Betrayal------please critique:Shayeri for Dard -e- Bewafai

unicorn_girl

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why did you do this to me?
broke my heart
and tore it apart
I trusted you
more than anyone else
you turned out
to be liar
and made my life
worst than the hell
you promised me to
be with me
……..always
but instead Turned your
back at me
when I needed you the
most
The memories of the
beautiful days
you just burnt it ablaze
you were the person
I always loved
you were my beloved.
But you betrayed me
now I have lost the grip
on my heart and my life
I can never trust anybody
just because you did this to me
I don’t know why ??
Today I hate you like
anything .
just go away from my life
I will never let you enter it again
because I want to survive


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harashmahajan

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Betrayal------please critique

«Reply #1 on: July 17, 2005, 12:58:37 PM »

Unicorn....It seems you are extremely hurt....this prosetic views said everything.........lovely write.....be patient.....I have this poem for this topic...

Pros N Cons

“Everybody is going—out of my reach”,
--Said like a Queen, who loves to teach.
I can’t understand her code of conduct,
She herself makes such, then tries to abduct.

Nobody knows her wit, nobody can guess,
Her own go away, what to say about the rest.
She always puts relations unduly to test,
Whether the time is to mourn or for the fest.

Sometimes becomes angry for nothing like things,
Sometimes turns happy on seeing small wings.
Her heart seems lovely, everybody knows well,
But her nature makes things more or less hell.

But I am still here to love her all,
Whenever she would feel low or fall.
I promised me well to keep her warm,
And accepted ‘She’ as mine with all Pros N Cons.

~~~~*HARASH MAHAJAN*~~~~


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unicorn_girl

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Betrayal------please critique

«Reply #2 on: July 17, 2005, 01:04:49 PM »

nothing like that.........just thought of writing such a kind , i dont even have a bf to get hurt in such a way........lol and yeah thanks a lot harash for your concern and that wonderful pros n cons ...........again thanks a lot


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harashmahajan

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Betrayal------please critique

«Reply #3 on: July 17, 2005, 01:12:12 PM »

lolss...that I know....its just a poem...I answered you as poet for the topic concern........and thanks for your comments...........God bless you always....

always Harash


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