kattiley nazarain:Shayeri for Dard -e- Bewafai

Badal85

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hey guys,
my first shayeri here...so plz let me know if u think i can improve on something

is taraf na dekh mujhe zalim,
shikayat tujjse nahi apni majboori sai hain

jis pal key liye hum apney puri zindagi jitey chaley
jis dil key liye hum sari duniya ko bhool gayay
us dil ki duniya kaisey khatam kerdey hum

jisney kisi our key liye mujhe he bhoola diya
ussey koi sikwa kya kerey hum
ussey koi ummed kya rakhey hum


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madhuwesh

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Re: kattiley nazarain

«Reply #1 on: March 28, 2010, 09:58:55 PM »

:welcome:Bahut achi koshish hai Badal ji,par aap aur bhi acha likh sakte hai.keep writting.welcome to yo. Applause


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Kanta

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Re: kattiley nazarain

«Reply #2 on: March 28, 2010, 10:01:19 PM »

Yes nice lines
Wel done, keep posting


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Rajesh Harish

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Re: kattiley nazarain

«Reply #3 on: March 29, 2010, 11:24:45 AM »

Nice lines Badal
Welcome to Yoindia


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Re: kattiley nazarain

«Reply #4 on: March 29, 2010, 09:33:45 PM »

Welcome to Yoindia Badal Ji... !!!

Nice lines... Clapping Smiley

keep writing...!!!


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neelgold

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Re: kattiley nazarain

«Reply #5 on: March 29, 2010, 09:40:35 PM »

Gud One!!!!!!!!!!!
I m also new 2 dis syt ... bt im doing wc u ..
u did ur post already i dnt 9 dis syt nt leting me post evrytym im gona post sumthng msg shows up ur nt allwd 2/ sum tym error

any ayz gud luck 2 u ... & keep psoting

Quote from: Badal85 on March 28, 2010, 09:45:19 PM


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