Let's Teach and Learn the Techniques of Shayari !

by deepika_divya on January 25, 2010, 02:03:40 PM
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madhuwesh
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«Reply #15 on: January 26, 2010, 02:00:26 AM »
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Thank you so much Sophi ji,bahut acha thread open kiya aapne.humein bhi seekhne ko milegi. Thumbs UP
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deepika_divya
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«Reply #16 on: January 26, 2010, 08:37:39 AM »
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Thank you Madhu and Difinitely this thread will teach to all of us ..

@ Thank you Kaash ji and thanks for your valuable points...
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brokenbyluv
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«Reply #17 on: January 28, 2010, 01:22:03 PM »
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Origanlly posted by koyal..
Quote from: KOYAL46 on January 28, 2010, 09:08:26 AM

Zamaane ne kab roka hai,aur kaun ab rukta hai
Beeta kal bhula dena bhi kya itnaa aasaan hai...
 Giggle Giggle Giggle Giggle Giggle

Waade pe uske pura etbaar nahi hai tujhe shayad
Kya Yahi jheejhak hai,jazbaat-e-ikraar naa karne ki


I want every1 to write their views on this shayri...ki kis trh ise behtar banaya jaa sakta hai..this will help all of us to teach more...
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cara
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«Reply #18 on: January 28, 2010, 02:35:25 PM »
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Quote from: brokenbyluv on January 28, 2010, 01:22:03 PM
Origanlly posted by koyal..
I want every1 to write their views on this shayri...ki kis trh ise behtar banaya jaa sakta hai..this will help all of us to teach more...


BEETA KAL BHULNA AASAN HOTA TO HAM NAHIN UNKE LIYE RUKTE
WAADON PAR BHI TO ETHBAAR NAHIN HAI UNKE
ISILIYE TO  JAZBAAT-E-IKRAAR NAHI KARTE..

PLEASE..DEKHIYE BEHTAR BANA HAI KI US SEY BHI KHARAB BANA HAI...
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brokenbyluv
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«Reply #19 on: January 28, 2010, 03:20:20 PM »
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ORIGANALLY POSTED BY CARA JI..

BEETA KAL BHULNA AASAN HOTA
TO HAM NAHIN UNKE LIYE RUKTE,
WAADON PAR BHI TO ETHBAAR NAHIN HAI UNKE
ISILIYE TO  JAZBAAT-E-IKRAAR NAHI KARTE..

waah bahut hi khoob cara ji...
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deepika_divya
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«Reply #20 on: January 28, 2010, 03:38:02 PM »
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Well try.. But I feel still Need Some corrections ... What Say Guys ?
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cara
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«Reply #21 on: January 29, 2010, 02:22:42 PM »
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Quote from: Sophi on January 28, 2010, 03:38:02 PM
Well try.. But I feel still Need Some corrections ... What Say Guys ?


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SOPHI JI...PLEASE CORRECT IT WHERE IT IS NEEDED...
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deepika_divya
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«Reply #22 on: January 30, 2010, 12:43:30 PM »
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Zamaane ne kab roka hai,aur kaun ab rukta hai
Beeta kal bhula dena bhi kya itnaa aasaan hai...


Waade pe uske pura etbaar nahi hai tujhe shayad
Kya Yahi jheejhak hai,jazbaat-e-ikraar naa karne ki

Its written by Koyal... I like her creation .. But the correction made by cera was not that much correct But atleast he tried .  Applause ( My View)

Secondly Koyal's second sher was Good .. I dont feel any changes required in that one but in first one I would suggest her this below correction :-

zamaane ne kab tumko roka hai, aur kahe se kon rukta hai
beeta kal bhula bhi do magar, aapki aankho mai dikhta hai

Or

zamaane ne kab tumko roka hai, aur kahne se kon rukta hai
Beet Chuka hai Jo Kal , Kaun Bhulane se Bhul sakta hai

What say ?
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brokenbyluv
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«Reply #23 on: January 31, 2010, 07:16:37 PM »
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nice sophiji...i was expecting more replies..but asusal members have no time for such threads  BangHead BangHead BangHead BangHead..

nyways..let me try also..

