Fashion Hai

by Roja on September 22, 2007, 03:55:02 PM
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Pyar ka wada karke dhoka dena fashion hai

Apnapan ka ehsaas dilakar muker jana fashion hai

Wafa ko bewafa kehna fashion hai

Jalte dil pe phook dena fasion hai

Naram dilon ko haste haste kuchalna fashion hai

Samne se muskurakar peeche se war karna fashion hai

Fashion ki is nirali dunia main

"Roja"  ko poochega kaun?
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«Reply #1 on: September 22, 2007, 06:54:07 PM »
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You again tried different approach. Nice one, could have a better end though .
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«Reply #2 on: September 23, 2007, 12:09:26 AM »
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Accha... end aapko teek nahi laga?..
Aur accha likhne ka koshish karungi...
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«Reply #3 on: September 23, 2007, 06:03:20 AM »
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Ya, could have one more line in end to have a end with Rhyme.

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Pyar ka wada karke dhoka dena fashion hai
Apnapan ka ehsaas dilakar muker jana fashion hai
Wafa ko bewafa kehna fashion hai
Jalte dil pe phook dena fasion hai
Naram dilon ko haste haste kuchalna fashion hai
Samne se muskurakar peeche se war karna fashion hai
Fashion ki is nirali dunia main
"Roja" ko poochega kaun?
Kyunki dil dukhana hee toh Fashion hai


I added last line, just to show where I felt it missing something. May be someone or you can add better line or can have totally different sort of end.
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«Reply #4 on: September 23, 2007, 05:47:27 PM »
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Ya, could have one more line in end to have a end with Rhyme.

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Pyar ka wada karke dhoka dena fashion hai
Apnapan ka ehsaas dilakar muker jana fashion hai
Wafa ko bewafa kehna fashion hai
Jalte dil pe phook dena fasion hai
Naram dilon ko haste haste kuchalna fashion hai
Samne se muskurakar peeche se war karna fashion hai
Fashion ki is nirali dunia main
"Roja" ko poochega kaun?
Kyunki dil dukhana hee toh Fashion hai


I added last line, just to show where I felt it missing something. May be someone or you can add better line or can have totally different sort of end.


The added line is ok ...i mean felt nice..
but jaise aapne kaha mai last line change karke post karungi..
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«Reply #5 on: October 29, 2007, 01:07:59 PM »
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Bahoot Accha Topic Diya Hai Yaar Tumne,.
And Nice Job,.
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