PEHLE PAPER ME NAHIN LIKHTA HUN SIDA YAHIN PAR LIKHKAR POST KARDETA HUN... AAGE SE PEHELE ME ROUGH WORK KARKE ALAG ALAG DANG SE LIKHKAR DEKHUNGA PHIR JO ACHHA LAGEGA LIKHUNGA... MEH AAPKA AUR SOPHI JI KA MATLAB SAMAJH GAYA... THANKS BOTH OF YOU... ME SUDAR JAAUNGA... |
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«Reply #14 on: January 25, 2010, 04:46:09 PM » |
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Ur welcome n thnx to u to ki aap koshish karenge koshishe aksar kamyab hoti hai..all the best n hope to c ur better n new way of writtng....
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