Zamaane ne kab roka hai,aur kaun ab rukta hai
Beeta kal bhula dena bhi kya itnaa aasaan hai...BY KOYAL...
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Zamane ne kab tumhe roka hai,
aur kaun kab kisi k kehne se rukta hai,
beeta kal bhula dena asan tou nhi..
per aaj hi hai jispe ye zamana jhukta hai......
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«Reply #24 on: February 01, 2010, 07:32:35 AM »
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ORIGINALLY POST BY KOYAL JI...


ZAMAANE NE KAB ROKA HAI,AUR KAUN AB RUKTA HAI
BEETA KAL BHULA DENA BHI KYA ITNA AASAN HAI
WAADE PE USKE PURA EITHBAR NAHI HAI TUJE SHAYAD
KYA YAHEE JHEEJHAK HAI JAZBAAT-E-IKRAAR NAA KARNE KI....

CARA'S POST...

BEETA KAL BHULANA AASAN HOTA
TOH HAM NAHIN UNKE LIYE RUKTE
WAADON PAR BHI TOH EITHBAAR NAHIN HAI UNKE
ISILYE TOH JAZBAAT-E-IKRAAR NAHIN KARTE....


SOPHI JI'S  POST...

ZAMAANE NE KAB TUMKO ROKA HAI,AUR KAHNE SE KON RUKTA HAI
BEETA KAL BHULA BHI DO MAGAR AAP KI AANKHO MAI DIKHTA HAI
WAADE PE USKE PURA EITHBAAR NAHIN HAI TUJE SHAYAD
KYA YAHI JEEJHAK HAI JAZBAAT-E-IKRAAR NAA KARNE KI...


BROKENBYLUV JI'S  POST...

ZAMANE NE KAB TUMHE ROKA HAI
AUR KAUN KAB KISI KE KAHNE SE RUKTA HAI
BEETA KAL BHULA DENA AASAN TOU NAHI
PER AAJ HI HAI JISPE YE ZAMAANA JHUKTA HAI...


AAJAO EXPERTS APNE APNE VICHAR RAKHO...
DARO MAT AAP KISIKE LIKHE HUE KO ACHHA YA KHARAB KAHE SAKHTE HO..
KOI BHI MANN MAIN NAHIN LENGA,AAP JABTAK NAHIN MISTAKES BATAOGE TOU HAM KAISE SUDARENGE...
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brokenbyluv
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«Reply #25 on: February 01, 2010, 05:19:44 PM »
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Quote from: cara on February 01, 2010, 07:32:35 AM
AAJAO EXPERTS APNE APNE VICHAR RAKHO...
DARO MAT AAP KISIKE LIKHE HUE KO ACHHA YA KHARAB KAHE SAKHTE HO..
KOI BHI MANN MAIN NAHIN LENGA,AAP JABTAK NAHIN MISTAKES BATAOGE TOU HAM KAISE SUDARENGE...



Mujhe nhi lagta yahan kisi k paas waqt hai in baato k liye..khair intezaar hai ki sab yahan apni raaye likhe...looking forward for ur commens members hum sab mil kar hi yo ko aur behtar bana sakte hai...come on...
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«Reply #26 on: February 01, 2010, 12:15:02 PM »
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thnx alot kaash ji....
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riyaz106
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«Reply #27 on: February 01, 2010, 12:25:52 PM »
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Hi everybody. Seekhne sikhane ka ye bahot achha silsila shuru kiya aap sab ne. Agar ijazat ho to main bhi kuchh seekhne ko shamil ho jaaun.
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«Reply #28 on: February 01, 2010, 12:26:44 PM »
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Shukriya Riyaz ji.. But isme puchne wali kya baat hai.. Come in !
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«Reply #29 on: February 01, 2010, 12:29:42 PM »
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Pahle knock karna achha hota hai. Khair permission ka shukriya.
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